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Writers write what they know Jase, best strategy in the world. Perhaps good fortune will shine down on you and you can sell it. You have talent, I've told you that from the beginning.

Well it sounds great 3nodding If I find the book once it comes out I'll take a look into it, good luck smile

I give credit where credit is due. I fully intend to give thanks to you all for your characters. which is why I asked you if I could use them *hugs*

it's starting to look like a series. in the first draft, it ends with janus underestimating my character and losing a powerful magical item in teh process of trying to bribe him...then using the 'so you want to play rough, I can play rough' line. one of the villians gets the idea to betray his masters..and abacus is all but conquered, with the heroes left to try and figure out a way through the elven enchantments to thier lands to ask for aid they desperately need.

while the major plot is about defeating Janus and saving the world kinda thing, subplots include romances, powerlusting, and there's some theological twists to be revealed in the Shining City, that Janus/myself are trying to also get into for thier own purposes.

just for fun, here's the first page.

It was evening, and the priest was putting various relics in careful storage, handling the objects worth a king’s ransom with great reverence. The night was warm, but not humid and the occasional breeze through a window was welcome. The priest, concerned with the proper care of his relics did not notice the drop in temperature, or the gray mist that had begun to seep in under the double doors. The mist swirled about around and about the pillars at the front of the cathedral as well as over the pews becoming a knee-high fog before the priest noticed it. And as the priest turned slowly in both fear and curiosity, the cause stood before him. A tall, pallid man dressed in black, the design of his clothes a dark mockery of that worm by the warrior-priests who fought for the church. His hair was long and silver, and his eyes a cold, harsh gray. But the weapon at his side is what the priest feared most in this strange figure. For sixty years the priest had dismissed those weapons as things of myth, but now one was before him. It was a wraithblade. And at the side of a man…was it a man? That obviously had very little liking of the church. But such weapons were made to be used by angels, the steal and imprison the souls of the demons they confronted to protect man, not by mortals, and certainly not by the likes of this person. Even as the priest thought this, the blasphemous figure advanced towards the priest, who was involuntarily heading back towards the holy relics he believed, would protect him. As this dark man closed in on him, he drew the twisted serpentine blade from the simple leather sheath, made only long enough to support the blade so that it could be worn but seen and identified for what it was. The blade glowed with bands of black and red, and the priest swore he heard the whispered cries and pleas of those trapped within the twisted metal. The dark man lifted the blade in a salute; the skull on the handguard facing the priest in a mocking manner, and the priest fell to his knees and prayed in whispered words every prayer he knew in hopes of what he knew would come would somehow be averted. But the dark man simply lifted the blade, caring not for the priest’s prayers as he looked down on him. And in thunderous whisper his voice came cold and dark before the fatal lowering of the blade to say one sentence.
“Forgive me, Father, for I have sinned.”

*applause* Last sentence, loved it. Good hook, and just yay.

And this would be the time that I would show off my stuff...but well nothing's clean enough to put up...

Well some writers use to to make the first sentence (or few words) stand out so the read would be caught, this way it actually helps the reader get hook but on Word Perfect it looks smaller...but it does help from time to time it just depends on what you put, 3nodding

But since the first sentence is my hook I just think it's good to do put it like that 3nodding