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 Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 7:42 am
Weeamoo The-DJ-Ghost yup.... I made up my own lore... I'll post the profile and see what needs to be fixed. Well, just make sure these sorts of things don't become too liberal^w^ There's a reason we have this. While what we have available there is very general, getting too specific would simply lead to spoilers, and that's no-bueno. Anyway, it's profile time, and there are a couple things I'd like to mention: Profile: I'm actually a little curious. The wording of his Abilities sounds a lot more like magic that Knight Abilities, and you mention a contracted Knight in the Relationships. Did you perhaps mean to fill out a magus/Mage profile instead? No worries if he is a Knight, but I'd suggest keeping away from terms like cast, mana, etc. Deadly Fury: Sounds more like a B, in my opinion. History: Several Things: -The Old Demon King of Eldrin was not called Satan nor akin to the one commonly references. While these sorts of details aren't spelled out for all to see, these are the things that we have brewin' in the back for plot purposes and what-not. Apologetically, we prefer these sorts of things to go unmentioned for the sake of Guild-wide plot. -Sorry, who exactly did Azura fuse with? I currently can't see very well. x.x -Terra and Earth have only been fused for a matter of months and before that were wholly unrelated. Unfortunately, I don't believe the previous life could possibly be connected to to someone from Japan. Neither suggestion I could make for this is easy. I'd say either make his second self from Terra or find another way for the two to be related. >> Yeah, I wanted to make a mage at first, but when I got a good look at him, he didn’t seem mage material, more like a brawler. I’ll fix all that up. >> Sorry for assuming the plot. I kinda thought I could just whip up a story to better explain him, and didn’t think about if it got in the way of the RP plot. I can keep Eldrin king without a known name tho. >> He was forcefully fused with Urga and a skeleton demon. Urga’s a character from an old guild who I thought might be made into this story... all the characters in Azura’s story is from an old RP. >> So if that’s the case, can I instead change the humans into either Aasimars or Fae but for a separate kingdom? Kind of make Azura be like a fallen angel type Lucifer-esque demon? And I can change the story where Azura reincarnated as an orphan kid who was named Naoki and adopted to live like a human.
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Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 9:58 am
The-DJ-Ghost >> Yeah, I wanted to make a mage at first, but when I got a good look at him, he didn’t seem mage material, more like a brawler. I’ll fix all that up. >> Sorry for assuming the plot. I kinda thought I could just whip up a story to better explain him, and didn’t think about if it got in the way of the RP plot. I can keep Eldrin king without a known name tho. >> He was forcefully fused with Urga and a skeleton demon. Urga’s a character from an old guild who I thought might be made into this story... all the characters in Azura’s story is from an old RP. >> So if that’s the case, can I instead change the humans into either Aasimars or Fae but for a separate kingdom? Kind of make Azura be like a fallen angel type Lucifer-esque demon? And I can change the story where Azura reincarnated as an orphan kid who was named Naoki and adopted to live like a human. No worries. Lemme know when it's re-worded or fixed up or whatevs^^
Don't worry, it's not a problem. You're not the first person and won't be the last. If you'd like to keep him as part as the backstory, it's fine. Just keep meh baby nameless.
I figured it was part of another RP^w^
They can still have been human. There were humans around. This issue is with them simply being from Earth, and one's race does not determine what kingdom they're from.
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Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 12:37 pm
Weeamoo Thanks for the submission! Ah~ I love the ref! I think the main thing I want to address with Alwynn is his magic. A lot of spells don't really fall in line with your chosen school. Smite: The damaging power of pure mana like this is Evocation. Flight and Teleportation: Both more fitting in the school of Transmutation. Guardian Spirit and Resurrection: Both Conjuration. Telepathy and Fear: Both Enchantment. The unmentioned spells are ones I believe to be within the range of Illusion. My suggestion is that you either stick with these or multi-school; however, doing the latter would result in a sort of "jack of all trades" syndrome. He'd be able to cast lower-ranked spells in many schools but not higher-ranked ones. There are a couple ranks I'd like to mention as well, but I feel like we should sort out your spell list before those are addressed. To read up on magic, spells, and schools, please visit the Lore and World Book. Thanks, I nerfed 'em for ya. I thought flight was something natural for a fae, though? I read how ranks and stuff work, and I wasn't really sure how to make the spells "Worse" in a sense if he multi-schooled. Guess I bit off more than I could chew. Don't worry though, in hindsight, he was a little OP.
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Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 1:34 pm
Weeamoo Rah-Do-Sil hmm no but i can edit it in that it can be used again but becomes weaker after the initial use. So if you ever played pokemon ruby,sapphire, or emerald, think of it how "Overheat" works. Looses effectiveness with repeated use. Sure, that sounds fine. Once that's all set, I do believe it should be good to go. fixed as corrected
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Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 6:04 pm
Frostfleur Weeamoo Thanks for the submission! Ah~ I love the ref! I think the main thing I want to address with Alwynn is his magic. A lot of spells don't really fall in line with your chosen school. Smite: The damaging power of pure mana like this is Evocation. Flight and Teleportation: Both more fitting in the school of Transmutation. Guardian Spirit and Resurrection: Both Conjuration. Telepathy and Fear: Both Enchantment. The unmentioned spells are ones I believe to be within the range of Illusion. My suggestion is that you either stick with these or multi-school; however, doing the latter would result in a sort of "jack of all trades" syndrome. He'd be able to cast lower-ranked spells in many schools but not higher-ranked ones. There are a couple ranks I'd like to mention as well, but I feel like we should sort out your spell list before those are addressed. To read up on magic, spells, and schools, please visit the Lore and World Book. Thanks, I nerfed 'em for ya. I thought flight was something natural for a fae, though? I read how ranks and stuff work, and I wasn't really sure how to make the spells "Worse" in a sense if he multi-schooled. Guess I bit off more than I could chew. Don't worry though, in hindsight, he was a little OP. I wasn't necessarily asking for a "nerf", but either way.
Flight wouldn't be a spell considering such. His wings would make flight a Strength, not a spell. If you wanna add it there, that'd be great.
The explanation for the school proficiency is that spells take time to learn and understand. Devoting one's time to specialize in a school would make one more well-versed. That time, however, is taken up, so it can't really be devoted to other things. Kinda like school. High school is well-rounded but doesn't allow one to learn about neuro-surgery. That's what college is for. It's the same.
He wasn't so OP :3 Looks good so far, just add Flight to the Strengths, and you'll be all set to begin posting.
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Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 6:37 pm
Weeamoo No worries. Lemme know when it's re-worded or fixed up or whatevs^^
Don't worry, it's not a problem. You're not the first person and won't be the last. If you'd like to keep him as part as the backstory, it's fine. Just keep meh baby nameless.
I figured it was part of another RP^w^
They can still have been human. There were humans around. This issue is with them simply being from Earth, and one's race does not determine what kingdom they're from. Well I'm done. I fixed Naoki's mana to power, and Deadly Fury to B rank. As for the story, I did look all over, and made the proper changes. Hopefully, it's not too bad, where I mess up the lore or your future plots.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 11:43 am
Looks good to go. Feel free to create your character thread and begin posting! If your character is looking for magus to pair up with, then I would also suggest posting in Knight & Mage Pairings.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 11:47 am
The-DJ-Ghost Well I'm done. I fixed Naoki's mana to power, and Deadly Fury to B rank. As for the story, I did look all over, and made the proper changes. Hopefully, it's not too bad, where I mess up the lore or your future plots. Thank you! There's only one thing left, and that's that Naoki was in Japan several years ago which still isn't possible as it only ever "existed" several months ago. My suggestion would be to simply make him from Yuki no Okoku or have him become possessed by Azura's spirit in his time of struggle, that having granted him his powers.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 12:21 pm
Weeamoo The-DJ-Ghost Well I'm done. I fixed Naoki's mana to power, and Deadly Fury to B rank. As for the story, I did look all over, and made the proper changes. Hopefully, it's not too bad, where I mess up the lore or your future plots. Thank you! There's only one thing left, and that's that Naoki was in Japan several years ago which still isn't possible as it only ever "existed" several months ago. My suggestion would be to simply make him from Yuki no Okoku or have him become possessed by Azura's spirit in his time of struggle, that having granted him his powers. Oh... I can do that? Lol that just made my job a lot easier! One possessed Naoki coming up! Edit: Finished!
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 12:28 pm
Weeamoo Looks good to go. Feel free to create your character thread and begin posting! If your character is looking for magus to pair up with, then I would also suggest posting in Knight & Mage Pairings. a mage has already picked him as his knight lol
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 12:35 pm
Rah-Do-Sil a mage has already picked him as his knight lol Oh sweet. xD
Which character is that so I can update the thread properly.
Also, don't forget to update your profile with Magus and Unison Abilities here once you thought of them^w^
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 3:43 pm
Username: DragonMistress07
Name: Angelis Satome
Nickname: Angel or Sato
Race: Human
Ethnicity: Chinese
Gender: Male (often mistaken for a female)
Orientation: Asexual (But prefers men)
Alignment: N
Occupation: Librarian/Bookseller(gotta make money somehow, right?)
Age: 24
Birthday: February 14
Height: 6ft
Relationships:
❖ Serena Satome (adoptive mother-deceased)
Strengths:
✔ Gathering information
✔ Crazy Strong (someone has to carry the books and place them on shelves. Some of those books are heavy!)
✔ Eredic Memory (can retain large, and I do mean large, bouts of information)
Weaknesses:
✘ His temper(he often gets mistaken for a woman and it irritated him to no end. Especially if other men flirt with him! Not that he doesn't enjoy it, he just hates being mistaken for a woman)
✘ Anything sweet, especially chocolate (sorry to say it.)
✘ Curiosity (he has a habit of getting into things he shouldn't. It's usually accidental but still.)
Likes:
✔ Chocolate, of course!
✔ Books
✔ Tea (especially mint and jasmine)
✔ Systems (everything has to have an order, damn it! Disorganization is the bane of my existence!)
Dislikes:
✘ Very loud noises
✘ Disrespect (why should I respect you if you do not respect me?)
✘ Disorganization
✘ Being mistaken for a woman (it's annoying)
Personality:
❖ Angelis is calm, collected and often times unpredictable. He also has a bit of a temper but he's usually calm. He is also dedicated to his books and also determined. He would help anyone who needs it but only to those who really need it as he always seems to know when someone is up to no good and tends to avoid those types.
History:
❖ Angelis was found in a basket, floating down the river until his adoptive mother found him. He grew up in a happy and loving home with his mother, lots of books, and his best friend, a silver-winged hawk named Lume. As he grew older, he decided that he wanted to be a Librarian/Bookseller as he loved books and wanted other to enjoy them too. After a few months after his mother's death(died protecting him from bandits), he up and moved to the nearest city where he hoped to open a library where those can come to gather information or just pick up a good book as he seems them too.
Outfits:
❖ Sleepwear
❖ Regular Outfit
Items:
❖ Mother's Pendant
❖ Satchel (But instead of a bat, think of a silver hawk. Also, it had been magicked to hold almost anything. It was given to him by a witch who had no need for it so she gave it to Angelis as a present for helping her drive away bandits from her home.)
Other:
❖ He had an animal companion, not familiar, named Lume
Themes:
❖ Main Theme: I'm A Believer
❖ Battle Theme: No battle theme
❖ Emotional Theme: Imagination
Whew. Done. Lol.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 5:31 pm
Thanks for the submission! There are just a few things I wanna mention/ask:
1. Can someone have a preference as ace? o.o
2. If you plan on casting any sort of spells/magic with this character, then a magus profile needs to be filled out. Civilian profiles are for "normies". One isn't forced into combat simply for being a Knight or Mage.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 5:35 pm
The-DJ-Ghost Oh... I can do that? Lol that just made my job a lot easier! One possessed Naoki coming up! Edit: Finished! All set, then. Feel free to create your character thread and begin posting! If you're actively looking for a Mage, then I would suggest posting in the Knight and Mage Pairings or message someone still available there.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 8:17 pm
Weeamoo Rah-Do-Sil a mage has already picked him as his knight lol Oh sweet. xD
Which character is that so I can update the thread properly.
Also, don't forget to update your profile with Magus and Unison Abilities here once you thought of them^w^ Sinbad
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