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 Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:37 pm
"Okay, do you thin-" He was cut off by Roddy's upward cry, "He's here... Mantine!!! Hey, c'mere!!"
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:39 pm
Maddy smiled at both trainer and Pokemon. It was great to see someone having a good time. She lay back and looked up at the moon, a great silvery white orb hanging in the sky. "Ahh..."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:46 pm
The Mantine swam fast onto the shore, bouncing to get around in the beach, "Man- Mantine!!!" The pokemon cheered to be with the trainer it'd grown attached too. "Hey buddy, this is Maddy she came out here with me to train some, I wonder if you'd mind being one of my team." the Mantine bounced and nodded, he turned around and went back into the water. "Tine! Man-Mantine!" The pokemon called out to Arekku, Arekku mean while was suprized that Mantine knew that meant a battle. "Roddy, you're up!" Roddy balanced on his tail like a bobber.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:48 pm
"Good luck!" Maddy called out to Arekku. She watched as the fight began. It made her remember her first days with Aqua. Those were the good days, sort of. ^^
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:02 pm
Ginji hipped out a portal and landed on top of Maddy. As he crushed her, he smiled. "Long time no see beautiful." he then looked around a bit. "Oh look! A training mission!" he laughed.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:03 pm
Mantine made the first move with an impressive Water Gun That hit Roddy head on. It wasn't very effective so Roddy just shook it off and rolled up into a ball beginning his spin for a Rollout, which hit directly as Mantine tried to Bounce to dodge it, Mantine flew back in quite a bit of pain. Mantine wasn't finished just yet though, it spun around one quick time causing a Whirlpool attack and Roddy went directly into it, getting caught. Mantine siezed the oppertunity to use Bounce up high into the air and come down with paralyzing results. Roddy was done for. Mantine broke the Whirlpool and launched an Ice Beam attack which hit and caused Roddy to pass out. "Ugh! You're strong...." He withdrew Roddy and muttered something into the pokéball before switching and tossing Ven out above the water.
She came out, turned to Mantine who was launching a Water Gun just as she launched a Psybeam. The attacks met but canceled eachother out. Mantine had gone underwater and was right beneath Ven, and came up launching Ven into the air. Ven spun around at max height and used Stun Spore which Mantine came directly up into and was paralyzed. After Mantine was unable to finish it's attack Ven launched another Psybeam which directly and sent Mantine straight down into the water, belly flopping, Mantine seemed spent so arekku pulled a pokéball and tossed it at the big blue pokemon, it hit, and the pokemon inside stayed there. He knew Mantine was his, "YES!!! I got him!! Were you watching?" He turned to Maddy.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:06 pm
Maddy crawled out from under Ginji. "I was watching. Until someone decided to fall on me."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:09 pm
"Oh, you'll be fine." Ginji laughed as he looked at his surroundings, not noticing where they were for some reason. "Good job Arekku, unlike Maddy, I saw the whole thing." he joked as he half expected to be hit by the girl.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:11 pm
"Good for you! Anyways, I have to get going. It's getting late and I need sleep." She said with a yawn. "I'll see you all tomorrow, I suppose." With that, she disappeared in a brilliant flash of purple light and flame.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:14 pm
"Butbutbutbut, I wanted to DO something." Ginji whined as Maddy disappeared. When she was out of hearing range, as purple light portals carry a certain amount of sounds with them, he regained his composure. "So...what now?"
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:16 pm
"Oh, um... thanks Ginji" Ven returned to the ground with a very soft landing. "Venonat!" She cried and jumped into Arekku's arms. He checked his watch, "Crap! I gotta be somewhere!!" he ran passed Ginji and through the teleporter, "Bye!" he said right before he stepped through.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:26 pm
"O-kay?" Ginji looked back at the running boy. He had just gotten to the party, but it seemed that everyone was busy. May was always Crazy. It would lessen up after the 15th. He could feel it.
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Conservative Exhibitionist
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 9:21 pm
Cody popped his head into HQ, noticing that, yet again, no one was there. "Hola," he said, briskly strolling into the common room. Something had changed about him. He was brighter. Happier. More up-beat. He liked it and hoped everyone else would as well.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 10:56 pm
"Hi there Rc!" he said him when he noticed. "You can call me Matthias, Matthi or Matt! You can choose."
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 5:23 am
Thard_Verad X--Matthias--X Mission: A planner for a scanner(go here, get this) (you can catch one of these) (stuff you can get if you pass) First off, welcome to Team Aqua! I'm sorry it took so long for someone to grade your mission. In the future, please include the entire mission brief at the top of your report, not just the title. Since this is your first mission I won't hold it against you. As far as your command of the English Language goes, well done! Your spelling and grammar are excellent, which makes a good impression on whoever grades your mission. You also seem fond of dialogue, which is never a bad thing. (Okay, it can be bad if it's poorly written, but you did just fine) I would like to see more narrative in the future. Don't just say "Matthias went to Mr. Briney's house." That kind of narration is boring. For example, you could instead say "Matthias jogged down to Mr. Briney's seaside house." In other words, be more descriptive. It'll help make a good mission into an outstanding one. The other important area of [most] missions is the battles. Yes you can use battles to train your pokemon, but you can also catch one of the wild pokemon listed in the mission brief. Rhyhorn's battle was short but passable, however I can't give Corphish credit for a fight you didn't describe. You say your pokemon had a hard time with Wailmer, but all I see is a single attack that pushes the foe back into the water. So, here's what happens. I can pass the mission right now, but only Rhyhorn gets an Evo Point, and I only award P$350. OR, you can add in Corphish's battle (and possibly catch either Barboach or Wailmer) and go for the full P$400. I'll leave the choice up to you. Ok!! I'm surprised that I didn't make any mistakes in my grammar, cause English is only my 4th languige I should know here in Belgium. I'll post the battle from Corphish here. *Wailmer used Water Gun* Matthias cried: "Now he didn't do a lot of damage, did he? Ok Corphish, use Vicegrip!* *Wailmer evaded the attack and used a powerfull Headbutt* "Don't give up, Corphish!" Matthias cried. "Use Vicegrip again!" *The Wailmer fell into the water now* "Very nicely done! I am proud of you, Corphish!!" Good like this?
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