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 Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 3:08 am
Maddy crawled into HQ, half asleep, and climbed onto the ceiling. She lay there, staring down at the floor. "After I wake up... I wanna go on a..." *yawn* "... TRP..."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 12:39 pm
Rc awoke from his sleep and wandered out of his room. Looking around he saw a few members he didn't know.
Seeing Matthias he said, "My name is Craig but i go by Rc.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 5:11 pm
X--Matthias--X Mission: A planner for a scanner(go here, get this) (you can catch one of these) (stuff you can get if you pass) First off, welcome to Team Aqua! I'm sorry it took so long for someone to grade your mission. In the future, please include the entire mission brief at the top of your report, not just the title. Since this is your first mission I won't hold it against you. As far as your command of the English Language goes, well done! Your spelling and grammar are excellent, which makes a good impression on whoever grades your mission. You also seem fond of dialogue, which is never a bad thing. (Okay, it can be bad if it's poorly written, but you did just fine) I would like to see more narrative in the future. Don't just say "Matthias went to Mr. Briney's house." That kind of narration is boring. For example, you could instead say "Matthias jogged down to Mr. Briney's seaside house." In other words, be more descriptive. It'll help make a good mission into an outstanding one. The other important area of [most] missions is the battles. Yes you can use battles to train your pokemon, but you can also catch one of the wild pokemon listed in the mission brief. Rhyhorn's battle was short but passable, however I can't give Corphish credit for a fight you didn't describe. You say your pokemon had a hard time with Wailmer, but all I see is a single attack that pushes the foe back into the water. So, here's what happens. I can pass the mission right now, but only Rhyhorn gets an Evo Point, and I only award P$350. OR, you can add in Corphish's battle (and possibly catch either Barboach or Wailmer) and go for the full P$400. I'll leave the choice up to you.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 6:40 pm
Arekku looked around HQ tiredly, he need some kind of stimulation, some training might do just nice, "I could even go for that Mantine that's been helping me out..." He spoke softly to himself.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 6:47 pm
Maddy teleported into HQ. "Geez. Pretty dead tonight aren't we?" She asked, mostly to herself.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 6:52 pm
Arekku turned to look up at her, with Ven in his arms, "Hello..." Ven cheered her own 'hello', "Veno-Veno-Venonat!" She must've been happy to see someone else.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 6:54 pm
"You look bored." Maddy said, looking at him. "And have we even met yet?" She asked, scratching her head. Every time she appeared there seemed to be someone new here and she just couldn't keep track.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 6:59 pm
"You could say that I'm new, I mean I'm the second to last person to join... And I've only done two missions and have only four Pokemon..." He muttered the second part, Ven jumped out of his arms and pointed to the teleporter, he studied her, "You want to go outside?... Now? It's almost dark out..." He mulled it over and said, " Good point." He'd almost forgotten about Maddy, "Oh, i'm sorry, I'm Arekku Negi, some call me Arey...Okay none call me that."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:05 pm
"I'm Maddy, former leader of Team Shadow, admin of Team Aqua, Leader of Project D.E.M.O.N, whatever you wanna call me." She said. She pretty much had that line remembered as an introduction to all new people she met. "Anyways, if you want we can go outside and explore a little."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:10 pm
"Well" he though about it, "Miss Maddy, former leader of Team Shadow, admin of Team Aqua, Leader of Project D.E.M.O.N, I guess." He chuckled, "I think that while we do that, I could try and track this Mantine that has been helping me out, I want him to be on my side." He said a little far out as he walked to the teleporter. "Of sorry, I tend to zone out wen i'm talking." he displayed a big sweatdrop.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:13 pm
"Ok then. Meet me outside." She disappeared in a flash of purple light and flame, and reappeared up on the beach. A warm breeze was drifting in off the ocean, and the cloudless sky was filled with twinkling stars and silvery moonlight. "Ahh... Nice..."
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:16 pm
Ven came through the teleporter alone, "Veno-Veno-Venonat." She was happy to be outside in the warm breeze. Arekku came through after a couple seconds had passed.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:22 pm
"So... Do you have any way to track down this Mantine you speak of?" Maddy asked Arekku as he made his appearence. "I haven't been around as much as I should be, so I don't really know much about what's going on with anyone now." She admitted.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:28 pm
"Oh... Yeah" He held up Roddy's pokéball and in a flash of light Roddy was standing at the edge of the beach and dove in. "This Mantine likes to play with Roddy", "Mar-ill, Mar-ill, Mar-ill" The little pokemon panted as he got out farther into the water.
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:33 pm
"Ok, well, I'll sit here and watch. I'll make sure nothing sneaks up on you while you try and find it." Maddy sat down in the sand, just out of the waves reach. Sometimes, she didn't understand how she fit in with Aqua, being hydrophobic and all.
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