Thought I'd post my recent work that I am working on currently and get some advice from you guys. Since I really need it Dx.

Below, I just copied and pasted from my deviantart description:As some of you might know, this coming April brings the Daffodil Movement! The Daffodil Movement are a series of charities, donations, and support methods to help cancer awareness and support those who have cancer.
My mother died this last January from Breast Cancer.
It was really hard on me and my family.
I'm on this site, gaiaonline. On there I have found a discussion thread and guild dedicated to the Daffodil Movement. I've decided to take part in it and help by submitting art.
I started this piece about two days ago and I'd say this will probably be one of my best works. Though its far from being done I still like how its turning out. The hair will represent a sort of freedom overall. But the small ringlets represent the trials one would go through during breast cancer. Her face needs a little work. I was trying to go for a painful frustration sort of expression. And this is my first time having drawn a character with her head tilted up. The smudgy wanna-be shading is suppose to be the "under" of her chin. I will also be adding the breast cancer support ribbon in the center between her breasts with a some kind of essence glowing from it. And for conservative reasons I'll be adding either stars or X's where her nipples would be. The site I'm posting it on has a lot of kids so I don't want to get in trouble with pornographic viewage or something.
But anyway as I said this is just the beginning. So stay tuned for the final piece. And also! I'd like any critique you guys can give me. Since this is still in pencil form I can still make changes to it if I have to.