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 Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 12:38 pm
Enzio Kageryuu amanda from jamrock Enzio Kageryuu Hello, I'm here to tell you what you need to fix in your profile.
Life View
- What clan?
Rank
- What seat?
Reiatsu Color
- Only one please.
Reiryoku Level, Known Foot Techniques, Known Hand-to-Hand Styles, Known Swordsmanship Styles, Reiryoku Techniques, Other Techniques
- These will be the base ranks that are in the Profile skeleton.
Zanpakuto Location
- It will never be in her.
Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance
- You have to have
Shikai
- Denied, you cannot have 2 different shikais. 1 release, 1 set of skills only. Fix that before I judge anything else. that any better You still need to fix your shikai. ok sorry been studying allot, know can i ask were needs to be fixed!?
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 12:47 pm
malavaes Enzio Kageryuu No. Add in more detail to your shikai attacks. Look at mine for an example of what I mean XD Now? emotion_donotwant Sorry, but could you possibly add more description to what your shikai looks like, what happens when you activate it and stuff like that >.< Shikai, and when you edit it, repost your profile
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klgirebdnchajdelfianemdke
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:09 pm
Alright, this time, I think I NAILED it. emotion_yatta
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:15 pm
i know but what in it needs to be fixed?
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:18 pm
amanda from jamrock i know but what in it needs to be fixed? Repost it. malavaes Alright, this time, I think I NAILED it. emotion_yatta I meant in the description. I honestly don't know what your shikai looks like at all XD Add that into it >.>
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:39 pm
 battle clothes  normal clothes
Full Name: Layna
Nickname: Assassin
True Age: 250
Age Appeared:21
Birthdate: November 21
Gender: Female
Ethnicity: English
Blood Type: AB-
Sexuality: Hetero
Height: 5'1
Weight: 100
Eye Color: light pink
Hair Color: pink
Life View: The protection of the Yamanashi clan
Personality: Layna is somewhat of a extremist when it comes to paper work seeing people who dont do it as lazy and unprofessional, she is a kind person who will usually in her free time play with the children of rukongai but in truth she can be very heartless when needed and will not hesitate to kill even those close to her for her true duties.
Likes:
sweets
paper work
snacks
teddy bears
turture( on both ends
Dislikes
laziness
unawareness of surroundings
idiots
enemies of the Yamanashi's
bitter things
bitter tea
lack of information in any if not all cases
Division: 8
Rank: Seated Officer- 4th seat ( given permission by Scott the true ice prince)
Side: Shinigami and Yamanashi clan
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Layna is somewhat of a extemist when it comes to paper work having always had the best grades when it came to written exams and still doing well when it came to her field training, though the skill she had on the field had never been truly shown from when she had been trained by the Yamanashi clan who had taken her in as one of there soldiers, she is in fact a loyal member who would kill anyone she see's as a treat to the clan without hesitation.
Layla during her school days was always cold to others and very strict to her class mates and was even more strict one knowledgable than her own teacher's some times even being seen teaching the students and teacher of her class and correcting him or her depending on the class on numerous occasions which had at one point led to her being offered a job as a teacher which she had turned down.
Layla has only two goals in life, to find her brother Isaac and to he ensure the survival of her masters clan of which her present mission is the watching and assistance of the squad 8 captain
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Reiatsu Color: pink and or purple ( depends on her mood
Reiryoku Level:
Known Foot Techniques:
• Air Walk:
• Air Dash:
• Shunpo:
Known Hand-to-Hand Styles:
• Hakuda:
• you may have one more at the same level
Known Swordsmanship Styles:
• Zanjutsu:
• Kendo:
Reiryoku Techniques:
• Kido Spells:
• Reiryoku Gathering:
Other Techniques:
• Dashing:
• Jumping:
Strengths:
• assassination techniques and knowledge ( including- torture, killing quickly etc etc )
• incredible fast thinking and strategies
Weaknesses:
• her brother
• anger caused by being around idiots
Fears:
• being disowned by the clan
• finding out her brother is dead
• dying alone
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▬▬┤|Sealed Zanpakutpo
Zanpakuto Name: ranmaru
Zanpakuto Location: usually in her hand or on waist
Zanpakuto Appearance:in picture
Zanpakuto Spirit Appear.: Ranmaru
Zanpakuto Sword Type:katana in a bamboo sheath
Zanpakuto Element: metal
▬▬┤|Shikai Release
Shikai Name: Ranmaru
Shikai Incantation:
chain them and torture there souls Ranmaru
Shikai Description: her Katana will either became a long chain in her hand , upon changing into a chain it gains two sharp nails at both ends of the chain or one nail and a round piece at the end which she can choose either the round hole or other nail at will, when fully called out it also causes a eye cover to cover her eyes though she can still see and a mark to appear on her forehead as well as her own hair becoming longer
chain form(chain
Shikai Ability: The chain is almost awlays covered in a unseen sheath of her spirit energy, this allows Layla to move her chain around like a snake to her will.
1- Lenth- this ability allows Layla to while in chain form, to make her chain grow or shrink in length at her will allowing her to attack without getting close to change the length to match her plan, the maximum size is 50 ft in length
2-sharp: This ability works in both katana form and chain form and is almost always active. Layla's entire weapon even down to the normal chain pieces are very sharp because of the spirit energy covering it, this always Layla's blade or chain to be extremely sharp giving it great cutting ability to the point where she can cut through re enfoced steel with perfect persition so use her chain to fly trough a building without being slowed
3-Bellerophon : Layna either trows her sword or chain at the enemy to use an extremely powerful attack that resembles an arrow of light. this is caused from her the spirit energy which covers her weapon and is intensified by the trow which allows it to reach the speed of a bullet, though it can only be used three times at the very most per battle
4- chain dynasty: Layna create round distortions in space around her to make portals around her to fire chains out of to ensnare the enemy
▬▬┤|Bankai Release
Bankai Name: ( Not Achieved )
Bankai Incantation:
Bankai Description:
Bankai Ability:
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▬▬┤|Known Kidou Spells
▬▬┤|Hado Spells
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:40 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:41 pm
Oh yes, you have two different states for you Shikai, that's not allowed.
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klgirebdnchajdelfianemdke
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:43 pm
Enzio Kageryuu Oh yes, you have two different states for you Shikai, that's not allowed. oh ok then i have one more question, if i put that i can change it from a sword to a chain in the list of powers would that work?
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 1:59 pm
Aight, I described it better and even put up a link.
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 2:10 pm
amanda from jamrock Enzio Kageryuu Oh yes, you have two different states for you Shikai, that's not allowed. oh ok then i have one more question, if i put that i can change it from a sword to a chain in the list of powers would that work? Just make it a snake sword.
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 3:10 pm
Sooooo, am Igood now? sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 3:45 pm
malavaes Sooooo, am Igood now? sweatdrop Repost.
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2012 3:56 pm
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