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Memoirs of Masamune (Ch. 20 pre) ~LF and Betman art by ZenR~

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Akuyoko

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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 3:14 pm

Nice chapter Masamune.

Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 4:40 pm

@ Maul: Like I said earlier, most people will be in it. And they will most likely appear several times.
@ LF: THE PLAGUE!!!
@ Akuyoko: Thanks! (even though that exact comment was used several times by people and is starting to bug me. It is too vague! D=< =p)

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Akuyoko

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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 4:46 pm

Masamune 5.0

@ Akuyoko: Thanks! (even though that exact comment was used several times by people and is starting to bug me. It is too vague! D=< =p)

I sorta did that on purpose XD

Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 4:48 pm

rofl If it will please you I will reread it and point things I really liked about it out

Seaphron

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Masamune 5.0

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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 4:50 pm

It would please me. cool

Though you could point out bad things, too. That way I can improve upon them next time.

@ Akuyoko: Yeah, I figured as much. But still: D=<

Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 5:10 pm

Pros

Well Written
Decent Length
I really liked how you introduced LF that was great rofl
The last bit was well done. Began with what everyone was doing, and then broke in to brisk conversation, and then ended with us finding Raui.

Cons

There wasn't that much description throughout it. (not always a bad thing)
Um... Something else!

Other

Could just be me but shouldn't the bolded be there below? Just kinda read awkwardly in my head.

Quote:

"Yep, he has a cat's ears and a tail."

Seaphron

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Masamune 5.0

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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 5:15 pm

Well there's more pros than cons so that's a good thing. Sometimes I'm on and off with description. I think that I did a decent job of description in the beginning but got lazy towards the end.

@ Other: I think you can have it with or without an "a" there.

Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 5:18 pm

That is a good thing. I agree with you on just towards the end.

@Other - Yeah that is prolly true.

Hope you likd the feedback Seaphers out!

Seaphron

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Masamune 5.0

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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 5:19 pm

Thanks for the feedback! It's appreciated!

Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:08 pm

This is NOT a bump! >_> <_<

Uh... new chapters will start appearing after my final exams.

Masamune 5.0

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Seaphron

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:13 pm

What so I BUPMP my thread and you BUMP yours!/

GRR

Nah Just kidding. Glad that we are going to see some new chapters soon.

Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:14 pm

Well actually I probably won't be working on them until next weekend. >_>

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SESauvie

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:14 pm

Seaphron

What so I BUPMP my thread and you BUMP yours!/

GRR

Nah Just kidding. Glad that we are going to see some new chapters soon.

...hmmm

Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:17 pm

Sauvie

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What so I BUPMP my thread and you BUMP yours!/

GRR

Nah Just kidding. Glad that we are going to see some new chapters soon.

...hmmm

Hmmm?

Seaphron

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Tatsuman

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 8:37 pm

Well, Hurry up. I want to read the next chapter.

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