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 Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:52 pm
Aeodan Hehe, go ahead Rain, we don't mind *rummages around for his camera* .... stare *throws something at Aeodan*
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:52 pm
Taylor_Highwind Aeodan tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding Yeah, try powerful seduction, or maybe an experienced lover guiding a novice. There's a lot of possibilities.
And there's non-rape violence. Like fights and stuff. And there's lots of other stuff too...but must I list it? sweatdrop the thing here is that I have not read the story and I havnt seen any of those things, it is really weird to give constructive critisism or advise whitout seeng the work
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:53 pm
tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding
Did I mention Cid's alter ego Antell is attracted to him? And in a good way. sweatdrop no you didnt, Ive never wrote sex in my storys ok, I dont have an Idea of what you can insert there, Im not good whit sex, I like plain and pure storytelling
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:55 pm
tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind Aeodan tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding Yeah, try powerful seduction, or maybe an experienced lover guiding a novice. There's a lot of possibilities.
And there's non-rape violence. Like fights and stuff. And there's lots of other stuff too...but must I list it? sweatdrop the thing here is that I have not read the story and I havnt seen any of those things, it is really weird to give constructive critisism or advise whitout seeng the work
That would be...for Sleemo...finding a way to take Cid hostage and find a way of what to do to him.
Christina's just devious and evil. So keep that in mind too.
Mokey does the same thing in her stories...don't worry. wink
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:57 pm
Jeriana LOL!!!! Lucky you...my spanish teacher is on the old side...as in she taught when my dad went to this same school twenty years ago :Sweat: If I said that I'd get a detention... *giggles* Mmhmmm, too bad they are then... Indeed it's too bad. ::I began a path of kisses up your neck and ran my hands around to the front of your body.::
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:58 pm
Black_Rain Jeriana LOL!!!! Lucky you...my spanish teacher is on the old side...as in she taught when my dad went to this same school twenty years ago :Sweat: If I said that I'd get a detention... *giggles* Mmhmmm, too bad they are then... Indeed it's too bad. ::I began a path of kisses up your neck and ran my hands around to the front of your body.::
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It's okay. Continue. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 5:59 pm
Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding
Did I mention Cid's alter ego Antell is attracted to him? And in a good way. sweatdrop no you didnt, Ive never wrote sex in my storys ok, I dont have an Idea of what you can insert there, Im not good whit sex, I like plain and pure storytelling well my character never gives up a description, exept if it is absoloutly necesary (my stupid english spelling I hate it) something that is important for the story. maybe you have readed this story, right now I cant remember the author. the story is about about a man who crashes his motorcicle and goes to the hospital. he has these dreams where he is being prisioned by Aztecs. and it ends on the dream being the reality and the reality being the dream. hes sacrificed in the end. I like to writte like that, surealist stories
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:01 pm
Black_Rain Indeed it's too bad. ::I began a path of kisses up your neck and ran my hands around to the front of your body.:: Mmmm *runs my hands along your back* I think that I like this very much whee
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:02 pm
Jeriana Aeodan Hehe, go ahead Rain, we don't mind *rummages around for his camera* .... stare *throws something at Aeodan* Pervy Dork..... ::Throws some crap at him as well ... "Ashley Simpson's CD"::
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:02 pm
tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding
Did I mention Cid's alter ego Antell is attracted to him? And in a good way. sweatdrop no you didnt, Ive never wrote sex in my storys ok, I dont have an Idea of what you can insert there, Im not good whit sex, I like plain and pure storytelling well my character never gives up a description, exept if it is absoloutly necesary (my stupid english spelling I hate it) something that is important for the story. maybe you have readed this story, right now I cant remember the author. the story is about about a man who crashes his motorcicle and goes to the hospital. he has these dreams where he is being prisioned by Aztecs. and it ends on the dream being the reality and the reality being the dream. hes sacrificed in the end. I like to writte like that, surealist stories
As for my description...Okay, since my stories are kind of in an order like a series...sort of...what I do is when the character is first introduced, I'll describe their looks. If they change, I'll describe that. If they go back to the old outfit, I'll say...like for example: I call Cid's outfit his "pilot" outfit, and for mine I call my "thief" outfit. If we change, then change back, I'll say, "I was now back to wearing my thief outfit" or something.
But if it's a totally unimportant person, forget description. xp
Also, if there's a sex scene that's important I'll describe that too.
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:04 pm
Black_Rain Jeriana Aeodan Hehe, go ahead Rain, we don't mind *rummages around for his camera* .... stare *throws something at Aeodan* Pervy Dork..... ::Throws some crap at him as well ... "Ashley Simpson's CD":: Hehe, I know, I know, I'm a pervy boy *grins and looks around for someone to play with*
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:04 pm
Black_Rain Jeriana Aeodan Hehe, go ahead Rain, we don't mind *rummages around for his camera* .... stare *throws something at Aeodan* Pervy Dork..... ::Throws some crap at him as well ... "Ashley Simpson's CD":: picks up cd , brakes, throus into the ground, spills wiskey on it, lits it up and screams Die DIE DIE DIE. takes out ramones Cd, puts it on
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:06 pm
Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind tompins1988 Taylor_Highwind *sighs*
No one's answered me yet...
Oh well... stare I already told you, try out differnt perspectives, different actions, I think you should try something else than rape, something different, try something new 3nodding
Did I mention Cid's alter ego Antell is attracted to him? And in a good way. sweatdrop no you didnt, Ive never wrote sex in my storys ok, I dont have an Idea of what you can insert there, Im not good whit sex, I like plain and pure storytelling well my character never gives up a description, exept if it is absoloutly necesary (my stupid english spelling I hate it) something that is important for the story. maybe you have readed this story, right now I cant remember the author. the story is about about a man who crashes his motorcicle and goes to the hospital. he has these dreams where he is being prisioned by Aztecs. and it ends on the dream being the reality and the reality being the dream. hes sacrificed in the end. I like to writte like that, surealist stories
As for my description...Okay, since my stories are kind of in an order like a series...sort of...what I do is when the character is first introduced, I'll describe their looks. If they change, I'll describe that. If they go back to the old outfit, I'll say...like for example: I call Cid's outfit his "pilot" outfit, and for mine I call my "thief" outfit. If we change, then change back, I'll say, "I was now back to wearing my thief outfit" or something.
But if it's a totally unimportant person, forget description. xp
Also, if there's a sex scene that's important I'll describe that too. pretty classic aproach, if you ask me, are they like erotic tales or something?
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:07 pm
Jeriana Mmmm *runs my hands along your back* I think that I like this very much whee ::An embarrassed flush took over my face, as I turned you in my lap so you were inches from my face, sweeping you into and gentle embrace. Moving my mouth close to your lips before firmly pressing them against your own, ravishing your tender lips.::
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 6:08 pm
tompins1988 pretty classic aproach, if you ask me, are they like erotic tales or something?
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