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 Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 5:54 am
Hee, orc in women's clothing. Did King Zendrake and Boychilde decide to fight back, or are the orcs here a different kind than those of LOTR (the only ones I know)? Speaking of, I really liked your explanation of weres.
Aaaah man, I really screwed up. I hope the rest of you don't get captured or anything because I'll be sprinting away with Kyraa. Hahaha good luck with that! ninja
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 9:34 am
Congrats again! I love reading these. heart
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:07 am
Danti Aaaah man, I really screwed up. I hope the rest of you don't get captured or anything because I'll be sprinting away with Kyraa. Hahaha good luck with that! ninja !!!!!!! Dayam. Totally pimp. I mean... gnarly... I mean... awesome. There we are. Awesome.
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 12:42 pm
I get to travel with Pink and Amy! This'll be great fun. Poor knight, poor swordmaster. hehehe.
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 1:56 pm
Your timing is just right. Leaving us unsure of the outcome of this fight (and wondering how Gendou know's they're there) just wets my curiousity for more. 3nodding
I wouldn't mind seeing more Alliance/Blue quirkiness. As serious as the story gets, a little amusement keeps me interested in the characters.
Also, wow. The Kia character is just a little surprising. It's so easy to picture her as Weston's cute lil pet that seeing her as a badass minion is different. I guess I'm used to seeing her as with the good guys. I like it, it plays up her more killer nature.
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 2:01 pm
Hee~, I'm so delightfully single-minded. Oh, Gendou can rip the rest of the Legion to shreds. Mory doesn't care, as long as Weston makes it out in one piece. whee heart I'm not making fun of it, I probably would have actually thought something like that. sweatdrop xd
AUGH!!! Killer description of how weres come about, it's even creepier than the weres themselves! gonk
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 4:00 pm
And a bout of internet-withdrawal kept me from commenting as I normally intend to.
Anyway, this is getting increasingly more involved and deep. I really enjoy the character interaction between the Legion, the Kamrin, and Graye.
Blue: You know, that Orc doesn't look as good in that dress as -
Alliance: Finish that sentence and I'll gut you where you stand.
whee
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 3:58 am
Chapter Twenty is up for your enjoyment.
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 4:14 am
DAMN it, Gendou! You've got me fangirling both sides. I'm getting confused, here ! gonk heart
Reading through, I kept thinking about how hawt everyone was. OH NO Natas, you DIN'T just bitchslap Rue! She's the HAWTEST one! Did Gendou's skells attack the Weres because of said love-tap? O:
Ananel v. Necro!Gendou was hawt, and Legion+Graye v. Werepeoples+Skells was hawt, and Skells v. Werepeoples was hawt.
*Fangirls everybody*
And we're like, what? a third through Gendou's reserved posts? *___*
It kinda just occoured to me that we must be out in the middle o' nowhere 'cause no kingdoms are responding to all the commotion, yo. X3
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:03 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:04 am
Yay undead betrayal! blaugh
Another amazing chapter, please keep up the good work. 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:04 am
KIA YOU b***h scream scream gonk crying I do love you, but not in this story pleasedon'tkill me ;_;
*scared and doesn't know how people can stop reading*
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:27 am
Yeah, bite their ******** heads off![/Little Nicky] But don't attack and fox-demons you see, Mkay? sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 6:02 am
Quote: Well, we're twenty chapters in, and no sign of stopping anytime soon. I've noticed that the comments are slowing down quite a lot - is the story becoming boring, or dragging out too long? If there's something I need to fix with the plotting or pacing, let me know. I mean for this to be entertaining, and if people have stopped reading it because it lacks entertainment value, I'd like to know. Nothing as such on my end. I've not had enough time or energy lately to produce a proper comment. Anyway, I have plenty of time now, so here we go. The pacing of this story seems a bit fast, but that may simply be because I'm used to slower-moving narratives. However, at the speed this is at, it flows very naturally, so I have no complaints there. The action in this chapter is the best of all the other action chapters. It's very easy to picture where everyone is on the battlefield, and the emotion of the scene. The Legion is up against impossible odds. They're holding their own, but they won't be able to for much longer. Gendou's betrayal of the lycanthropes, though not unexpected, worked very well within this scene. Very much keeping with the "I'm not with you, but I'm not with them, either. Anyone in my way, regardless of intent, will be disposed of" personality that he has embodied. The unexpected alliances between the Legion, Graye, and the rogue Kamrin - forged in battle - seems to be the minor theme of this story. Loss, deviance, betrayal is important, but so is friendship, redemption, and respect. And you obviously keep this in mind while you are writing. So once again, Gendou, I have been amazed by this story. I will continue to read and reply when I am able, but you will never lose me as a fan. That is one thing you can count on. EDIT: I also believe a "HOLY s**t KICK a** OMG" is necessary. So there it is. EDIT NUMBER TWO: I'm left wondering if Alliance has a melee weapon of some sort for when he runs out of crossbow bolts.
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 9:30 am
You make my sleeping very saddening, Genny. If only I could get by with none...
Anywho! Much love for this chapter. <3 Anything intelligent I had to say would have been covered by Ally, although I still smile everytime I see "Kamrin." ;.; Still haven't told me if that was intentional or not.
Anywho, yeah. Much love for this chapter, my dear author. I love Kia's charactorization because I can see it so easily in my head. She seems to use the same kind of logic I'd expect from Danti or myself. : o
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