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 Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 4:52 pm
Duriono *smacks hands together* I'll do it when I have the time. .w. Duri, I was reminded of something called Freytag's Pyramid. There's this thing called the exposition. This is the part of any story that sets off the rest of the plot, and takes up the first one or two chapters. So, I suggest you make stuff happen that starts the story rollin soon. 3nodding Like, mention the antagonist, what happened to the characters before the "on screen" story began, or have an event happen. Set the plot in motion with chapter two or three. .... Could we cut out a bunch of crap and have the tavern burn down by chapter 3? That would be awesome. :3 There is a lot of crap I would certainly cut out, the majority of all the little things our characters did were pointless. Or at least what mine did... man, I was such a bad writer back then. :/ So, let's get to know the characters first, and just be on our way? ... Or are you going to shoot this down because it really is a stupid idea? xD
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 4:55 pm
Frankly, Ele.
I need ideas.
And stuff like this is good.
Who cares if I already knew about expositions. = 3= You still reminded me of them! ;D
So yeah, I'll use some of your ideas. Duri's lackin' em anyway.
And I'm FRICKEN HUNGRY. D<
*Takes a bite out of crime*
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 5:33 pm
Duriono Frankly, Ele. I need ideas. And stuff like this is good. Who cares if I already knew about expositions. = 3= You still reminded me of them! ;D So yeah, I'll use some of your ideas. Duri's lackin' em anyway. And I'm FRICKEN HUNGRY. D< *Takes a bite out of crime* *runs off to make brainstorming thread*
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:30 pm
*le facepalm*
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chapter 1: exposé of the action taking place in the theme (spar) as well as relations and character introductions.
Chapter 2: finish major character introductions and give hints to the tavern being a target, minor foreshadowing of the actual plot.
Chapter 3: plan to leave, do so, find some friends/mission, come back to the tavern, hint to a bad guy following them back
Chapter4: fight and burn the damn thing down, leave for good.
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June Malatesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:34 pm
I'll get started before christmas. = 3=
Don't want June gettin' all fancy with her palms on me. Next thing you know she'll be beatin' my a** with ye olde smackin' stick.
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:35 pm
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June Malatesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:39 pm
And why was I hoping that you'd say something like "Oh Duri. It's the holidays so I'll just have you get started on it after new years."
= 3=
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:40 pm
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June Malatesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:42 pm
Oh Juney.
You and your bossiness.
I'm not even getting paid... Not like I'd want money...
I was thinking about getting paid in a much... sweeter fashion. = w=
But yeah... I'm just going to shoot myself down before you say something snappy that will figuratively take a sledge hammer to my stones.
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:46 pm
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June Malatesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:49 pm
That's what my momma always said!
But I like to think that I'm charming and handsome, too.
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Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2011 5:36 am
June Malatesta *le facepalm* ..... chapter 1: exposé of the action taking place in the theme (spar) as well as relations and character introductions. Chapter 2: finish major character introductions and give hints to the tavern being a target, minor foreshadowing of the actual plot. Chapter 3: plan to leave, do so, find some friends/mission, come back to the tavern, hint to a bad guy following them back Chapter4: fight and burn the damn thing down, leave for good. *high-fives June* Exactly. That is a nice outline. :3 So, we'll be introducing Raphiel and Zethriel sooner than in the original sequence of events as well. Chapter 2, yes? .... You know what? In the manga canon, he could've been with them the whole time throughout the war. He should't randomly appear like in the role play. :/ Raf lives at the tavern now, to.
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Posted: Thu Dec 22, 2011 7:56 pm
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Posted: Fri Dec 23, 2011 11:53 am
Some notes on character portrayal for Duri: Aleta should be a little less... ah, jaded all the time in the early chapters. Happier. I don't want the current version of her in the begining of the story, she'll just stay the same. Static main characters are usually bad. :/ Same with Raphiel, I want to see him grow in maturity, mostly. He should be really immature in the begining, and awkward.
He's also opposite of Aleta in a few ways. Raphiel is smart, upbeat, calm, lustful, and cautious. Aleta is mouthy, aggressive, loud, somewhat depressed, and impulsive. Raf has a lof ot control over his emotions, and shows them more often, and Aleta does not have a lot of emotional control, she doesn't let them show on her face, but rather in her actions.
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June Malatesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Dec 29, 2011 4:57 pm
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