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 Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 6:29 pm
Another great chapter. It was full of suspense, and the humor of Foxley's hand being owned again and again. The romance between Alyssa and Silverman continues to carry on, and it seems as though perhaps Forian and Luo have a thing, too? And man, you really had me on the edge of my seat with the whole Christina thing, I really thought that she was going to die, and that all of Paul's work would have been for nothing. I was elated to find that she had just barely missed death, and laughed quite a bit at the ending, where the two kissed for such a long time, that the rest of the group didn't wait up. xd Edit: Also, I wonder if you'll expand on what "hints" Christina gave to Paul.
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Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 8:20 pm
No problem Forsaken wink
That was an enthralling chapter. The romance was well written and with all the suspense that was happening it felt out of place (in a good way) I like the humor with Fox but I felt bad for him, and the comedic end was great XD Can't wait to see the next couple of chapters!
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Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 11:22 pm
Sorry I haven't commented in a while, you tend to update like 3 times a day. I am the first to die.....what a surprise but at least I didn't go out by the hand of Draken, but why must I be greedy? okay just kidding those were great chapters. even with the romance flying everywhere the ambiance is horrifying in a way, Great writing FS.
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:17 am
Meta Fish Another great chapter. It was full of suspense, and the humor of Foxley's hand being owned again and again. The romance between Alyssa and Silverman continues to carry on, and it seems as though perhaps Forian and Luo have a thing, too? And man, you really had me on the edge of my seat with the whole Christina thing, I really thought that she was going to die, and that all of Paul's work would have been for nothing. I was elated to find that she had just barely missed death, and laughed quite a bit at the ending, where the two kissed for such a long time, that the rest of the group didn't wait up. xd Edit: Also, I wonder if you'll expand on what "hints" Christina gave to Paul. When I said hints, what I meant was when a women loves a man they tend to leave subtle hints, but nine times out of ten the man will miss these hints, and the lady in question will get frustrated. It's a bit of long running joke in society really, that men are terrible at picking up the hints (just ask almost any girl). @Seaphron: Glad you enjoyed it @Sauvie: Well, I don't think you were greedy exactly, it was more that you finally saw an oppurtunity to be free, but it kind of involved stealing (if stealing is all you have ever known, then it is very difficult to change your ways). I'm quite proud that Sauvie only took a single crystal, because it shows he resisted the temptation to just stuff his pockets. At any rate, everyone was very sad, and they all got a chance to mourn you, which might not be possible for any future deaths. As for you being first, sorry for that, I looked over all the characters and you were the only one who I could kill first, and not ruin the story. My original concept was that you were to die in a similar way, but that Draken had forced you to take the crystal, but I altered this around. Anyways, I'm quite busy through the week, so updates will slow down, but I might get some free time on nights that I didn't expect, so keep your eyes peeled.
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:21 am
Well thanks for that explination. I was just joking, you can kill me off I don't really care (god knows that I am used of it this month)and once again great story
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:22 am
I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys!
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:25 am
Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:26 am
ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:28 am
ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink Drakam? wink
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:33 am
Seaphron ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying There there *pats on head*. Lol, at any rate, Dr Allriac needs a chapter soon, he hasn't had much coverage yet. @Sauvie: I won't tell you who else dies, because it would ruin the suspense. But you should know that there will be more deaths. Also, I haven't fully decided on the fates of a few people yet.
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:34 am
ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying There there *pats on head*. Lol, at any rate, Dr Allriac needs a chapter soon, he hasn't had much coverage yet. @Sauvie: I won't tell you who else dies, because it would ruin the suspense. But you should know that there will be more deaths. Also, I haven't fully decided on the fates of a few people yet. XD I was just wondering about that. All we need now is for someone to get their arm slashed open or something rofl
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:34 am
ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying There there *pats on head*. Lol, at any rate, Dr Allriac needs a chapter soon, he hasn't had much coverage yet. @Sauvie: I won't tell you who else dies, because it would ruin the suspense. But you should know that there will be more deaths. Also, I haven't fully decided on the fates of a few people yet. I don't expect any spoilers but seriously, who thought I would die first...*raises hand*
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:38 am
Sauvie ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying There there *pats on head*. Lol, at any rate, Dr Allriac needs a chapter soon, he hasn't had much coverage yet. @Sauvie: I won't tell you who else dies, because it would ruin the suspense. But you should know that there will be more deaths. Also, I haven't fully decided on the fates of a few people yet. I don't expect any spoilers but seriously, who thought I would die first...*raises hand* Well, at least Sauvies death was painless (I doubt he would have felt a thing), some of the stuff I have planned is a little more gruesome. Sneak preview of next chapter (seeing as I'm here): In the next chapter, the team must find a way to cross a vast underground lake. But it seems that one of the team is less than happy about going anywhere near water (a bit like Mr T and flying mrgreen )
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:40 am
ForsakenSwordsman Sauvie ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron ForsakenSwordsman Seaphron I am not alone anymore blaugh Hey guys! Get the hell out my thread!! scream (lols, joking) @ Sauvie: Yeah, I don't kill characters just for the hell of it, there has to be a good reason, and I like to explain my reasons, that's all. At any rate you won't be the only dead guy for long. wink What did I ever do to you? crying There there *pats on head*. Lol, at any rate, Dr Allriac needs a chapter soon, he hasn't had much coverage yet. @Sauvie: I won't tell you who else dies, because it would ruin the suspense. But you should know that there will be more deaths. Also, I haven't fully decided on the fates of a few people yet. I don't expect any spoilers but seriously, who thought I would die first...*raises hand* Well, at least Sauvies death was painless (I doubt he would have felt a thing), some of the stuff I have planned is a little more gruesome. Sneak preview of next chapter (seeing as I'm here): In the next chapter, the team must find a way to cross a vast underground lake. But it seems that one of the team is less than happy about going anywhere near water (a bit like Mr T and flying mrgreen ) let me guess Fish can't swim?
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Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 2:42 am
Sauvie let me guess Fish can't swim? Would that not be ironic? My guess though is going to go to Drakam, he doesn't seem like the type to want to cross a lake after all that has happend.
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