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Perhaps not something so very in depth because the soul is not so heavily stressed upon but because of the nature of yours it's important to have a hint of what had happened. Your idea for a human woman who desired love above everything else but was unable to love and so she used people is fine. The rest is, although interesting and fine to write more about if you feel like it, not really important enough.

On the cert it would likely show up as only Preta (or ghost or something along those lines) but it's important for you to know what has happened and everything there is to know about your character. You have to know the whole life of the woman who you are using as a soul and you have to know the whole afterlife of the woman who you are using and you have to know how that will change your character.

Most Raevan's look like what their soul is so it's important that you stress the look of it as well. Is it a ragged ghost? A beautiful ghost? How did she die? What was her personality before she died? What was her personality after she died?

Both your concepts seem to be very similiar in that you are trying to place a physical form to something that really doesn't have one to begin with. Yet, maybe they don't have to have a set form at all. Maybe they can be combined in that it is the happiest memory left behind so that whoever looks to or is in close proximity to the essence, it reveals their happiest memory. I know it may seem a bit cliche especially these days, but HP has some good examples of this what with the Patronuses, the pensive, etc etc. I hate to mention them myself, but they could help in you figuring out how to go about your essences.

I hope this has helped and I wish I could do better, but alas I can't. Yet, I do think you are on to a good start, your ideas just need some more work is all. Good luck!

Wow, I really enjoy reading all these things about your different concepts. I'd have to say, so far, my favorite one of those three is the first to be honest. I absolutely love the idea you took in for the soul. A white lion sounds so awesome! And the Fel Essence you chose. OMG! It is absolutely creative and absolutely awesome.

I do love your other concepts too. ^^ But I do love that first one so much lol. I know this isn't really a critique as much as it is just, loving your ideas but. xD yeah, as I said in the main thread, I can't critique worth a crap lol. ^^

Alright, here I go!

Memory Fragments | When you say memory fragments, I can feel my mind suddenly stop working. It's a hard thing to conceive, but that's what these essences are all about right? I like that you made the memory fragments the memory fragments of a lake. It's nice and specific, it's not so broad. I kind of want a different image than glass pieces if you know what I mean. (This doesn't mean you have to change it from glass shards or anything @__@) When I think of a memory in an object, I think of a photograph. Photographs are memories, right? So perhaps maybe moving photographs...Or something? Or maybe little mirrors made of water...I hope I'm being helpful. This also reminds me of a story I once read by...Oh god, can't remember her name. But there's a story about a girl who steps into a garden filled with roses and each rose holds a different memory, or a different future, and when she smells it she can see that future...Just tossing stuff out here for your inspiration.
Now, about the soul...I'm really jealous I didn't think of Kimba first! That is a very interesting soul choice and I enjoy the personality you have written for this raevan. White = Love. But it means a whole bunch of other things too, like innocence, good, cleanliness, etc... It might have an impact on the raevan if you wanted it to. Think too, a while lion is rare. How would that impact the raevan? Altering memories for food...kind of freaks me out, to tell you the truth. My first instinct was...AGHH NO MY MEMORIES...Because even bad memories mold people into who they are. People learn from bad memories. Some of my best memories are bad memories to tell you the truth. And how would this raevan tell good memories from bad memories? I crashed my bike at the bottom of a steep hill once and I hold that memory very close. What if he perceived it as a bad memory and took it away? So, if your raevan ate from those memories then...That would really change the person's personality. Your raevan would be lazy wouldn't he! 8'D Them male lions, them, hurhur.

Shards of Happiness | You like shards don't you? 8D Hmm...This one...I'm not so fond of as Memory Fragments. It seems a bit bland, a bit needy...Undeveloped. We need to cook it more. I like how if you listen to them you can hear laughter. That's cool! But...here's that image thing again. Happiness, to me, always seemed light and bubbly, like in a gaseous form. However, I am proud of the soul that you chose to go along with this! I personally love ghosts and all things paranormal (*glances pointedly at Eiry*). A Preta is a perfect soul to put with this if you're really looking for collision and an interesting character. Perhaps you could develop what kind of Preta you've captured. Write a ghost story for how this person was killed. I'd like to know what they hunger for and what kind of paranormal activity they produce.

Inverted Flame | This is a very interesting essence you have here! Inverted flame? That's like...A frozen flame, almost. Or a cannibal flame! I really like this essence and how is sucks in warmth and light instead of cold and shadow. Out of all of these, there's not much that I can say or critique.
I enjoy your soul choice as well! Sea horses have such defined characters and I would imagine the male being very matronly and dutiful, graceful and shy because of his soul. The clothing though, I would imagine to be different. I don't know what...Perhaps I'll get it later on...

I hope this helped! Good luck! 8D

The whole thing of eating bad memories reminded me of a webcomic I watch called 'Return to Eden.' In it there are beings known as Dreamwalkers. They can enter peoples dreams and communicate with them and as long as the Walker has two white eyes, both parties remember everything that is said and done. One particular Dreamwalker in the story is a demon with a curse and he only has one white eye, so the other party doesn't remember anything. Anyway, his curse is his wings which have a mind of their own and conveniently eat dreams, leaving nothing but nightmares.

You're idea of having the Raevan feeding off of memories reminded me of this and I just wanted to share. Hopefully it'll help somehow while you continue to build your ideas. Btw, here's the link to the comic: http://returntoeden.comicgenesis.com/

Oh! I didn't even think of the circus for the soul. xDD For some reason I only thought about the zoo, thank you! And yes, I did go a little shard/fragment happy. *shakes fist at InuYasha*

I was hoping to make them three separate memories, but now that I think of it..I'm thinking that a whole memory just shattered or spread out seems better. Hmm..I'm also trying to think of a new design for Nerio, because Shu also informed me about the fel essence=color thing. ; 3 ; I'm not too good with these kinds of things!

Maybe I could make his memories like..a mist or something to try and escape being too close to your fragments? A mist or maybe..something. XD I have absolutely no idea.

:C

I scrapped Huan-yue's concept because of its difficulty with the soul and because the essence lost my interest in the end..

But I shall replace her soon! XD