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 Posted: Sun Nov 14, 2004 10:31 am
lol... in all that excitement i forgot to say thanks! Thank You!
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 2:36 pm
this guil no have persons crying crying sad
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 2:56 pm
PLACEBO IS THE BEST biggrin
PLACEBO IS COOL biggrin
PLACEBO IS GOOD MUSIC biggrin
PLACEBO IS THE REASON biggrin
PLACEBO IS CRAZY biggrin
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 4:13 pm
Soul tear, i didn't mean to offend. it was just really good and i didn't think that someone who has NEVER written one before even in practice could right that well. biggrin it's a compliment
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 5:38 pm
KollegeKitty Soul tear, i didn't mean to offend. it was just really good and i didn't think that someone who has NEVER written one before even in practice could right that well. biggrin it's a compliment o.0 I said I was offended? *smacks himself* Sorry.. I didn't realize i said that *still doesn't believe he said that*
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 5:39 pm
XANEK this guil no have persons crying crying sad hey a question? Can you stop posting ******** newb posts? If you don't your banned... so stop
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Posted: Thu Nov 18, 2004 10:40 am
Draco_kingofdragons and soul tear..your poems are awsome...soul tear yours i like because it is organial and unquie..but i am guessing it aslo refects you personality...Draco_kingofdragons..i like yours because it reflects truth of something that could happen to anyone....but somehow it seems liek you mighta known someone it happened to..My hat is off to you *Takes hat off then replaces it*
RaveN
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Posted: Thu Nov 18, 2004 6:57 pm
ravensavampire Draco_kingofdragons and soul tear..your poems are awsome...soul tear yours i like because it is organial and unquie..but i am guessing it aslo refects you personality...Draco_kingofdragons..i like yours because it reflects truth of something that could happen to anyone....but somehow it seems liek you mighta known someone it happened to..My hat is off to you *Takes hat off then replaces it* RaveN Word! LoL... thanks...
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Posted: Fri Nov 19, 2004 2:09 pm
Yeah those were good posts. I look forward to seeing more.
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Posted: Sat Nov 20, 2004 3:54 pm
ravensavampire Draco_kingofdragons and soul tear..your poems are awsome...soul tear yours i like because it is organial and unquie..but i am guessing it aslo refects you personality...Draco_kingofdragons..i like yours because it reflects truth of something that could happen to anyone....but somehow it seems liek you mighta known someone it happened to..My hat is off to you *Takes hat off then replaces it* RaveN 'The Voice' and 'Special One' did happen to me. 'Depressed' and 'The Party' are my message poems, poems with a message. Depressed, don't outcast people; The Party, pretty obviouse.
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Posted: Sat Nov 20, 2004 9:02 pm
"Tomorrow and You"
"No", they said. no need for thought
An answer uneedeth of a question
Another spark to my rage
but the lights not enough
I crawl in the dark just so you can't see me
the strange feeling of all bad emotions
when not alone, but together
the feeling of death, right within your reach
When your just short of happiness
but its fine, knowing that your loved is feeling best
overwhelmed, a feeling either good or bad.
Trust the feeling, even when its not truly yours
I love you, or do i?
this feeling is new, i can't be sure
its so big and satisfying
but is it real?
It is, it has to be
i know myself and i know you
we have to both be feeling it,
but your not, just me
Stop my heart when its over
I know the importance of the day
for the thought of love,
I'll die for tomorrow
I'll die for you...
Kyle Rogers |11/20/04|
(I don't think any of mine are good, for the simple reason of me posting them as i write them, lol)
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Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 1:23 pm
Soul Tear, what's "uneedeth"?
You used "your" wrong. I think most of the "your" words in the poem are supposed to be "you're". I'll stop criticizing now. The idea is okay, but with some elaboration, it could be better. It sounds more like a song. You can also use more creative words instead of "good" and "bad." Those words are too cliche. You can expand the emotion in the poem more by using different words.
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Parari~Flight~ Vice Captain
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Parari~Flight~ Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 1:24 pm
Oops, I should've saved that poem for the contest. Try this one instead:
Trivialities of Life
Mysteries of the deep
Whisper to me; softly
Tiptoes through my meaning
Of life
Draws me nearer to water
And drowns me in changeable silk
That is
Tangible, untouchable
Kisses my hair and breathes;
Takes me into itself
Casting out something else real
Not of reality,
But something of the moon’s dreams
Apocalypse comes to claim
Unsubstantial wisps of
Dreams,
I float, as a dandelion seed,
Through the grasp
Of shadows that dominate
This reality’s backdrop.
My dreams fog my view
Of the harshness
Of this landscape.
Even knowing,
Even half-seeing,
I still flutter through the world
As a dandelion seed.
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Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 4:23 pm
Parari Soul Tear, what's "uneedeth"? You used "your" wrong. I think most of the "your" words in the poem are supposed to be "you're". I'll stop criticizing now. The idea is okay, but with some elaboration, it could be better. It sounds more like a song. You can also use more creative words instead of "good" and "bad." Those words are too cliche. You can expand the emotion in the poem more by using different words. Yeah like I have said about 5 times... I have never written any poems...
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Parari~Flight~ Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 4:29 pm
Oh, ok. That's okay. I didn't mean to offend you sweatdrop
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