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 Posted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 1:42 pm
OH oh! i got it, you could add more to her fears or add some weaknesses, like agoraphopia(fear of wide open spaces), or the opposite being claustraphobia. Maybe you could specify what you mean by being rich with a nice family, do you mean by getting married to a handsome rich bachelor? Or by winning the lottery? What are her hobbies? Does she just sit there and twiddle her thumbs or does she go skydiving without a parachute? whee
Actually that reminds me i need to add what habits my character has just for the sake of knowing xp
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 3:37 pm
try giving more detail it really helps make the character also why would Moreau bring her to the island or how would she arrive if by accident
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 1:59 pm
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 6:22 pm
I hate to say it but the way you got your quest now it doesn't look or seem
very believable and it seems very cliche.
You got the girl thats plays on almost every sports team, never gets in trouble
and beats up the bully picking on people at school, but is depressed/sucidal and the doctors and medicine only make it worse, but cartoons and computers help make her better. Then she ends up as a graphic designer and somehow ends up as one of the world's greatest hackers.
I think you should really rethink and reconsider your character's past and what she does. there really isn't anything in your character's history to show she has any ability or has learned anything to really become a 'hacker' that likes to break into government databases as a hobby.
you ought to erase the whole hacker part and focus more on the graphic artist part, and fix up/rework your character's past history
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 6:26 pm
Well maybe she's just learned hacking as a bit of a hobby or was taught by a group; i took a computer repair and maitanence class for a short time(everyone but me was male xd ), i wanted to learn how to fix my own computer so i wouldn't have to pay an arm and a leg just for them to look at it. Well the teacher started teaching us a few hacking moves and by now you could probably come up with a way to explain her hacking abilities without her being a nerd or agent.
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Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 6:25 am
I modeled everything about this character, as said in one of my posts, on me and friends. The depression and came from a friend who used computers and cartoons as an outlet.
The hacking and grapic desigher part came from someone else. (Not going to say because they could get in trouble.) Who though they don't watch cartoons and such were depressed when younger.
I will though take into mind I should try to make it a little more believeable and maybe take out the whole depresses.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 1:23 pm
Orianna Dulcina I modeled everything about this character, as said in one of my posts, on me and friends. The depression and came from a friend who used computers and cartoons as an outlet. The hacking and grapic desigher part came from someone else. (Not going to say because they could get in trouble.) Who though they don't watch cartoons and such were depressed when younger. I will though take into mind I should try to make it a little more believeable and maybe take out the whole depresses. That might be why she seems a bit unbelievable. You used a whole bunch of people as inspiration for the character, when really she's only one person. The likelihood of one single person having such a colorful past and present is, frankly, very low. You can use inspiration from a whole bunch of people, but in the end you have to remember that she is only one woman, and there is only so much that a single human can do in their life.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 3:33 pm
Very true. I'll have to make her more real. I recently re-did her past. Though I'll probably have to do it again.
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 8:59 am
Also there is already a 'hacker' on the island (Liamh) or rather he is a "Data Security and Encryption Specialist"
But still, you ought to rethink the 'one of the world's greatest hackers' bit
and drop the whole hacker part, the more I look at your character, she looks like just a bunch of pieces stuck together
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