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 Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 6:16 am
I have only ever seen a few really bad poems. People say that "Oh, this sucks, but here, read it anyway" and it turns out being better than anything I have ever seen! And hey, I think that all my hartspill poems are crappy, but everyone says "wow Koigo! those are so cool!" Really I think you should post it. And my rule in life is never burn literature... so you should keep them in a book. Even if you lock the book, its good to keep your work.
if you ever write some then post it! I want to read it!
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Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 2:40 pm
Koigo I have only ever seen a few really bad poems. People say that "Oh, this sucks, but here, read it anyway" and it turns out being better than anything I have ever seen! And hey, I think that all my hartspill poems are crappy, but everyone says "wow Koigo! those are so cool!" Really I think you should post it. And my rule in life is never burn literature... so you should keep them in a book. Even if you lock the book, its good to keep your work. if you ever write some then post it! I want to read it! Maybe you're right. Next time I feel the need to write some poetry, I'll just keep it in a box until I feel like looking at i or sharing it. Or maybe even posting it up here ninja
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2007 5:57 pm
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2007 5:27 pm
Alright i wrote this for my gf who i met 2 months prior to this.
She writes poetry also and so i couldnt sleep one night and i started writing until i couldnt think anymore.
I have never writen poetry before this so go easy on the critiquing, and i probly wont ever write again but you never know ^_^
My Angel Of Light
Bonnie my girl
I love you more than all of the world
You showed me love, I have lost all pain
You showed me such a simple thing
But a thing I had never felt before
Could it be so much more
Bonnie I love you more than you can know
Sometimes I'm afraid to let it show
I love you with all of the stars
The sun, the moon and mars
I love you a lot that is plain to see
But what you can not see
is how much you mean to me
Your eyes, they hypnotize
Your hair, is beyond compare
Your face, to not love would be a disgrace
When I held you that day
I wished you would never go away
That you would be here to stay
The sun in the sky
I wondered why
why did you have to go
I just loved you so
But your still here
Even to this day
You remain in my heart
You never left it from the start
I could not hold you forever
So i thought whatever
Oh well it's another thing
A "thing" happens often in puppy love
But I soon realized that this "thing"
It was not puppy love
It was from heaven above
An angel had been sent from Heaven to me
not to make fun, and not to make glee
It was you the real angel on earth sent to be
quickly I could see
just how much you really meant to me
You once were dark but now are light
I have found my angel
A fallen angel turned right
Nothing is more beautiful
Than your light in the middle of the night
I wish I could see you now
But we are so far apart
You are with me always
You have never left my heart
I think about you all through the day
You are my motivation
To do things the right way
I think about you all through the night
My dreams are filled with your light
No nightmares can scare me
While your right here with me
in my heart I know
Even if I cant see you
Even if I cant hear you
I always know that your here with me
I love you soo
I just wanted you to know
A poet I am not
But my angel of light I have got!
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Posted: Fri May 25, 2007 3:33 pm
wow... me like!! what did you girlfriend say when she read it?!?!
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Posted: Fri May 25, 2007 9:16 pm
Koigo wow... me like!! what did you girlfriend say when she read it?!?! she said "OMG I love you like SOOOOOO much" i was happy lol
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Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 7:04 am
haha! i imagen so! Girls (well, the ones I know) actualy do like getting poetry! ^_^
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Posted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 9:46 pm
i was really glad that she liked it because she is the only reason i wrote it, she writes poetry about me and i thought one night that i should try and write one for her
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Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:42 am
Running Out of Control
In this room
of broken mirrors
glimpses of your face
reflected in the shards
my breath
further clouds
the dusty glass
as the darkness creeps in
to reign again.
I try to run from my shadow
but there is no where to hide.
My blood is going cold
and I'm running out of time.
Betraying my heart
has left me blind,
my eyes will not open
in the blood
that covers my face.
I am longing for release
but only myself
is keeping me from screaming.
Screaming for a lifeline,
calling for the light.
Silent
my mouth bound by chains
I will not cry.
I fall deeper now
into the world's black waters
as I burn myself
with fire.
It's my life.
I am in control.
I plumet downwards
through skies of pain,
the ground rushes up
to break my frail body,
and I open my eyes
to my fate.
At last I see.
The chains break,
light peirces my tainted soul
for now I realize;
I am not in control.
I weep
my spirit cries out to you,
bring me to the light.
Don't ever let me lose you
again
and regain my "control".
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Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:46 am
I have a 3 part poem that I wrote about a month or two back... (Pericardium means the Cavity of the Heart. It is also my pen name).
Imitation of a human shell
I am nothing but hollow inside
I am nobody
I am one that is not meant to exist
I am one that is working for a heart
But until then, I must pretend
I must act as if I have
Emotion
Desires
And a Purpose.
I must pretend to have feelings to show that I am capable to love and be loved.
I must pretend to have wants to show the little piece of selfishness that every human possesses.
I must pretend to have a purpose because it helps me feel more like somebody.
Because the only thing I can actually feel is passion
The strength
The desire to feed my needs
But even if I imitate what I see
I will always feel empty inside
Because I am empty inside
Because I know I am in need of something
Something important
Something crucial
Something vital to one's existence
I need a heart…
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Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:48 am
Impersonation of a human being
Yes, I am nothing but an empty cavity
I am nobody
Yet I feel that something is starting to take refuge inside of me
I feel emotion like I have never felt before.
I have a desire to better myself.
I feel as if my purpose is to help others.
Are these three characteristics that somebody contains?
Although I could already feel passion
My feeling of passion is now different
It feels unlike before
It feels as if it requires nothing but love.
It feels real.
So I raise these questions:
Am I truly empty inside?
Or has something begun to take residence inside of me?
Do I still need something?
That little something that controls my soul?
Do I still need a heart?
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Posted: Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:58 am
I am aware that I am nothing but the hallucination of a person
But something has changed for this nobody
I am now aware that I do not require a heart to be somebody
Or at least a heart that belongs to me.
I need to feel the emotion of one other than my own
I have the desire to become one with somebody.
Yes, somebody that contains a heart
My purpose is to devote as much as I possibly can to this somebody
Because not doing so will just make my life insignificant.
The different kind of passion that devours my soul is changing me.
I no longer need to feed my hunger of obtaining a heart
Because that hunger has already been fed by somebody
Yes, I was once empty inside
But now I am no longer hollow
Because my somebody has filled the hole of where my heart is supposed to be
I am no longer in need of a heart
Because I am the cavity of the heart
I am the cavity of somebody's heart
I am
Pericardium
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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 11:01 am
wow. these are all really good! I like them a lot.
i havn't writen ANYTHING because I have been writing a story and focusing on that. I am on chapter three though, so I am proud!
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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 12:55 pm
If I could dig up some of my old songs from back when I was in Desolation Alley(horror punk band for which I played drums and wrote songs for) I'll post them up.
If you want to count that as poetry anyway.
As is though, I'm too busy writing my cyberpunk stories to focus much time on poetry.
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Posted: Fri Jun 08, 2007 1:04 pm
Death
Death is sad Death is tragic
in His Death there was magic
without His Death ours would be the end
with it though it all depends
which do you choose Death or life
endless bliss or constant strife
because of Him we get to choose
so pick your side win or lose?
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