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Wow.... I'm very impressed with this thread already! I'm looking forward to seeing you fill all of this out! <3

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Okay, my brain is a bit like mush, but the FA'E SECTION is up and mostly complete. Now working on powers/rebirth.

Just a few sentence structure comments and one typo before I move on:

"It wasn't long before their stepmother began to be cruel to them, and she would tell their father how reckless and bad they were, although he would not believe her, and would only say she must be imagining things." <- This sentence should be split into two sentences. I got lost at the third comma. xD

"This threw her into even more of a rage." <- Mmm… you don't have to change this, but I think you've worded this strangely. I know what you mean, but I think you could just say simply "This made her extremely angry/vengeful/etc."

"Realizing this, Fionnuala and Aedh were even more on their gold" <- Even more on their guard?

I like your story! It has a very fairy-tale like quality and it keeps the reader interested the whole way through. The only thing I would advise you do to is move the section about why the children come back up so it's part of the story. Why? The reader will probably ask you why you're bringing the children back without reading any more of the thread. I went looking for it just in case you had placed it elsewhere – and I was right – but I think you need to end the story in a manner that presents the reason why the Children of Lir are coming back. So definitely move that up because as a Fa'e, the reason of rebirth is VERY important. You've shoved it off into a little corner when it's a key part of your concept. I'd also have someone knowledgeable (i.e. any of the guild staff) check over the reason of rebirth. It's not a bad reason, but I just don't know if it fits the "rebirth guidelines" if you will. I don't think there's a problem with it, but you might want to double check. ^^

Next: HOLY INFORMATION BATMAN. xD It's a beautiful section (the pictures and the quotes and swans and it's just wow) but it draws attention away from your Fa'e profile which, again, is VERY important. It's too much to have right at the top there and as much as it's a great part of your quest it should go down in the last could of posts. You've given the reader enough information about the Children of Lir in your story that all the extra information bogs it all down. I love it, but you have to move it lower or link it or something to get it out of the first five posts. You NEED to bring that Fa'e profile up because I honestly didn't know where it was at first. xD;; Not a necessity, but if you figure you've got an entire page reserved for all your information, a table of contents might be handy-dandy.

Phew. Now that that's finished, onto the Fa'e! :3 I would have poked you about the name, but you have left a lovely comment saying you are working on it. Good good! (P.S. Comments like that = GOOD IDEA.) You've got a nice line of code in your hair section. Just for a clarification on the ambiguous gender, "he" has no sexual organs at all, right (like Riven)?

On the sword, how does he get a hold of it? Is this a quest that he does later on? Or is he found with it?

Another thing to check: Combination of the four children. I don't think you can do this, seeing as one of the rules it "No basing off multiple characters." I know they're veeery close in your case, siblings and all, but I don't know if it's legal allowed.

Powers… mmm, I think you’ve got quite a few more powers than you need, and not really enough weaknesses to counter. I'd get rid of at least two of them, preferably anything to do with transformation into an animal because that is a very common power. You might want to look into Naia and Arkie because both of them are water based and Naia can control the weather (if I remember correctly… though I don't believe it was a reserved power).

Aaaand, finally, to answer your question, Lost Children are reborn as babies, but have grown to teenagers:

"The Lost Children are Fa'e who grew up bound to Guardians in other worlds apart from Gaia, completely ignorant of who and what they are, of Airi and Chaos, and of their very nature as Fa'e! These children have grown by now to the age of teenagers, but with Chaos on the prowl over all worlds, they are no longer safe, and it's time to gather them in."

This is a very neat concept and I had a lot of fun reading it over. Excellent work! <3

Hokay, official call (I just asked Sosi): You have to pick one of the children, but you can keep the others as NPCs. *nod nod*

Some things I've been thinking about:

- Okay, so I'm thinking that I want to keep my OC as Guardian, since she's pretty much me...well, it's hard to explain. Anyway, Iarla would appear in THAT world as a baby, and grow up there -- as in, my OC's world, correct? So, the outfit he first appears in shouldn't be based off his heritage and the Tuatha De Danann, but where he grew up in this life, which would be my OC's homeworld. He would be dressed differently... In the same vein, he would grow up knowing the language of my OC and her homeworld too, right? In other words he grow up as if he were a child of that homeworld, taught as those children are taught, and so would reflect it?

- The Fa'e/Guardian bond : is this decreed before the Fa'e is even brought into the world? Or is just whoever is there first? I'm led to believe that the bond goes deeper than that and is kind of pre-determined, as where the Lost Children end up is in the world where there Guardian is.

- I think the four treasures will just be mentioned as a means of power for the Tuatha De Danann to transport the chosen child from the Otherworld to the next world, instead of giving Iarla a remnant of one of them.

- I think it's pretty obvious that Fionnuala will be the child to be chosen, as she is the eldest and also the most developed in every version of the myth. But I don't want to change Iarla's current appearance or the fact that "he" appears as "an effeminate male" but is in fact androgynous ( and yes, like Riven, he will have no sexual organs ). If I were to come up with an IC reason that Fionnuala wouldn't be reborn as a female, would her ties to her brothers be enough? As in, not all of them could go, but the pull they have on her and such, as if they are all one, is what creates the appearance of her new body, and hence she is not reborn female. Do you think that makes sense/will hold its own weight as a reason?