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 Posted: Mon Dec 04, 2006 8:26 pm
So it's officially Doberman now? Cool.
Very interesting. I like the mobster connection, and you've actually provided a decent reason for the person to be extracted (something I need to do myself... sweatdrop ). Looking forward to seeing more...
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Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2006 10:34 am
Once more, an update!: Serum has been finalized...Cerberus, the three headed dog!
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Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2006 10:38 am
Now it's Cerberus? gonk
Wow, that's be an interesting challenge to see how the different heads are. Will one be Nicky and the other two be instincts only, or while three different portions of Nick's personality split?
That'd be really cool to watch...
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Posted: Sat Dec 09, 2006 10:41 am
Heheh, yeah...it's been a steady evolution of serums.
While I'm hoping for the three different personalities, from what I've been told, that'd be unlikely. Moreso, the heads will probably just be normal dog brains.
Edit: Also, added a new poll. Morphic or non?
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Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 10:59 am
Awsome character idea! n 3n
Buuuut...
LSU suuuucks~ xD; [/MS State fandom]
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Posted: Wed Jan 03, 2007 2:33 pm
Bumpy bump! **updates to come**
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Posted: Tue Jan 16, 2007 10:39 pm
Updated physical appearance and education.
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 4:13 am
Ok, one thing I'd really like to nitpic with... almost ALL cerberus representations from ancient times shows them a little furrier than dobermans. I reccomend Norwegian Elkhounds...  Fierce, but Furrier, too. Picture that all in black fur instead, though. They come in multiple coats. This is going to be short and sweet... because your quest is. What you have, I love. But there needs to be more. What skills does he have? Who were his contacts in the family? Why the distaste for drugs? What happened to his first family after he left to go to 'the Family"? I need more to work with. Keep all that you have, but more. Sure, he might have a resistence to the serum - but why a Cerberus in particular? 'Dog eat Dog world' comes to mind. In general, you just need MORE. keep chugging at what you have.
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 7:12 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 9:19 pm
Bress Baltar Ok, one thing I'd really like to nitpic with... almost ALL cerberus representations from ancient times shows them a little furrier than dobermans. I reccomend Norwegian Elkhounds... http://tn3-1.deviantart.com/300W/fs7.deviantart.com/i/2005/157/9/4/Norwegian_Elkhound_portrait_by_ailah.jpgFierce, but Furrier, too. Picture that all in black fur instead, though. They come in multiple coats. This is going to be short and sweet... because your quest is. What you have, I love. But there needs to be more. What skills does he have? Who were his contacts in the family? Why the distaste for drugs? What happened to his first family after he left to go to 'the Family"? I need more to work with. Keep all that you have, but more. Sure, he might have a resistence to the serum - but why a Cerberus in particular? 'Dog eat Dog world' comes to mind. In general, you just need MORE. keep chugging at what you have. One of the main reasons I don't do one of the more...normal dogs you'd picture as cerberus is mostly due to the overabundance of wolf-like canines on the island already. But yeah, thanks for the input! **goes to brainstorm right now!**
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 11:40 pm
Added a "Pet Peeves" section to his personal information. So far I've got why he loaths drugs.
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Posted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 1:37 pm
A note on your RP style: you seem to have the first sentence of every roleplay reply as present tense 3rd person. It should be always past tense.
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Posted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 7:01 pm
It's actually more of a personal preferance than a rule. Hell, when I first started I rp'd in nothing but first person present. Turns out that's hard to log in other people's journals, so I changed for that. But in all honesty, I would much rather prefer to write in the present tense than the past.
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:02 pm
Overall your character looks pretty good, and the things you've been working on have improved and made the character more believable.
However, I do have some reservations of the reasoning behind how Nicky gets to the island/why he's picked, Because so far with Moreau's choices for some islanders (Jamal and Billy) who have criminal backgrounds the result hasn't been so favorable for the good Doctor Moreau, he probably would need a very good reason to bring in another criminal to the island.
The bit of his 'physiology is highly resiliant toward the serum' is a good reason, but something seems to be missing in justifying bringing a 'mobster' type criminal to the island who could potentially hurt/harm the other experiments or cause trouble
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Posted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 6:42 pm
Yeah, I see where you're coming from with the whole 'criminal' aspect (charged, but never convicted!). I think the main difference between Billy and Jamal from Nicky is that Nicky was an underboss in organized crime unlike normal gang wars or drug running. In all honesty, what he does isn't much different from what large corporations do...except he sometimes uses a bat instead of stocks.
With this mindset, I'm hoping that he'll be seen more of as a businessman coming to the island instead of your run of the mill criminal.
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