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 Posted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 4:51 pm
My mind went blank today.
No ideas.
That's alright. Something will come. I don't know what my muse is... but I can still feel it occassionally so I know it's not gone!
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Posted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:33 pm
what muse?
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*ish confused*
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 11:41 am
Maeve thought for a moment before replying to the man across from her.
"I guess that's true enough. I've never heard it summed up like that before."
Briel smiled and sipped at his coffee concoction.
"Is that any good?" Maeve tried to draw Briel out, to get him to talk so that she could think. Briel smiled at her and, almost as though he read her mind, began to talk.
"I like it. I have a friend that prefers cream and honey in his, and I've tried that, but nothing beats chocolate. Personally I don't know how you can drink yours black."
Maeve smiled and sipped her coffee, forgetting that she had been trying to think and being drawn into conversation instead.
"I didn't at first, but my dad told me that if I was going to drink coffee I was going to drink it 'right' which in his eyes is black. So I got used to it."
Briel smiled. "My dad can be like that sometimes. But usually he just smiles and lets my siblings and I do what we will. He raised us to be exactly what we are, and we would never break his faith in us by behaving in other ways."
Maeve smiled and described her family in detail. Her mother, the workaholic, her father and brothers, the perfect men. She described the things she had done to try and gain their acceptance and love, the achievements she had made in school, in music, in life. Briel sat and listened to it all, smiling or frowning but making no comments. Their cups were refilled but Maeve never once saw the waitress bring it; she was too into her tirade, and that's what it was she realized. She stopped suddenly in the middle of her impassioned speech.
"Oh. I've totally talked too much here! I'm not even letting you get a word in!"
Briel smiled and, touching her hand, said, "Sometimes the best way to help someone is to listen. It's a good thing I found you because I'm good at listening."
Maeve smiled and then opened her eyes with a startling revelation. "Oh no! It's seven! I missed supper. My mother is going to have my head on a platter! I'm really sorry, but I have to go." She scribbled her number and email on a napkin and dropped a twenty onto the table. "I'm really sorry. Call me sometime if you want."
With that Maeve rushed out of the cafe to catch her bus.
Briel sat and looked at the note on the napkin as a woman with long silver hair and ageless eyes sank into the abandoned seat across from him.
"Briel, are you sure this is wise?"
"Would you have had her die instead? She will meet up with the one we've been watching, we know that. What's this?" Briel pointed to the email address and the woman laughed, a sound like rain on flowers and sunlight on snow.
"It's an email address. You've been gone a long time. Meet me at the library tonight and I'll give you the update and get you an email address."
The table was clean and tidy and the coffee mugs had been replaced in the kitchen when the waitress remembered the pair she had left in the corner and went to refill their cups. The twenty was still on the table but she hadn't seen anyone leave.
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 11:42 am
I needed a break from my nano... so I did this.
Not sure what I'll do with it next, but meh.
Lemme know what you all think!
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 1:13 pm
KirbyVictorious what muse? ...... *ish confused* A muse is something that inspires you. If it's something insubstantial, that you can't put your finger on, you just call it a muse...
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Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 3:51 am
hmm.... I remember this... it's not a novel though... a short story at best.... anyone think I should finish it as such or leave it and incorporate it into the bigger story at a later date....?
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Posted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 7:07 pm
Please try using semi colons ( ; ) instead of periods in some places. It's a good layout, but it does need some editing sweatdrop
Apologies if I do not seem sincere, I don't mean to seem otherwise.
If you ask it of me, I would be happy to edit it for you and return it; then when you feel that you have mastered what it is supposed to look like when corrected, simply tell me to stop.
Again, I don't mean to be insincere.
(I developed this compulsiveness with an even more compulsive English professor. I like having to write on a topic once and once only, and she turned me so when the slightest mistake appeared; since then, my peers cannot find any sort of error on my essays after her; even my current professor cannot, and gets frustrated over the whole thing)
Apologies again for my babble. sweatdrop redface sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 9:32 pm
I like this story alot - that said, I think it would be a better short story than trying to stretch it into a full novel. It seems to fit the understated quality of the tale. (Then again, maybe we just haven't reached the epic portion you have in mind?)
It's nice to hear of someone tends to write as I do - creating a world in which the characters exist and simply recording what they do in it. Unfortunately I sometimes forget that people don't know the world as well as I do and leave out details...but I'm working on that.
I really look forward to more of this story!
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Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 11:54 am
Wonder if anyone remembers me in here... I go AFK way too much...
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Posted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 12:06 pm
lakita_phoenix Please try using semi colons ( ; ) instead of periods in some places. It's a good layout, but it does need some editing sweatdrop
Apologies if I do not seem sincere, I don't mean to seem otherwise.
If you ask it of me, I would be happy to edit it for you and return it; then when you feel that you have mastered what it is supposed to look like when corrected, simply tell me to stop.
Again, I don't mean to be insincere.
(I developed this compulsiveness with an even more compulsive English professor. I like having to write on a topic once and once only, and she turned me so when the slightest mistake appeared; since then, my peers cannot find any sort of error on my essays after her; even my current professor cannot, and gets frustrated over the whole thing)
Apologies again for my babble. sweatdrop redface sweatdrop I would like to finish it first, and a lot of what you see as needing editing could just be style. I'm not writing a paper to be graded after all. Having said that when I'm done it I WOULD appreciate a few other sets of eyes looking it over. Also, I know full well that my grammer is horrible at the best of times so there are places where I can't make the thoughts flow and correcting the grammer would fix that. And why does it keep underlining grammer... whatever... I rambled sorry
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