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Super bedankt! Ik heb er zeker wat aan!!

Ik wilde gister al reageren maar toen was internet al uitgezet (ik bedoel dus mijn vaders computer, dus kon ik het niet plaatsen)

Ik vind het heel spannend (en leuk) >< Ik moet zeggen dat hier het verhaal wel lekkerder liep dan deel 1, ik bedoel dus het lezen ervan (en ik heb niet op spelling gelet... sorry)
Good job wink

in positieve of negatieve zin?
Nee, inderdaad, je moet als schrijven en lezer/kijker nog inkomen in het verhaal..

zeg dat wel zeg >< ik krijg soms een hartverzakken van blijdschap van een aflv. (van bepaalde series) en dan ga ik het nog es kijken ^^''
maargoed, dit is off topic

Ga je nu een weer w88 voordat je het vervolg plaatst?

JJJAAAAAA!!!
ZO wat gaaf zeg dat je dit doet!!!! 3nodding biggrin 4laugh

Forever Young
Episode 3: Curiosity
©2003 Kitty Ocean

"You punk, you'll die for what you have done to K'charan!" A Black Knight drew his sword and jumped from his horse. With a raging speed he ran at Matsuru who tried to protect Naraku. Screams filled the air as the other 2 Black Knights came closer as well.
Matsuru did his best to take the blow. He had no other choice than to fight with his injured arm. Trying to remember everything he had ever learned, Matsuru fought the best he could.
Naraku just stood there looking at him. Arms aside her body, like always, she stared at them without any emotions.
A Black Knight stopped his horse between Matsuru and Naraku. It startled her a bit, but fear was not present in her eyes when she looked up. The Black Knight jumped down and grabbed her shoulders. "Well Missy, end of the road!" He laughed. "You and I will have some fu-" But then he stopped. He took her chin and forced her to look at him. "You're eyes..." He mumbled. "I can see..." Then he pushed her back. "In the name of the devil!" He yelled.
Naraku just stood there. "Naraku!" Matsuru yelled, but his opponent was not giving up!
The third Black Knight joined his friend. "What is wrong?" He asked. What could be so terrifying about a little girl? He wanted to grab her.
"Don't touch her!" His colleague ordered. "In the name of our Lord, don't touch her!" Then he drew his sword once more and stormed at her. "Go back to where you belong!!"
Matsuru saw what happened. "No!" He yelled, but at that time the Black Knight hit his side with the sword. Deeply in pain Matsuru fell down, and could only stare at the storming Black Soldier. "Naraku..."
"RAAAAH!" The Black Knight screamed while he ran at her.
Naraku didn't move. No emotion appeared in her eyes. But all of a sudden, she started glowing red. With an innocent face, she looked at the Black Soldier.
"Vardak!" A Black Knight yelled. He looked at his comrade that suddenly burst into flames! Screaming of pain, Vardak fell on the ground until there was nothing left from him.
Naraku looked down at the ashes. She tipped her head. Then Naraku looked at the other 2 Black Soldiers, who gazed at her. "My Lord..." A Black Soldier drew his sword.
"No Mardok!" The other commanded. "Don't look into her eyes! It will drive you insane!"
"But she killed..."
"No!" The order stayed. "We must tell our Lord about this!"
Biting his teeth, Mardok reluctant nodded and jumped back on his horse. Leaving Vardak's horse behind, the last 2 Black Soldiers vanished behind the horizon.
Naraku followed them with her eyes. "Naraku..." She heard. Naraku walked on her bare feet towards Matsuru. "Hehe... that was... amazing..." He coughed smiling. "And I... thought I needed... to take care of you..." Naraku kneeled at him and looked at Matsuru's wounds. When she laid her hand on it, Matsuru screamed of pain. "Always curious, ne?" Matsuru tried to smile.
Naraku laid her hand back on the wounds. She did it gently, but her eyes stayed emotionless. Matsuru swallowed, he just knew he was going to die. His wounds were so painful, so... warm. He never expected them to be warm.
Matsuru opened his eyes once more and saw a light. "The High Ones... are calling me..." But through the light he saw Naraku's face! The light came from her! And to be exact, from her hands!
And like she noticed it too, Naraku pulled her hand back. Curious she looked at it. The glowing had stopped!
Matsuru raised himself. His wounds... they were not gone, but healed so much! Barely worth being called a scratch! "How... how..." He pointed at her, not understanding it. But when he saw her eyes, he knew she didn't have the answer either.
For a while Naraku and Matsuru just stared at each other. The sun slowly started to set. "I wonder..." Matsuru finally said. "If the legends are true..." He knew Naraku wouldn't understand him, but he wanted to say this to her. One day he would explain it, but he couldn't keep it inside any longer. "I always heard that the Black Knights were knights, loyal to a dark sorcerer. If you stay near a magic user for a long time, you tend to get some magic feelings yourself... Maybe... what they saw in your eyes... was something caused by magic."
Naraku just looked at him, blankly staring and taking up the words. "They fear you Naraku..." Matsuru added. "They know what you are... before they are driven insane." He chuckled. "Good thing I don't have any magic then!" Then he looked serious at her. "But you do. You do have magic."
"Magic?" Naraku asked.
Matsuru shook his head. "You wouldn't understand it, if I tried to explain it now." He looked at her. "I wonder... if you actually knew what you were doing..."
"Magic?"
Matsuru pointed at the ashes that got blown away by the wind. "Magic did that." He said. Then he pointed at his wounds and took Naraku's hand. "Your magic." But Naraku looked more confused then ever. "I knew you wouldn't understand this. But at least they fear you, and that means we'll be safe for a while."
Then Naraku started to yawn. It startled herself! Matsuru couldn't help but laughing about her. "Sleep." He said. He helped her down and lay her on the floor. Curious Naraku looked at Matsuru, who had done the same. "I can't explain this, but it'll happen by it's own." He put his hands behind his head and closed his eyes. "Good night." He said.
"Good...night." It took Naraku several tries to repeat that. Then she looked at the sky that slowly went darker and darker... until her eyes suddenly fell close.

The next day Naraku was the first to wake up. She stared at the sky, which was in a soft pink colour. Then she raised herself and looked around. Matsuru was still snoring beside her. "Matsuru." She said. There came no reply. "Matsuru." She said once again. But again, no reply. Naraku placed her hand on him. "Matsuru!" Matsuru mumbled a bit until Naraku yelled: "MATSURU!"
"Waah!" Matsuru jumped up. He looked around him. "Naraku! What is the problem? Did the Black Soldiers come back?!"
"Matsuru!" Naraku pointed at him.
"Awh man..." Matsuru sighed. "You woke me up while there was nothing wrong?" He started to yawn.
"Sleep?" Naraku asked innocently.
Matsuru nodded. "Yes, sleep." He grumbled. "Oh well, better get something to drink. You stay here." He pointed at the rock. "You, here!" He commanded. Matsuru hoped she would understand him. Then he turned around in search for water, taking an empty water carrier along.
Naraku sat on the ground, looking around. When Matsuru had gone out of sight, she waited a while longer but then stood up. She walked at the two horses.
"Horse." She said to one. The horse didn't reply. "I, Naraku." She said again. But besides a drowsy glaze in his eyes, the horse didn't do anything but eat grass.
Naraku then noticed the other horse. Unlike the black one, this one was dark brown. "Horse." Naraku said. "I, Naraku." She introduced herself. But this horse didn't reply either!
Naraku then looked confused. She pointed at the black horse. "Horse." She said. Then she pointed at the other horse. "Horse." She looked back from one to another. "Horse?" Then she got an idea. "Name?" She asked. She remembered that Matsuru had asked that to her. Maybe now the horses would respond! But, the horses didn't reply.
Naraku put her fingers to her face, thinking deeply. "I, Naraku." She said. "You, horse. You, horse...." Then her stomach growled and her face lightened up!

Matsuru came back with a full water sack. "I'm sorry it took me so long Naraku!" He apologised when he saw her with the horses.
"Matsuru!" Naraku greeted him with a smile.
Matsuru was surprised, Naraku was smiling? "What are you doing?" He asked, but immediately knew she wouldn't understand that.
But Naraku smiled. "Apple, Pear!" She smiled pointing at the horses.
"No, horse." Matsuru corrected her, when he put the water sack down.
Naraku shook her head hard. "Apple, Pear!" She pointed at one another.
"Are you hungry?" Matsuru asked and wanted to take some food.
Instead of letting him get that, Naraku pulled Matsuru to the horses. "You, Matsuru." She said.
Matsuru nodded. "Yes, I'm Matsuru."
Naraku pointed at herself. "Naraku." Again Matsuru nodded. Then Naraku pointed at the black horse. "Apple." She said. "Pear." She pointed at the brown one.
Matsuru was silent. "By the High Ones....You gave them names?!"
Naraku pointed at the black horse. "Apple." She pointed at the brown horse. "Pear. Matsuru, Naraku, Apple, Pear." Naraku looked so proudly.
Matsuru couldn't help but smile. "All right, Apple and Pear it will be." He gave her the water sack. "Okay, let's drink and eat a bit and then get on the road again." He opened the water bag and made an example. "This is how you drink."
"Drink." Naraku took the water sack. She raised the bag high and tipped it over. Water poured out of it and splashed right in her face!
Matsuru had been too late to stop her. He now looked at a wet girl and a water sack that was almost empty. He sighed when he took the bag from her. "Let's go one step back..." He suggested and formed a small bowl from her hands. He poured the water in. "Drink."
"Drink." Naraku repeated and brought her face to the water. With a lot of noise she drank the water up.
"Next time I'll teach you about manners." Matsuru smiled and put her on Apple, the black horse. Then he stepped on the brown horse, Pear. He took the bridles and guided his new horse and Naraku's horse into the new day.
While Naraku looked forward, Matsuru caught himself staring at her once in a while. "One day..." He whispered to the girl with long hair. "One day I'll find out your secret..."

To be continued...

Klinkt gek, maar je zou me meer helpen door dat juist WEL te doen; leidt me af =D

Super bedankt!! Eindelijk es wat feedback! Zonder spellingscontrole schiet het niet echt op XD