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 Posted: Sun Aug 27, 2006 9:47 am
Sorry for the mess. sweatdrop I'm still sorting ideas and getting the posts/info sorted. sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 4:43 pm
Well, guess this's as good as it'll get! Let the critiqueing of my character begin please! 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 5:50 pm
Alrighty, starting off with a critique!
Overall this is a good start to a quest, definately need to fill in those
blank spaces though.
Now, the character's history, I wouldn't start off with
her being an orphan her whole life, there has to be a
reason she is an orphan, maybe her parents gave her up?
parents died? Also she doesn't seem to be the sort that would
get bounced from foster home to foster home, and also
where you have her education as Highschool degree, 4-year Biology Bachelor's and minor in Genetics, she would have to have a
somewhat stable home life in order to get that far and into college
so anyway, good start, just a few things to think about and fill in,
and good luck on your quest!
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Posted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 6:48 pm
Yeah, at first I thought perhaps she'd been born into a large family and they gave her up. And, like I said, still working on most of those blanks and soothing out some of the bits that are funny sounding.
I like what I've done with her personality; that's been altered quite a bit from the start and I think I'm pleased with what I've got.
Her history.... oh brother, I still got alot of work to do. I know I want her to not have much of a family, that's why she's not too upset with the island. I know I want her to like some genetics, hence the classification and probably why she got to the island. Eh, her history REALLY needs work.
Hmm, still working on her appearance. All I've got in my mind thus far is her personality and bits of her history. I have no clue what I want to do with her physically, so that'll need loads of work.
Hrm.... I think she needs some more problems. I like to abuse my chars alot ((Hehe, in battles I like to let them get hit and big boo-boos xd )) I need to give her more depth, personality-wise. She's pretty 2-dimensional personality-wise, so I think some problems will fill the rest of that out. Perhaps a disease? Asthma? Diabetes? Hearing problems? Mental problem that she has medicine to take care of? I need... just something for that third dimension. Perhaps a bad fear. ninja
Anyway, that's my analysis of my char. Thorough, aren't I? xd I'm such a nerd; spend all day on the net RPing on various websites. That's why I'm so desperate to join this RP; it's one of the most complex RPs I've ever seen and it's really in-depth with lots of subtle levels and is remarkably close to real life.. 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Sep 14, 2006 1:10 pm
ninja Any other helpful hints besides what I still need to fill in and/or stuff I didn't cover? ninja
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Posted: Thu Sep 14, 2006 1:33 pm
Honestly, I like the character. I have a LOT of artsy friends here on campus and the outgoing personalities they all seem to have just make the day that much better. Their fashion sense (XD SENSE!?) and funky style is really unique to each one, so what I'm basically trying to say is that even though she's really not fleshed out a lot, I still like her personality. It's unique and refreshing.
*points up* He's right about the orphan thing, it's a little overdone. Being adopted is fine and would make more sense if she was in a supportive foster home that helped her get through college.
Hm.. what else... your serum animal, out of all of them I'd really love to see a cockatiel. It just fits the 'artsy fartsy' style, with how perky and cheerful looking those birds are. They always seem to smile, yanno? And the frill would be ADORABLE.
So yea, my two cents. I'd add in more but I'd been more concrete stuffins to work from. Yay dedicated RPer type peson, go go go! *flails pompoms*
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