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Flames_Of_Fury
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 3:30 pm


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Ok David, do you really think this is how you spell having!
PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 9:52 pm


you know, I was gonna say the same thing, lol...

and yeah... I'm always going to wait until I've given Nebelstern time to read before posting again, that way I KNOW everyone's had time to read it. I mean, I know I hate it when I have to catch up with a huge chunk of someone's else's work, lol.

My favorite part of the second installment is "a canvas of bruises," just because of the significance of it all... "canvas" because Nick is an artist and he's the one causing the bruises, and "bruises" because they are the biggest motif in the whole story.

That's one thing I need more of though... motifs!

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PostPosted: Tue May 03, 2005 1:44 pm


Tis very good so far ^_^

And if i have to wait much longer for Si to tell me he has read my'ne i am going to be waiting till frigging christmas... o.o Unless he has already and i missed the post... *Goes to check*

(:... Only joking bud. I know you are busy.
PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 8:19 am


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Tis very good so far ^_^

And if i have to wait much longer for Si to tell me he has read my'ne i am going to be waiting till frigging christmas... o.o Unless he has already and i missed the post... *Goes to check*

(:... Only joking bud. I know you are busy.


Well, with school now officially ended - that's right, I'm one of you 6th formers now - I should definitely be able to sort out all the odds and ends that have been building up tomorrow. Should be a welcome break. Hopefully.

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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 9:05 am


No more exams then Si?
PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 9:19 am


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No more exams then Si?


Sadly no. I have a load coming up starting next week. Yet I have finished my lessons this year, so technically I am now sixth form.

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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2005 10:27 am


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No more exams then Si?


Sadly no. I have a load coming up starting next week. Yet I have finished my lessons this year, so technically I am now sixth form.


Not until you get fully accepted and start the first day you ain't! XP
PostPosted: Sat May 14, 2005 10:45 pm


Wow... I haven't been to gaia in forever... eventually I'm going to post the next installment... don't know how long it'll be before I'm back, though...

Libidinal Catharsis


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PostPosted: Sun May 15, 2005 2:04 pm


LibidinalCatharsis
Wow... I haven't been to gaia in forever... eventually I'm going to post the next installment... don't know how long it'll be before I'm back, though...


I can't wait! I was enjoying it!
PostPosted: Sun May 15, 2005 3:14 pm


I can't wait anymore!!! I am interested!

Ares


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PostPosted: Sun May 15, 2005 4:41 pm


Okay... next installment... hope Nebelstern is ready for it:

In Coach Mullenburg's office, the two students sat across from each other.

"I'm sorry boys, but I'm left with no choice but to call your parents."

Jason smirked, his face now disfigured and ugly, although normally he was a good-looking guy. "Hear that, Nicky boy? What do you think your old Stepdad’s gonna say to that?"

Nick began to rise from his chair, then he looked at Coach Mullenburg and sat back down again angrily.

"Boys," she pressed with concern, "Is there anything either of you wish to tell me?" She looked at Nick in particular. "I can assure you the utmost confidence."

Nick only shook his head, rose, and walked out the door in silence. He couldn't believe what was happening to him. How did that nameless creep know any of those things? He sat down in the middle of the hall and looked in his bag for his journal. He had to get down on paper what he was feeling.

It wasn't there.

He shrugged it off and stormed down the hall into the bathroom where he entered a stall and knelt in front of the toilet. Robert was going to be majorly upset. In fact, Nick would be safer if he ran away. But no, that would never work. He would be found. What a stupid idea, he thought as he gagged into the toilet. As a second wave of nauseous anxiety swelled up inside him, he heard the door to the bathroom open and two guys walk in. He recognized one of the voices as Jason’s.

"Let me tell you, I couldn't believe some of the things I read in this guy's little diary. The idiot was careless enough to leave it on his desk when he left his math class, and I managed to pick it up before anyone noticed. What a weirdo, wearing black all the time, and sketching in that book. I bet he worships the devil, but it didn't say anything about it in his little journal."

"Dude, I think you went too far this time. I mean, look at your face, man. You should just get rid of the book."

"Whatever. But I still have all the information I need to make his life a living hell. I guess this can go in the trash then." There was the sound of Jason tossing the book in the trash can and then the two left.

Nick stumbled out of the stall, shaking from apprehension, shock, anger, and dehydration. He wiped his tear streaked face and rinsed out his mouth with water before washing his hands and retrieving his Journal from the garbage. He returned it to his backpack where it belonged and left the bathroom before he was hit by another wave of sickness.

In the last class of the day, Jason again confronted Nick, who, at the time was adding a new entry to his journal.

"Hey, maggot, where'd you get that?" he inquired hatefully.

"The question is not how I obtained it, but how you did," said Nick calmly without removing his gaze or his pencil from the paper.

"What are you trying to say?"

"Only that you were the first person to know the things I've written here and that I would never throw my own Journal in the trash can. Why? Do you have a guilty conscience?"

"Creep, why would I read your stupid Diary?" Jason scoffed and several people in the room chuckled nervously. Jason opened his mouth to add another comment, but then the history teacher, Mr. Adams, entered the room and the students were made to resume their seats.
PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2005 2:01 am


My dear, I am always ready - although exams do weigh heavily upon me...

I will take more care in replying/analysing once they are all over. Until then, please just post whenever you feel like it. That really applies to everyone as well, including Jaiye. I will get around to looking at ALL threads when I have more time.
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PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2005 3:49 am


This turning out well ^_^ Getting gradually sucked further and further into your characters and storyline!

Good job ^_^

((I have just added Chapter 9 up and i have a lot of time to kill today (if i have no homework that i haven't checked yet for tomorrow!) so i'm going to finish adding my adjustments to the chapters already on the computer before starting on chapter 16 at some point. (: Though that will require me reading part of lord of rings... Its a hard life... ^_^))
PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2005 6:48 am


I'm glad you like it! But how can I make it even BETTER?

Libidinal Catharsis


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PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2005 7:04 am


Can't read......revising.......*collapese*
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