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 Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 5:52 pm
Usually I don't go for slash (not because I'm against gays but because too many of them are just written porn), but this was tastefully done and as you said, you tried to do it in a way were it seems 'normal'. The detachedness worked well for the story, but I don't think detachedness was the best way to go if you wanted to make a slash pair 'normal', since it's...well... detached. Plus, the young guy isn't open to it at first, which also yells to the reader that this may not be 'normal'. I don't write slash, so I don't know what sort of suggestions to give to help you though gonk
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 8:19 am
Sage of Chaos Usually I don't go for slash (not because I'm against gays but because too many of them are just written porn), but this was tastefully done and as you said, you tried to do it in a way were it seems 'normal'. The detachedness worked well for the story, but I don't think detachedness was the best way to go if you wanted to make a slash pair 'normal', since it's...well... detached. Plus, the young guy isn't open to it at first, which also yells to the reader that this may not be 'normal'. I don't write slash, so I don't know what sort of suggestions to give to help you though gonk Okay, well, thanks for your help. I think (Man, I wrote this awhile ago...) what I was trying to get at with the whole second guy hesitates thing was that he accepts it, even though he's not sure at first. Many - most, actually - people, when they first heard about homosexuality and thought of two men or two women kissing, we at least a bit taken back. I was, and I'm not ashamed to say that. I mean, we're taught from birth (especially women) that you fall in love with a member of the opposite sex so that you can settle down, get married, and have a family. You can't do that if you want to be with someone from your own sex. Some people, if they were in the second guy's situation, wouldn't hesitate. They would either say yes or no, because in this day and age, more people are becoming aware of the growing number of homosexuals in the world. However, there are some innocent teenagers (Oxymoron? XD) who haven't been exposed to that part of society, and I think that if they were in that position, they'd be at least a bit hesitant. Also (just thought of this), if he didn't hesitate, there would never be that line 'But we're both men." And I will bet that very, very few people would have looked at this story as two men if there were no hints of what the two 'people's' genders were. Now...Wendy, I wasn't trying to say that there aren't people in this world who write slash. I'm saying that there are very few. 13,000? We have, what, billions of people who live on this earth. 13,000 is a very small number. I haven't read Anne Rice's or Lynn Flewelling's work, but I have heard of Rice. I never thought I was going to be the very first published slash writer. With each author, with each story, people get more and more exposed to the fact that there is homosexual literature. My goal is to get them more used to it. I'm not saying that every single person doesn't accept homosexuality, because we all know that that is bull. I just want people to be more accepting.
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 2:10 pm
DispatchNA Now...Wendy, I wasn't trying to say that there aren't people in this world who write slash. I'm saying that there are very few. 13,000? We have, what, billions of people who live on this earth. 13,000 is a very small number. I haven't read Anne Rice's or Lynn Flewelling's work, but I have heard of Rice. I never thought I was going to be the very first published slash writer. With each author, with each story, people get more and more exposed to the fact that there is homosexual literature. My goal is to get them more used to it. I'm not saying that every single person doesn't accept homosexuality, because we all know that that is bull. I just want people to be more accepting. Point taken on how many people there are in the world... It's early here when I write my posts, (6:48am kind of early) so my brain hasn't exactly caught up to me 100% yet. sweatdrop Sorry if I seemed rude or abrupt in any of my posts before. You’d love Anne Rice and Lynn Flewelling's work, and I’m sorry once again for making you feel like you did… I never meant to make it appear as if I thought that you thought you were the only slash writer in the world, I merely thought I could lend you a helping hand on finding some slashy books to read, they’ve helped me to get ideas a lot of the time. sweatdrop I wish you luck on your quest… I guess I’m tiring to do similar things by writing my own stories… though most don’t end up being slash until many chapters later… sweatdrop I like to write long stories… and have tried to write as short as you can, but mine never seem to turn out as good as yours did. Once again I’m sorry for not making my posts clear enough for you to realise what I meant, and rereading over it, I can see why. sweatdrop I must re get into the habit of rereading over things before posting it… sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 3:14 pm
wendy_moon Point taken on how many people there are in the world... It's early here when I write my posts, (6:48am kind of early) so my brain hasn't exactly caught up to me 100% yet. sweatdrop Sorry if I seemed rude or abrupt in any of my posts before. Hey, no problem. I didn't think you seemed rude in your previous posts ^_^ wendy_moon You’d love Anne Rice and Lynn Flewelling's work, and I’m sorry once again for making you feel like you did… I never meant to make it appear as if I thought that you thought you were the only slash writer in the world, I merely thought I could lend you a helping hand on finding some slashy books to read, they’ve helped me to get ideas a lot of the time. sweatdrop I know what you meant ^_^ And I'll definately check out their work *nods*
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 6:45 pm
DispatchNA wendy_moon Point taken on how many people there are in the world... It's early here when I write my posts, (6:48am kind of early) so my brain hasn't exactly caught up to me 100% yet. sweatdrop Sorry if I seemed rude or abrupt in any of my posts before. Hey, no problem. I didn't think you seemed rude in your previous posts ^_^ ^_^ That's good to know, I don't like being rude so I was kind of worried that I had been. DispatchNA wendy_moon You’d love Anne Rice and Lynn Flewelling's work, and I’m sorry once again for making you feel like you did… I never meant to make it appear as if I thought that you thought you were the only slash writer in the world, I merely thought I could lend you a helping hand on finding some slashy books to read, they’ve helped me to get ideas a lot of the time. sweatdrop I know what you meant ^_^ And I'll definately check out their work *nods* That's good to know too... my mind works in strange ways, that sometime even I have truble knowing what I mean. Yeah! ^_^
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2004 9:49 pm
Whew! momententary tension there- but I guess that fits in with the whole story though, it seems to be all about tension and waiting.
Umm.... I don't know all that much about slash, but I think the story would have a bit more impact if it were a little shorter- if the lines were tighter and more concise, the reader would feel that tension very strongly.
Good work
M
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2004 12:45 pm
Okay. Thanks for your suggestions!
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Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2004 6:22 pm
Mara-ani Umm.... I don't know all that much about slash, but I think the story would have a bit more impact if it were a little shorter- if the lines were tighter and more concise, the reader would feel that tension very strongly. Hmm...I'm trying to think. By 'more concise', what do you mean? Because I know I've got a lot of imagery in there, but I don't want to take that away - I think that's what sort of creates the scene. Is that what you meant, or was it something else?
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