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 Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2017 4:34 am
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2017 4:57 am
Can I get something?!!!!!
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2017 11:16 am
have you put it in the non-slot thread for crit/stamping? You can put it in just for critique
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Posted: Wed Nov 29, 2017 10:39 pm
Hi, xdeathxbyxlovex! I have a few things to address with Tzuyu before she's ready for a stamp. First, her "Hospitality" virtue really isn't so much reading as a trait she has. If she doesn't have a choice, and it's just something she does, it isn't really a virtue! Would she be a kind, hospitable, or giving person if it were outside the context of her family's bed and breakfast? Also, her "As long as everything is exactly how I want it, I am totally flexible" flaw is very, very specific since it focuses entirely on group projects. A flaw needs to be pretty general, so is she kind of...like that with everything? It's gotta be her way or the highway? Quote me and I'll be back!
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Posted: Thu Nov 30, 2017 4:00 am
Noir Songbird Hi, xdeathxbyxlovex! I have a few things to address with Tzuyu before she's ready for a stamp. First, her "Hospitality" virtue really isn't so much reading as a trait she has. If she doesn't have a choice, and it's just something she does, it isn't really a virtue! Would she be a kind, hospitable, or giving person if it were outside the context of her family's bed and breakfast? Also, her "As long as everything is exactly how I want it, I am totally flexible" flaw is very, very specific since it focuses entirely on group projects. A flaw needs to be pretty general, so is she kind of...like that with everything? It's gotta be her way or the highway? Quote me and I'll be back! Thank you for crit!!! Would it be alright I I just change or reword the future and flaw without really changing the paragraph/details or whole thing
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Posted: Thu Nov 30, 2017 6:45 am
Yes! Just rewording the traits to address my crit is perfectly fine, you don’t need to totally discard them for something else!
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Posted: Mon Dec 04, 2017 4:52 am
Noir Songbird Yes! Just rewording the traits to address my crit is perfectly fine, you don’t need to totally discard them for something else! ok I think I changed it
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Posted: Mon Dec 04, 2017 5:08 am
The flaw is looking much better, but the virtue is still very overfocused on her family’s business. I’d really like to see more about how she’s hospitable in her daily life outside of that! Does she go out of her way for her friends, particularly?
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Posted: Thu Dec 07, 2017 7:29 am
Noir Songbird The flaw is looking much better, but the virtue is still very overfocused on her family’s business. I’d really like to see more about how she’s hospitable in her daily life outside of that! Does she go out of her way for her friends, particularly? Thank you so much for helping me. I really appreciate it. I think I changed it.
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Posted: Fri Dec 08, 2017 8:59 am
^.^ ill give it a shot, this might take a bit and could very well be a word wall so apologize now ^.^'
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2017 10:57 am
Okay, looks good! Thank you for your patience!  A GM will be by soon!
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Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2018 8:24 pm
Hey, Death! This is a cute profile, so I just wanted to go over a few things! While sandcastle building is a valid hobby, Destiny City doesn’t have a beach that is immediately accessible. The nearest beach is 45 minutes away, however there are some lakes nearby that are roughly half that distance. She could still sculpt sand, like in sandboxes or at the lakes, but I just wanted to give you a heads up that she will need to make a bit of a travel to actually reach the ocean. This looks good to me, though, so I can stamp her civilian side! Have fun!
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