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ThisCloudedLife
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 30, 2016 7:35 pm


Asura of Rage

Wait, Mild cause for concern? Can i ask what was the action that gave that idea?

In the last iteration of the guild essentially you simply chased fights, first you fought red lantern, after the fight was ended due to inactivity you chased down superboy. Part way through the fight things were looking unfavourable so you instantly fleed with a short post rather than call mods for assistance.
It has been over a year since then so you may not just randomly attack characters now, but still we would like a sample to check rp capabilities at the least.
PostPosted: Fri Dec 30, 2016 8:05 pm


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The sound of multiple footsteps echoed through the city, it was truly a busy day though that would be putting it lightly. One normal would be highlighted through the multiple personalities that moved throughout the city, and his name was Eric rose or Power boy if you knew his secret identity. Most people don't, in fact no one does, well no one living. The truth to his appearance would be that he was actually giving himself a day off from the normal heroic job. It can be quite stressful, never knowing if you can save someone in time, truly a rush.

30 minutes deeper into his walk, his head would snap at the sound of a commotion, a fight was going on between to men seeking to prove themselves as a type of alpha male of a group. Judging by their appearances, they don't seem like the friendly type. Eric would move closer to the fight until he was at a perfect visual spot to witness all the carnage that would happen, hopefully no other hero would come and put an end to this fight too early.

"Eh, as long as they aren't hurting anyone else. Besides, I can just let one take out the other and then take care of him."

Eric snickered at the plan that he concocted, so much so that he had lost attention which was meant for the fight. Snapping back into it, he would see one man pummeling the other.

"Good god man, stand up and fight, yeesh."

He said as he let the fight continue on for a bit longer.

"Alright, guess i can stop it now. Wait, wait no just a little...bit....alright now."

Eric would leave the crowd and soon the scene only to return a bit later in his suit. Showcasing the pre-dominantly blue suit, accompanied by red black and yellow. At the center of his chest sat the Super symbol worn by children of the house of El. Eric completed his appearance by flying over the fight.

"Alright you two, time to give it up."

A rock would be thrown at him, along with a few swears coming from the victor of the fight. Trying to keep his cool and not cause another incident like last time, he would slowly descend in front of the man.

"Alright.....I'm trying to give you a chance.....So i'm going to tell you now to turn around and walk a-"

Eric's head would slightly jerk back as the man would shot a glob of spit at Eric's cheek.

"Well...when all else fails."

Eric would grab the man by his leg and jet off into the air, screaming followed but Eric shrugged it off and laughed at him as he escalated higher.

"Talk to me buddy, you ready to walk away?"

The man continued to scream before shouting yes.

"Good, sorry my hands are very slippery...Oops."

Eric would release the man and sit suspended, he laughed a bit before jetting off and catching him. He would take him back to the spot where the fight was, currently it was cleared out.

"Well they, apparently, can listen without me having to drag them through the air."

Valiant Depression

Thirteenth Teenager


ThisCloudedLife
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 04, 2017 1:55 pm


Asura of Rage

Ok, I'm not comfortable allowing you this character with the rp sample provided.
It's very much a case of quantity doesn't equal quality, the post has no real direction, and it has no actual ending. You just saw a fight, let it happen a little before changing and returning to the scene, then flew a guy up and down. You never released the guy either he's just, in your hands?
So I myself am having to deny, going to quote some other mods to see if they want to comment
Klayko

Josh Starwind
PostPosted: Wed Jan 04, 2017 5:10 pm


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Asura of Rage

Josh Starwind


Alas, this sample was supposed to prove to us how and why some limits should or should not be added or considered. For this to be a sample, I must say, it got absolutely nowhere. There's a distinct lack of depth of what we needed to see in terms of allowing this character to have such a powerset, but it's nowhere to be found in this sample and instead filled with dialogue, which is also a product of sentence fragments. Your sentences also fail to complete what you set out to accomplish.

"He would take him back to the spot where the fight was, currently it was cleared out."

What happened to this? It really did not state what happened to the man. Are you still holding him? What's going on here?

Amid the rest of this sample, I personally do not think you should have this character.

Klayko
Crew

Blessed Tactician


Valiant Depression

Thirteenth Teenager

PostPosted: Wed Jan 04, 2017 8:59 pm


There's honestly no need to quote anyone else, especially when 2/3 mods already don't approve, a better one could be provided.
PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2017 6:30 pm


Asura of Rage
There's honestly no need to quote anyone else, especially when 2/3 mods already don't approve, a better one could be provided.

Unfortunately as per two approvals means you get the profile, two denials also means you lose it. I appreciate you did as asked and thank you for that, but when given a chance to show your responsibility and how you would be able to handle a character you fell flat. You may still create other characters, and this will not impact you any further however this character will not come to life. Thank you for your cooperation and we hope you find a character you're comfortable with that we can allow.

ThisCloudedLife
Vice Captain

Hilarious Firestarter


Valiant Depression

Thirteenth Teenager

PostPosted: Sun Jan 08, 2017 6:41 am


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Asura of Rage
There's honestly no need to quote anyone else, especially when 2/3 mods already don't approve, a better one could be provided.

Unfortunately as per two approvals means you get the profile, two denials also means you lose it. I appreciate you did as asked and thank you for that, but when given a chance to show your responsibility and how you would be able to handle a character you fell flat. You may still create other characters, and this will not impact you any further however this character will not come to life. Thank you for your cooperation and we hope you find a character you're comfortable with that we can allow.

I meant a better rp sample, the last one was just dialogue as i was told.
PostPosted: Tue Jan 10, 2017 11:32 am


Asura of Rage

I meant a better rp sample, the last one was just dialogue as i was told.

I'm well aware of what you meant. However when presented the chance to prove your worth with a character with knowledge of what you've done wrong before, you gave a lackluster sample. So as my previous statement, this character is denied and I hope you find another character you like and can use effectively.

ThisCloudedLife
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