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 Posted: Mon Nov 23, 2015 7:34 pm
Exhale Fail Kerissa Darkmoon She wants to know if she could make a card character. Haha sure that's fine with me smile She said thank you! and now to pick between "Ace of clubs or joker...
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Posted: Mon Nov 23, 2015 7:45 pm
Kerissa Darkmoon Exhale Fail Kerissa Darkmoon She wants to know if she could make a card character. Haha sure that's fine with me smile She said thank you! and now to pick between "Ace of clubs or joker... haha no problem. smile
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Posted: Wed Nov 25, 2015 5:11 pm
Student ID Photo: Name:Saiya "Joker" Card Age:400 but looks 16 Race/Species:Vampire Sex/Gender:Female Sexual Preference Bisexual Grade Level:Highschool Junior Dorm:Chestnut 140 Abilities:Stealth. Can travel through shadows thanks to someone from her childhood who practiced shadow magic.. She has super human strength,speed,agility. She can use telepathy and hypnotize people.She is great at archery, swordsmanship and martial arts Major or Club:Archery History:Saiya was born near the end of the Sengoku Era. Her family were a family ninjas which she was trained to be all of her life. She is a master of stealth and agility and also archery. Something that she loves. At a young age she killed her first evil politician and felt remorse from it. However that politician was so deep into his darkness. In his corruption of power and greed. Because she had killed him, his own family had hired hit men to come and kill her family and her included. Out of revenge. That remorse she had felt she now regret for him and soon almost left for dead. The leader and master of the Card family was the one who had saved her and turned into a vampire. She is now the Joker Card of the family. One to never be trifled with. Saiya is also the assassin in the family. Hired by people who needs someone to be killed and getting paid for it. She finds her targets with the help of the "King Of Diamonds" tracking skills. Together they make a pretty good team but she will never admit that to him. His ego is big enough as it is now. Personality:She's calm, quiet and rarely speaks to anyone. Saiya always keeps to herself except when it comes to family members and Alluna whom she actually likes. She besides Alluna she doesn't trust anyone outside of the card family.She won't start trusting anyone until she knows the person. She became like this from past experiences. But thanks to her training as a ninja and an assassin these traits she able to conceal and portray herself as a friendly, kindhearted and cheerful person.Just like it did with Alluna, it will take time for Saiya to trust a person.
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Posted: Wed Nov 25, 2015 7:05 pm
Hey so I saw that you're awaiting character approval for Yukina. (in the OOC)
There are just a few things that I need to point out before you're accepted, so bear with me.
First, the "ninja era" was actually the Warring States Period, also known as the Sengoku Period, which lasted until the 17th century, at which point Japan was united under the Tokugawa shogunate in 1603. Afterwards, the use of ninjas tapered out, and they were virtually non-existent by the mid-1600s. You say that she was born closer to the end of this time-period, but that would make her closer 400 years old, not 300.
Also, her personality seems pretty negative. Does she have any positive traits? And if not, it would be great if you included that fact. It would just add more depth to your character.
Last thing, but I don't know where she got the power to travel through shadows. Stealth, I understand, along with the others since some tales of vampires include strength, speed, telepathy, etc. However, shadow manipulation isn't a vampire ability, nor is it an ability ninjas can just acquire (unless she wasn't human before becoming a ninja?)
But yeah, I think that's it. It's only three things; I'm just really long-winded haha.
Feel free to quote me or any of the crew when you finish editing.
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Posted: Thu Nov 26, 2015 6:51 am
To RP any of my characters just quote me with the character you want.
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 7:17 am
I think I'm done with Saiya's rewrite.
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:07 am
hey kerissa!
could you change "ninja era" to sengoku era.
also i'm a little bit confused on her history... i think i know what you're trying to say but see if you can make it more concise.
quote myself or any member of the crew and we'll swing by to approve.
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:15 am
menmei_chan hey kerissa!
could you change "ninja era" to sengoku era.
also i'm a little bit confused on her history... i think i know what you're trying to say but see if you can make it more concise.
quote myself or any member of the crew and we'll swing by to approve.
What part of her history are you confused with?
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:51 am
"that politician was so deep into his darkness..." didn't know what this had to do with his family getting hitmen.
"that remorse she had felt she nows regret for him and soon almost left for dead." i don't know what happened here history wise.
i would also switch the "Hired by people who needs someone to be killed and getting paid for it" to something along the lines of "Saiya now serves as the family assassin, taking money as payment for ending the lives of others" oh! remember to switch that ninja era thing. c:
the rest is good. c:
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:55 am
menmei_chan "that politician was so deep into his darkness..." didn't know what this had to do with his family getting hitmen.
"that remorse she had felt she nows regret for him and soon almost left for dead." i don't know what happened here history wise.
i would also switch the "Hired by people who needs someone to be killed and getting paid for it" to something along the lines of "Saiya now serves as the family assassin, taking money as payment for ending the lives of others" oh! remember to switch that ninja era thing. c:
the rest is good. c:
Haha I meant that he was corrupt and she was the one who killed him. His family got furious and hired hitmen kill off her and her own family out or revenge
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 10:33 am
type that then. as of right now that parts don't read smoothly just edit those sections and you'll be approved. c:
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 10:44 am
Done. I'm sorry I'm back and forth from helping my sis with her new cell.
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 1:56 pm
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Posted: Sat Nov 28, 2015 2:08 pm
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Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2015 7:30 pm
Saiya Card
Global Economics
Hunting & Tracking
Math Foundations
Omit Needless Words: Principles of Clear and Concise Writing
Red and Black, a Friend of Jack: Survival Techniques from the Animal Kingdom
Round the Realm: A Survey of the Magical World
World Literature
Bassilisk:
Advanced Composition
Sociology
International Political Economy
Marksmanship
Alluna:
Bubble, Bubble: Potions without the Toil and Trouble
Channel Your Inner Monet: Major Art Styles and How to Make One Your Own
Creative Writing
Magic Attack, Defense, & Stamina
Math Foundations
Lucia:
Bubble, Bubble: Potions without the Toil and Trouble
Chemistry I
Gothic Literature
Sociology
Kerissa:
Global Economics
Math Foundations
Red and Black, a Friend of Jack: Survival Techniques from the Animal Kingdom
Round the Realm: A Survey of the Magical World
Swordsmanship
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