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 Posted: Thu Dec 19, 2013 11:07 am
Dion you're an excellent talent, and your WWF:G Title reign was deservingly so.
However I do have just a couple problems I think I've mentioned them before at some extent. However this should clear things up.
The Bear is and was a very creative and original idea. However it is in my personal opinion that it was a bit ridiculous for my taste when it comes to wrestling. Also I don't see this as a problem now, but during our Mania match I noticed you post more often in the tweeter thread then the actual match. Now I didn't count the post but that's how it looked and came off to me.
Other then that, I enjoy your work very much so, and look forward to your work in the future.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 3:41 pm
XFactor! Having a fun match in WWFG right now aren't we?! Got a big story going on there too, good to see, haven't seen you so motivated and creative for a while!
I agree with Schev, more backstage stuff would be fun to get more aspects of your characters over! It doesn't have to be all serious 24/7, a bit of ridiculousness is fun! blaugh
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2013 4:46 pm
There's not much I can't say about Cartwright. He's a model member of the community, and one of the most witty and innovative writers I've ever seen. In fact, I remember the first post I ever read of his where he made a joke about the Mexican member of Pantera. He's just such a creative comedian, and the smarky attitude makes him a perfect face or heel. His promos and matches are top notch, and he's probably one of the most iconic and recognizable writers in G-Fedding. If I were to have any criticisms, it'd just be that I'd like to see more intensity in the ring. I know its not necessarily your style, but seeing Cart loose his cool would be pretty neat in some hardcore variety. But hey, that's just me.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 12:18 pm
Salem... Wow this guy just oozes potential. Very great writer, and creative storytelling. I know he knows I sound like a broken record but I haven't seen anything from him I did enjoy tremendously.
HOWEVER! I will say one thing.. Activity. Activity.. Activity... Okay.. Three things.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 12:29 pm
Seeing myself as I just joined G-Fedding. I don't have much place to make comments or remarks. I can't say much about you XFactor. From what I have seen you are very descriptive and your promos are well made and readable. But it seems like many people talk about your backstage activity. So it seems like it is clear for what you have to adjust slightly
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 3:36 pm
Having seen you in both TNWF and WWFG, I like how your pacing makes reading the match that much better. I'm talking from an RP-standpoint.
In regard to improvement...I'm not sure, I suppose just making Trent more dynamic of a character. Not so much in having a goofy gimmick (like me, for instance), but just doing more standout things. Storytelling will help in this regard.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 4:10 pm
Dion is one of those guys that you just gotta tip your hat to. He's honest to a fault, even when what he thinks might not be the popular opinion. He just says what needs to be said, and damn the naysayers. You gotta respect that from possibly the biggest proprietor of the 'No Bullshit' movement. Plus, he's a very savvy individual when it comes to stories and booking, as shown by his respectable run with CWA. And all of this doesn't even touch on his concise and commendable writing that's been worthy of many a championship. In and out of the ring, Dion is a strong example of what being a top guy means.
...I just hope CWA stays active, because it has all the tools to be a top guild, and I think Dion would benefit from a more legitimate GM role.
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Posted: Mon Dec 23, 2013 4:31 pm
Salem is no doubt a top talent, but his overeagerness to improve and show people EVERYTHING he's done isn't always the best thing.
Afraid to get a negative reaction of any kind, Salem seems to get down in the dumps when people don't immediately read his stuff.
Also there's a thing going on that he likes to control the entire match move for move.
Some of the greatest matches aren't controlled.
I feel Salem will have more fun if he's laid back, loosen up and learn to chill.
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Posted: Tue Dec 24, 2013 10:27 am
Unrivaled in his ability to run a federation, EWA is living proof that Chrono knows his s**t. As far as improving his ability, based solely on what I have seen from him since retiring from competing, I feel that he could take a more hands on role as GM of WWFG, and by this I mean interact with each and every member of the roster on a more regular basis. Other then that, I got nothing.
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Posted: Tue Dec 24, 2013 12:57 pm
You like to hit things with hammers. That's awesome.
But you tend to do what Snypa does when it comes to selling: ya do it, but things don't frazzle you emotionally. And that comes across as being a flat Harli. It's like nothing upsets you unless it's something related to not getting what you want. I would see about exploring more into reacting to things and less "I just hit it with a hammer".
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Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2013 12:39 am
Shadow, I have heard great things about you. You are one of the top guys in the feds. And in BBW I have the honor of facing you. Not trying to come across as a kiss-a**.
But since I bring up BBW and out match, there is a bit of a problem with the activity. Everyone can be a little inactive, or have something to do. But it is something I just noticed
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Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2013 12:57 am
Can't really say anything about you since I havent seen much lately.
But at the same time, Im eager to see the potential.
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Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2013 1:01 am
(Edit: Since Lauri's post came as I was writing mine, I'm throwing this quote up here to clarify.) Andrew is another new cat to come onto the scene, but he's already building his credibility by being the first Seasons Champion in BBW history. (I almost typed BBQ there. Man, I want ribs!) He's polite, friendly, and very laid back when it comes to working a match. He's also a guy that appreciates the story of a match, itself, rather than seeing them as just a means to build a story. That kind of match-working is how you really set yourself apart from people going through the motions. It's also something that veterans will appreciate and will go a long way towards getting you more noticed and called upon.
If I were to have any advice for you, Andrew, it'd be to not over-expose with your detail. Giving people a deeper look into what you're doing in a match is important, but don't telegraph your thoughts and feelings all the time - sometimes, you can distract the reader or make what you're doing next seem predictable. There's an abundance of angles you can approach your posts from, so don't be shy about trying new ways to connect with the crowd. Sometimes, teasing the details can do more than spelling it out.
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Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2013 9:54 am
Good natural writing skillz, fantastic to work with. Good at getting emotion and detail out of posts and scenarios that most people wouldn't know what the ******** to do with. Gnarly selling. Could have better psychology but that s**t can't be learned, comes with experience. I gueeess I would say be more active but I'd be one to talk. MERRY CHRISTMAS
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Posted: Wed Dec 25, 2013 1:28 pm
Salem Croft (Edit: Since Lauri's post came as I was writing mine, I'm throwing this quote up here to clarify.) Andrew is another new cat to come onto the scene, but he's already building his credibility by being the first Seasons Champion in BBW history. (I almost typed BBQ there. Man, I want ribs!) He's polite, friendly, and very laid back when it comes to working a match. He's also a guy that appreciates the story of a match, itself, rather than seeing them as just a means to build a story. That kind of match-working is how you really set yourself apart from people going through the motions. It's also something that veterans will appreciate and will go a long way towards getting you more noticed and called upon.
If I were to have any advice for you, Andrew, it'd be to not over-expose with your detail. Giving people a deeper look into what you're doing in a match is important, but don't telegraph your thoughts and feelings all the time - sometimes, you can distract the reader or make what you're doing next seem predictable. There's an abundance of angles you can approach your posts from, so don't be shy about trying new ways to connect with the crowd. Sometimes, teasing the details can do more than spelling it out. Just a note, that is Trent, not Andrew Styles. Freakshow, I love your work. You know that, I know that. There's not a better heel at all, no one can compare no matter how hard they try. No one makes it seem so natural and so fluid. The thing I really want to see from you though is activity. Mainly in BBW. C'mon. ;D Reader: if you wanna go ahead and skip me and critique Lauri, please feel free to. Seriously, go ahead. Skip me. Don't say a word. Yeeeeee' boy.
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