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___youwillknownihilism Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 02, 2013 12:50 am
▌MAIN INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Name: Kozi ☐ Nickname/Famous Name: The Unstable
☐ Age: 18 ☐ Birthdate: 5/11
☐ Gender: Female ☐ Sexuality: Straight ☐ Ethnicity: Sorakara
☐ Height: 5'4 ☐ Weight: 100
☐ Personality: She is a very serious and cutthroat even though she can't even speak at all. If it came down to it, she'd break everything down to nothing if it got her ahead and gave her power. Other than that she's just a normal, loveable girl... sorta. A loveable... power hungry... mentally stablish woman. ☐ Family: None of any note.
☐ Theme Song: Wrecking Ball ☐ Nindo: "Power should exist without limit! There should be no control... only infinity and it's eternal promise. I am your salvation through destruction. I am the next step in evolution! I AM UNSTOPPABLE!" ☐ Background: The beginning of her life is a dull one, no doubt. She was smarter than the average and breezed through her youth as a cut above the rest. Everything from her looks to her attitude gave off an air of superiority. Her mental powers didn't develop any ground until she was 17 years old. Before then she gave no thought to being a ninja, but when she learned of her specific set, she left home to enroll herself in the academy. Immediately following her first three months of school she graduated with honors and reccommendation for scouting for many corps besides the rank and file.
Still she felt like she had no drive, no purpose. Everything was simply too easy! She needed more than just recommendation and pats on the back. Praise was empty and meaningless. It wasn't until the day of the battle between the leader of Sora and Genzai, his brother, that she found her drive. The battle was godly! She was awestruck by the explosive power the two produced seemingly effortlessly. With a new view on life, a very warped and askewed one, she thought she'd have a very goodnights sleep. Instead she awoke her roommate to a mental scream that was so powerful it caused her ears to bleed.
In the night she had been granted a psychic vision of the future... a future where she had torn the ground around Sora up from the very planet and formed a new, better Sora even higher in the sky. A vision where she was strong enough to ground Soragakure and ascended only the strong to her new world. A world where Kozi and Kaisen would be free to destroy everything and anything... a world where they already had... And in a flash it was all gone and she had awakened from what she thought was eternal happiness. It drove her over the edge. Only Kaisen knows of her aspirations, and though he doesn't condone them, he doesn't condemn her for them. Since her dream she has been on a mission to gain the power she had yearned for. ▌NINJA INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Village: Sora ☐ Rank: Genin
☐ Fame/Infamy: -2 ☐ Ryo: 0
☐ Class: Sensor (Long Range)
☐ Bloodline: Mind Sculptor - Stage: 1 ☐ Clan: Yamanaka
☐ Element(s): Wind ☐ Chakra Points: 20
☐ Passives: Genjutsu Resistance- 1/2 Perception- 1/2 ☐ Personal Attributes: -
☐ Strengths: - Long Range - Close Range - Mental Combat ☐ Weakness: - Summoners - Solid Defenses - Fire ☐ Fears: - Giant Mutant Spider Demons - Drowning - Inadequacy
☐ Missions: - D: - C: - B: - A: - S:
☐ Special Items: - Items - Gained - In RP [link to all]
☐ Weapons: - Swords ▌JUTSU INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Mind Sculptor Techniques: - Understand - Invade -
☐ Yamanaka: -Mind Body Switch -Mind Body Switch Cursed Seal -Mind Clone Switch Technique
☐ Universal Techniques: - Transformation Technique - Magic Cloak of Invisibility - Rope Untying - Unlocking
- Tree/Wall/Water Walking
- Release
☐ Element Wind: - - -
☐ Genjutsu: - - -
☐ Tai style: - - - ▌CUSTOM INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Weapon Name: namehere ☐ Length: ☐ Ability:
☐ Technique Name: namehere ☐ Element: ☐ Type: ☐ Description:
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Posted: Mon Dec 02, 2013 2:46 pm
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 1:39 am
▌MAIN INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Name: Zōge ☐ Nickname/Famous Name: The Devourerer...
☐ Age: 16 ☐ Birthdate: June 9th
☐ Gender: Male ☐ Sexuality: Heterosexual ☐ Ethnicity: Atlantiean
☐ Height: 6'3" ☐ Weight: 189 lb
☐ Personality Zoge is a free spirit. Like most sharks he goes with the with the flow of water never stopping. Also, he won't fight for a meal. Zoge takes mood from his brother often times going into bloodrage at the smell of rasberries. One of his many quirks, which stems from his fear of dehydration is carrying a spray bottle and constantly spraying himself and others Www. ☐ Family -Kurisofori [Father] -Horia [Mother] -Kokutan [Brother] ☐ Theme Song: Bromance ☐ Nindo:"I'm never gill-ty" ☐ Background: Zoge and his twin brother have lived a very interesting life. They were born like everyone else and had a relatively normal couple of years before the madness started. His mother murdered his father, pushing him down a flight of stairs then finishing the job by stabbing him to death with scissors. His mother went on to leave Zoge, Kokutan and the rest of his siblings at a "foster camp", which was actually a front for a child smuggling ring. At this point Zoge and Kokutan were brutally tortured. Zoge was left without water for weeks and Kokutan was placed in genjutsu where he was harassed by demon dolphins. To pass the time, the camp leaders would force the children to fight. The twins mercilessly killed all their enemies including their own siblings. The fatalities in the camp continued even after the fighting stopped for the day. When it became clear that the culprits were the two boys, they were quickly sold. On the way to their new camp the boys were "rescued" by a disheveled man. He went on to teach the boys all they would need to know about life on the four day trip back to his village. Once at the village, the man escorted the boys to well off families offering them as personal servants. All of the prospective customers declined due to the boys appearance and general behavior. The man, let down that his new merchandise bore no fruit, cut his losses. After being in the child smuggling system for years, the boys were dropped off in front of the village academy. To start a new life, not too different from their previous one with no one but themselves. ▌NINJA INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Village: Tsukigakure ☐ Rank: Genin
☐ Fame/Infamy: ☐ Ryo:
☐ Class:Summoning - Monkeys - Path: [Single Elemental Master]
☐ Bloodline: Hoshigaki ☐ Clan: None ☐ Demon: None ☐ Summoning(s): None
☐ Element(s): Suiton ☐ Chakra Points: 24
☐ Passives: - Can naturally breathe water - 20% Chakra increase - 20% Water technique chakra reduction - Weakness to Raiton [1/2 Rank] - - - - - -
☐ Personal Attributes: - Shark Morphology: Zoge's body has two very developed extrasensory organs. (1)The Lateral Line system allows the detection of movement and vibrations through the water surrounding an animal, providing spatial awareness and the ability to navigate in space. The user must be touching a hydrated medium to receive this input. If no vibrations (sound or movement) reaches the water medium, the user will not detect the object.
Distance via water : 50 meter radius
(2)The Ampullae of Lorenzini Zōge are used to sense electric fields. They provide a sixth sense capable of detecting electromagnetic fields and temperature.
Distance via land: 10 meter radius Distance via water: 25 meter radius
-Titan grip: Can wield two-handed weapons as if they were one-handed weapons.
☐ Strengths: -Easy going nature - Predator mind-set - Endurance ☐ Weakness: - His brother - Laziness - Raiton jutsu ☐ Fears: - The death of his brother - dehydration -
☐ Missions: - D: - C: - B: - A: - S:
☐ Special Items: - Items - Gained - In RP [link to all]
☐ Weapons: - Kunai x 25 - Wire x 200 m - Explosive tag x 10 - Ink bomb x 10 - ninjato ▌JUTSU INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Bloodline Techniques: - Lake Creation - Five Feeding Sharks - Water Shark Bullet - Rain Water Shark Wave ☐ Clan Techniques: - - -
☐ Universal Techniques: - Transformation Technique - Magic Cloak of Invisibility - Rope Untying - Unlocking
- Tree/Wall/Water Walking
- Release
☐ Water: -• Water Prison - • Mist Vision - • Hidden Mist Jutsu - • Starch Syrup Capture Field - • Gun Shot
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☐ Genjutsu/Medical/Sealing: - - -
☐ Tai style: -Wing Chun (stage two) - -
☐ Buki Style: - - - ▌CUSTOM INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Weapon Name: ☐ Length: ☐ Ability:
☐ Technique Name: ☐ Element: ☐ Type: ☐ Description:
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 6:50 am
▌MAIN INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Name: Kokutan ☐ Nickname/Famous Name: A ninja named Kokutan
☐ Age: 16 ☐ Birthdate: June 9th
☐ Gender: Male ☐ Sexuality: Heterosexual ☐ Ethnicity: Atlantiean
☐ Height: 6'3" ☐ Weight: 190 lb
☐ Personality: Kokutan is a volatile shinobi with a track record to match. He is overly curious and doubts almost anything he hears. Always in a pursuit of improvement, he carries a very 'against the struggle' mentality. He is often berated, usually by his brother, for his plans going wrong. Not without reason, as most of his plans end up botched due to his lack of finesse. This has, however, led to him being surprisingly good at improvisation. Some would consider it his forte. He is widely recognized for his violent outburst, which are followed by a calm and off-setting change of pace. In battle, he is a wild and unpredictable man. His blood lust has been known to be so potent that some say they smell raspberries when he gets going, although it has never been really proven. With a deadly combination of ruthlessness and selfishness, if you need a job done Kokutan is your ninja.
☐ Family: -Kurisofori [Father] -Horia [Mother] -Zouge [Brother]
☐ Theme Song: Say it with me now
☐ Nindo: "The absence of evidence is not the evidence of absence. "
☐ Background: Zoge and his twin brother have lived a very interesting life. They were born like everyone else and had a relatively normal couple of years before the madness started. His mother murdered his father, pushing him down a flight of stairs then finishing the job by stabbing him to death with scissors. His mother went on to leave Zoge, Kokutan and the rest of his siblings at a "foster camp", which was actually a front for a child smuggling ring. At this point Zoge and Kokutan were brutally tortured. Zoge was left without water for weeks and Kokutan was placed in genjutsu where he was harassed by demon dolphins. To pass the time, the camp leaders would force the children to fight. The twins mercilessly killed all their enemies including their own siblings. The fatalities in the camp continued even after the fighting stopped for the day. When it became clear that the culprits were the two boys, they were quickly sold. On the way to their new camp the boys were "rescued" by a disheveled man. He went on to teach the boys all they would need to know about life on the four day trip back to his village. Once at the village, the man escorted the boys to well off families offering them as personal servants. All of the prospective customers declined due to the boys appearance and general behavior. The man, let down that his new merchandise bore no fruit, cut his losses. After being in the child smuggling system for years, the boys were dropped off in front of the village academy. To start a new life, not too different from their previous one with no one but themselves. ▌NINJA INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Village: Tsukigakure ☐ Rank: Gennin
☐ Fame/Infamy: ☐ Ryo:
☐ Class: Taijutsu - Path: [Speed Passive]
☐ Bloodline: Hoshigaki ☐ Clan: None ☐ Demon: None ☐ Summoning(s): None
☐ Element(s): Suiton ☐ Chakra Points: 24
☐ Passives: - Can naturally breathe water - 20% Chakra increase - 20% Water technique chakra reduction - Melee Master [1 Rank] [Taijutsu + Wing Chun] - Speed Passive [1/2 Rank] [Taijutsu] - Strength Passive [1 Rank] [Crushing Helm + Monster Physique] - Perception Passive [1/2 Rank] [Shark Week] - Tough Passive [1/2 Rank] [Shark Week] - Weakness to Raiton [1/2 Rank]
☐ Personal Attributes: Shark Morphology: Kokutan's body has two very developed extrasensory organs.
- The Lateral Line system allows the detection of movement and vibrations through the water surrounding an animal, providing spatial awareness and the ability to navigate in space. The user must be touching a hydrated medium to receive this input. If no vibrations (sound or movement) reaches the water medium, the user will not detect the object.
Distance via water: 50
-The Ampullae of Lorenzini Kokutan are used to sense electric fields. They provide a sixth sense capable of detecting electromagnetic fields and temperature.
Distance via land: 10 meter radius Distance via water: 25 meter radius
-Monster Physique: + 1/2 rank to Strength
☐ Strengths: - Durable - Versatile - Predator mind-set ☐ Weakness: - His brother - Raiton jutsu - His recklessness ☐ Fears: - Dolphins - Being watched - The death of his brother - People laughing at his skin color ☐ Missions: - D: 0 - C: 0 - B: 0 - A: 0 - S: 0
☐ Special Items: - None
☐ Weapons: - Ago - Kunai x 25 - Wire x 200 m - Explosive tag x 10 - Ink bomb x 10 - Sake bottle ▌JUTSU INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Bloodline Techniques: - Lake Creation - Five Feeding Sharks - Water Shark Bullet - Rain Water Shark Wave
☐ Clan Techniques: - - -
☐ Universal Techniques: - Transformation Technique - Magic Cloak of Invisibility - Rope Untying - Unlocking
- Tree/Wall/Water Walking
- Release ☐ Water Release:
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☐ Genjutsu/Medical/Sealing: - - -
☐ Tai style: - [Wing Chun] - [Stage Two] • Roll
- [Shark Week] - • Serrated teeth • Swell
- [Stone Body] - • Pickaxe Elbow
☐ Buki Style: - [Crushing Helm] - • Guillotine
▌CUSTOM INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Weapon Name: Ago ☐ Length: 170 cm ☐ Ability: Unknown
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 3:42 pm
I checked all around the guild for possible training posts and I didn't see any, so those tai techniques shouldn't be there. You auto get bloodlines techniques at your level, which is Genin, not Chuunin. Your shark morphology is vague as well. You should have genin level chakra. 20% of 20 is 4, so you'd have 24 chakra.
The same issue with Demonic's stuff, I couldn't find any sort of proof of you guys having actually learned stuff or gotten to Chuunin. On top of that the shark morphology is super vague. You have four personal attributes, you should only have 3. And + 1/2 rank to reflex isn't a stat you can get. There's perception, and speed. You can't have Ibuse has a summoning because he's S rank, and you are only a genin. Remove like all of your passive stats, you get these through learning tai/buki styles or active ninjutsu bonuses. And your class says summoning, but then you have a bonus that was meant for the ninjutsu class (which has been changed anyway).
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 5:20 pm
I have made the changes we talked about. If there is anything else I can do, please let me know!
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 8:20 pm
Lower the range of the detection via water down to 50, remove the onland distance as it says you pick up vibrations through water, not land.
Also, be aware that you will be susceptible to sound genjutsu/ninjutsu in water more so than anyone else, due to your heightened ability to pick up vibrations and what not.
The Lorenzini one via water should be 25 meters.
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 8:51 pm
I was trying to make a distinction between water on land and a body of water such as a lake or ocean. Is that not appropriate?
I do not think that the weakness to genjutsu or sound jutsu would be appropriate. In terms of a sound genjutsu, they would not target that sensory organ, so why would it be affected? It would just act as a normal genjutsu. Interpreting the vibration is not a form of enhanced human hearing. It's its own seperate sense. The 20hz to 20 kHz range isn't extended. It would have it's own thresholds with appropriate sensitivity adjustment, like an analogue hearing aid.
[Fun fact about sharks: Those distances were actually relevant. How crazy is that? A shark can feel you swimming 300 meters away. This research made me super paranoid. Lol]
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Posted: Tue Dec 03, 2013 10:54 pm
The profile is edited! (although I can't guarantee it's correct.)
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Posted: Wed Dec 04, 2013 1:11 am
▌MAIN INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Name: Simon Semta ☐ Nickname/Famous Name: Simon of the Dust
☐ Age: 17 ☐ Birthdate: 6/07
☐ Gender: Male ☐ Sexuality: Homosexual ☐ Ethnicity: Caucasian
☐ Height: 5'11" ☐ Weight: 163 LBs
☐ Personality: Very cunning, duty-bound, calm, collected. Self-serving, ambitious, and generally wily. ☐ Family: A bunch of random a** hoes. ✚
☐ Theme Song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j_PPjgVnIUk ☐ Quote: "There are two Gods in this world. Unknowingly, from the womb of a mortal woman, the second has been let loose." ☐ Background: WIP ▌NINJA INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Village: Tsukigakure ☐ Rank: Genin
☐ Fame/Infamy: 0 ☐ Ryo: 0
☐ Class: Enhanced Fighter - Path: [Chakra Control] Users receive a 20% reduction in costs for their ninjutsu ☐ Bloodline: Jinton - Stage: Bloodline Head [Stage 1] ☐ Clan: Jashinism
☐ Element(s): Earth, Wind, Fire ☐ Chakra Points: 30
☐ Passives:
• [Elemental Fighter] Users are able to perform the seals for B rank techniques and below and seal it into their body. Afterward they are able to release this jutsu with a gesture that logically fits when they wish while fighting. • Access to Nin/Tai techniques • 25% chakra boost [Jinton] • 20% chakra reduction [class]
☐ Personal Attributes: 20% additional chakra
☐ Strengths: - Ninjutsu - All attacks are one shots - Diversity ☐ Weakness: - Both hands required in order to use Jinton - Genjutsu ☐ Fears: - Furries - Anthro - Feminist tumblr blogs
☐ Missions: - D: - C: - B: - A: - S:
☐ Special Items: -
☐ Weapons: - The Penetrator ( http://www.thekartel.com/wp-content/uploads/The-Penetrator-610x406.jpg ) ▌JUTSU INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Bloodline Techniques: - - -
☐ Clan Techniques: - - -
☐ Universal Techniques: - Transformation Technique - Magic Cloak of Invisibility - Rope Untying - Unlocking
- Tree/Wall/Water Walking
- Release
☐ Earth: - - -
☐ Genjutsu/Medical/Sealing: - - -
☐ Tai style: - - -
☐ Buki Style: - - - ▌CUSTOM INFORMATION ▌ ☐ Weapon Name: namehere ☐ Length: ☐ Ability:
☐ Technique Name: namehere ☐ Element: ☐ Type: ☐ Description:
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Posted: Wed Dec 04, 2013 1:22 am
If a genjutsu is triggered by someone feeling the vibrations then you'd be in it, as well as the sound ninjutsu.
Approved.
Approved
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Posted: Wed Dec 04, 2013 5:24 pm
Before you approve my profile: On the five free justu, as genin what is highest rank I can have?
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Posted: Wed Dec 04, 2013 7:22 pm
Two ranks above, which is B
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Posted: Wed Dec 04, 2013 7:31 pm
Alright! Ready for the check of approval.
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Posted: Thu Dec 05, 2013 1:19 pm
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