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I think so! You'll be getting a full official staff crit from Orange soon, and her opinion might differ, but mine is yeah, it should.

Howlite's weapon isn't a bomb. It only emits light and a concussive force, not an explosion. That's why it's permissible

yes, like a flash bomb I suppose. But it's not like dynamite

I would recommend that you go through and try to correct your spelling and grammar. It makes the profile hard to read.

I'm still bothered by "experimenting" as a hobby. If high school chemistry and Breaking Bad have taught us anything it's that just mixing chemicals for reactions can be extremely dangerous. Mixing bleach and chlorine, or example, is horribly dangerous and can kill a person with the gas it creates. Just trying to find the fastest, brightest reaction kind of seems like the show Jackass with chemicals to me. I'm a novice at chemistry but if I know stuff like that I can only imagine what real chemistry buffs could find wrong with it. As such, I'd like it if he experimented to a purpose. Is he trying to create something? Is he trying to find something specific. Is he actually doing this to an end instead of just randomly tossing stuff together for shits and giggles?

For Helpful - how does he help people? Does he have a limit to how much he helps? Does he ever try to help too much?

Quick Thinking reads very awkwardly. You keep saying he's clever but you don't say how. "He can come up with fast way to get him out of them and how not to get into any conflicts" How? Does he tell jokes? Does he lie or come up with excuses? Does he baffle people with BS? How does he do this?

"He is clumsy so he find his self in very awkward situation, so he think of clever way to get him out of these situation so people won't think of him badly." I would get rid of that or clarify because it kind of sounds like you're negating his flaw of clumsy. The whole point of a flaw is to have people look down on him for it. If they don't it's not a flaw.

For Kind - how is he kind? How does he show other people this kindness? Does he bring them gifts? Does he help stray kittens? Give us some examples of this behavior.

I'd like to see an example of this "Russell say things that means one way to him but mean something else to other." for Awkward.

For clumsy - mostly right now its just a physical trait. I get that knocking things over and stuff can be annoying but how does this shape his interactions with others? Does he hurt other people accidentally? Does he break their stuff? "He also get into really bad situation because he does things that he doesn't mean to do." Clarify that. This has the potential to be a really good flaw.

Wooo! Staff Crit time!

Hey Znaruto, I first off want to give you a big congrats on winning Russell! He is adorable! Second off, I noticed that you had changed his age from 22 to 24, and I wanted to let you know that if you want to keep him at age 22 that is perfectly fine. I am 22 years old and I have friends who are the same age as me and they are now teaching at a high school, so that age is not an issue in the slightest.

Let’s take a look at his profile now! 8D

His hobbies look fine to me, he seems like an adorable character from them, and I just imagine him having a million rats in his house. And like, treating them all like family XD For his experimenting, I can see it working as well, he would just have to be careful with what he does, and anyone will know that you shouldn’t put some things together, though it might be good rp fodder for him to have blown his eyebrows off at one time or another too, so I think that is a fine hobby!

His virtues look pretty good to me as well, though if you could flesh out his kind virtue just a bit, that would be wonderful. For example, is he kind to everyone? Or is there some people that he isn’t kind to? Does his kindness extend to the all of the students, or are there just some that get under his skin? Just maybe add a few more lines of clarification and this should be good to go!
His flaws look pretty good to me, though I must point out that being clumsy is not a flaw, rather it is a physical trait. If you could just change this one to something else, that would be wonderful, because the other three look good to me! I really like the awkward trait, it seems like he would try to have a good conversation and just let it go down the tubes!

Moving onto his powered side, I adore the costume that you’ve made for him, it is very pretty, though for his weapon I think you have made him very underpowered!

His first stage weapon looks pretty good to me, the general silly toy item, and it is a clever one at that. His Captain and General upgrades could be expanded to have a much more painful and even deadly connotation if you would like, like perhaps an acid that only burns living flesh? If you had the captain item be able to burn the skin of an opponent when the slime touches, you would have a much smaller radius, but if you had the slime bombs in General, you could have the slime have some sort of acid in it which could cause burns when it touched the skin? Like, make it only hurt the skin, have restrictions like that on it and you should be just fine I think!

Please quote me with any chances you have and we can get him trial stamped! 8D