Crit incoming~
I looked up what a hippocerf was and was wondering what makes it scary. Give it a halloween twist so it'll fit into the world!
Her personality:
Her traits hardly match to the descriptions D:
Impatient with others, yet expects others to wait for her. Her way of waiting is almost not mentioned. Really highlight how she doesn't wait, how it effects her relationships with others.
Do this with all her traits, as many of them go onto tangents Try to answer some simple questions in each trait
How does this effect her
Why does she do this
When is there an exemption
What makes this an appealing/unappealing accept of her
Where might she not have this trait playing in, where would it override
Who does this trait effect most
Try to answer at least three of those in each trait and remember- traits should reflect how she deals with others, not her quirks or environment.
Reason to enroll: This is really jumbled and hard for me to understand.
She comes from a very poor family, yet they were able to enroll her in a very expensive school, but only for 5 months as her father thought it would raise their family's social status? But she requested to enroll as she was being teased? Try to be a bit more clear here please!
FEAR: Don't make up how long an attack with last. just leave it vague. Pick one of the mechanics from the FEAR guide. (This attack sounds like headlights)
