Just giving some crits!
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ยค Unlike most Azmodel was not born from the pumpkin patch. Centuries ago the Trojan War created an incredible amount of Fear. And ever since it slowly drifted towards Halloween, creating new minipets and beings. And this Walkyrie is one of them. When she took form Charon the reaper (who had been happilly collecting the dead during that war) was waiting for her. He took upon him to educate her as he had done with all the others born from that Fear before her.
I am afraid this origin story will not work for several reasons. The basic one being that we really try to discourage any origin stories that are 'that old' as there is no logic why they would be enrolling just now. Students are to not really have had any contact with the human world/any connections with it as well- her forming from a war thousands of years ago is not likely. Reapers also only collect the dead and ghosts, another reaper would simply have been in halloween- likely from/around a pumpkin patch. We also don't really allow ties to 'real' or 'famous' myths and such.
I can offer an alternative- Perhaps she is descended from reapers who worked the Trojan war. Just the same- Why would a reaper class based out of Norse myth be tied to Greek? Remember, the humans who generated the fear would have ties to their culture.
Got to ask since it ties into the above- What is a Walkyrie and why/how is it different from a valkyrie? You refer to her as a valkyrie later on as well. So it begs the question why her lament is so different from anything in the myth base. So, just what is a walkyrie and how is it different?
Personality wise- She doesn't strike me as laid back or shy so much as she strikes me as all and all crazy. The traits seem rather contradictory- How do they relate to each other, how does her crazy prevent her from making them? Help her in making them? How is she shy and what sets her off? A lot has gone into how erratic she is- what other parts of her are there? The personality comes off as a bit negative because with being crazy/erratic there is little that would make her attractive to RP with in the sense of making friends. What she has
isn't bad, just expand on it! Show her good qualities, what makes her a good person, a good friend!
Fear is fine! As is appearance~
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