Lemon Mower
Hello! I'm aware you put a lot of work into your formatting, but I would really appreciate it if you kept all the text to black / one dark color. ;;; I have pretty crappy eyesight and the goldenrod color is too light / bright to read comfortably -- the color switching you have going on in your attack descriptions is honestly distracting. If you want to emphasize something in a description, please bold or italicize it instead. Thank you!
CIV SIDE:
Hobbies look just fine! I'm having trouble following her Loyal virtue, though. Lemme pull down the description to explain:
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Don't worry about your secret, it's safe with Ivy. She's always been loyal to her friends, so secrets never slip off her tongue. If you're looking for a someone to just tell something too, or you're in a pickle, head on over to Ivy, assuming you're her friend. If you're mean to her, don't even consider that Ivy's gonna be loyal to you if you've shown her unkindness. If being loyal to you is hurting somebody else though, she won't be loyal for long.
The bolded part is kind of contradictory to what loyalty is. Loyalty implies an unconditional commitment to another person, basically... and if she has such an easy time dropping her allegiance with a friend or colleague, then loyalty isn't exactly her strong suit. I think you should reevaluate your character a bit and replace this with something else.
Along with this, you need to add a third flaw -- you should not have more virtues and flaws, or vice versa! We have the profile form set up like this so you can prove that you are setting up your character in a balanced fashion.
As such, her Judgmental trait also needs some fixing. Flaws are meant to be reasons for others to dislike or look down on your character -- and so it needs to be something that other characters can observe in order for it to count. The fact that she "rarely expresses" her judgmentality kind of undoes it as a flaw -- nobody can read her mind, so it never negatively influences others. If you want to keep this as a flaw, then her judging of others can't be completely internalized. The bit about being rude to people she doesn't like is a nice start, but it still needs to be expanded so it can affect people in general (and not just those she thinks bad about).
SENSHI SIDE:
Before I start with attacks, I wanted to point out that attacks are invoked by saying the actual name of the attack. So she would shout "Tiger Claw!" -- not her first challenge. The challenge itself is her catchphrase!
As far as the attacks themselves go, they seem more appropriate for a senshi of Predators than for a senshi specifically of Tigers. This is because you're not really invoking anything that's unique about tigers: the claws and fangs and hunting are things that ALL predators possess.
If you're set on Tigers as a power sphere, I suggest you do a little more research so you can make attack concepts that are really evocative of that animal. Instead of going off the natural abilities of tigers, it might work better to express the idea and essence of a tiger through your senshi's attacks. There is a TON of symbolism from Asian cultures that you can work with here: among other things tigers can be symbols of power, bravery, confidence, and disciplined awareness.
For example, you could make an "Eye of the Tiger!" attack that enhances the target's awareness of their surroundings and increases their reaction time. Or you could have her cast "Heart of the Tiger!" and give someone a boost in strength. Just search around a bit for ideas ~ I'm sure you can come up with something that's fun and fits the power sphere!
