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 Posted: Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:43 pm
owo! Cool. :3 Glad to hear I don't actually have to make any changes to her FEAR, then. Swift Strikes works just fine with me for the dice mechanic!
And I'm so glad to hear everyone likes her personality! I was hoping to write someone who would catch attention and be a fun addition to the world; I'm glad she seems to be an interesting combination of traits and all * * And yes, Smerdle, that was the plan! :3 Balancing out something that could be too broken otherwise! And thank you, Grey! I was hoping that would work well for a ghost~
I do have to admit, I perhaps was not thinking too much about expanding the natural ability! I was fine with it being only active when agreed on. owo That being said, I could make it so, later on, it could be a kind of illusion sort of thing--catches attention in general as opposed to playing off the societal vision of beautiful. You see something, you feel like you need to turn to look at her ,,, you just see a normal girl with a surgical mask.
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2012 11:59 pm
As a general thing I noticed, you tend to use 'absolutes' in her personality, such as always, never ect. With these, I just about always encourage people to alter it to things like, 'nearly always' 'almost never' ect. Thew reason being that if they are absolutes, that means that they will have no change of deviation, and must follow that set trait in rp which really often never works out because of the simple nature of rps and characters changing. I suggest go through her personality and just mixing the absolutes up to add the almost, occasionally, ect so that way the trait is more open and allows a more 'natural' flow of a personality.
Talking- what happens when she's told to shut up? |D
On remembering, what happens if she recalls something wrongly? Or, she forgets something?
In her sympathy, what happens when she says the wrong thing, or finds out something is her fault?
Mask- what happens if it's removed, or it breaks, gets mentioned, ect?
I like how you point out her possesiveness w/ people and how this is a drawback very nicely done <3
You mention part of why she enrolled in her personality so I'd move that nugget into the actual reason as well.
FEAR is fine~
on appearance, what I think might be cute is if her mask had a symbol on it like maybe her pin design or such? bedazzled mask |D
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iStoleYurVamps
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:13 am
iStoleYurVamps As a general thing I noticed, you tend to use 'absolutes' in her personality, such as always, never ect. With these, I just about always encourage people to alter it to things like, 'nearly always' 'almost never' ect. Thew reason being that if they are absolutes, that means that they will have no change of deviation, and must follow that set trait in rp which really often never works out because of the simple nature of rps and characters changing. I suggest go through her personality and just mixing the absolutes up to add the almost, occasionally, ect so that way the trait is more open and allows a more 'natural' flow of a personality. Quote: Talking- what happens when she's told to shut up? |D
That being said, her yammering is a bit of a compulsion and oft times she has trouble doing as requested.
Quote: On remembering, what happens if she recalls something wrongly? Or, she forgets something?
Quote: In her sympathy, what happens when she says the wrong thing, or finds out something is her fault?
Quote: Mask- what happens if it's removed, or it breaks, gets mentioned, ect?
Quote: I like how you point out her possesiveness w/ people and how this is a drawback very nicely done <3 You mention part of why she enrolled in her personality so I'd move that nugget into the actual reason as well.
Quote: FEAR is fine~ on appearance, what I think might be cute is if her mask had a symbol on it like maybe her pin design or such? bedazzled mask |D
Perhaps? I admit, I don't have a pin design for her yet, so I'm mostly curious to see what Onnie might do with it owo
Thank you!
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 12:22 am
Profile should be updated now. :3
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2012 10:02 pm
Squealing the entire way, the acceptance bin made came to a fork in the path, also known as stairs. Which way should it take - up or down? - the shouts were already halfway across the hallway. Without a further thought, well, as much as a thought as a piece of office appliance reanimated could have, it plunged down into the abyss of stairs, past another hallway, and then scuttered into the abandoned other bathroom.
With a small sigh, after the coast seem relatively clear, it sadly regurgitated several of the application forms it had stowed away, staring at them sadly - which was a strange feat considering it was an acceptance bin with no eyes.
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