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 Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 12:07 pm
Still looking for Crits and Feedback, swingers!
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 12:33 am
Updated reference under construction! Still looking for overall crits/opinions! O: <3 
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 12:11 pm
This guy looks so awesome xD I bet he'd be lots of fun to play with, and I'm sorry I'm horrible at crits but I'm gonna try anyway cuz i'm made of that much awesome~! What is he prideful about exactly? His looks? His talent? Does he look up to his parents for resent them? I hope I'm helping with this D: Link for crit trade?Edit: ALSO~! You could possibly incorporate both into his fear? He could have hypnosis, but only start out with the rats/vermin, and then work its way up to students/humans :3
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 12:16 pm
Muffinsbaby This guy looks so awesome xD I bet he'd be lots of fun to play with, and I'm sorry I'm horrible at crits but I'm gonna try anyway cuz i'm made of that much awesome~! What is he prideful about exactly? His looks? His talent? Does he look up to his parents for resent them? I hope I'm helping with this D: Link for crit trade?QUESTIONS ALWAYS HELP!! And are my favorite >8| It shows me things people are still curious about. And he's totally prideful of his position, generally. He's not a hoity-toity Demon, but his family does hold sway in the Halloween Underground- or did, anyway, before the HORRIBLE ACCIDENT I have yet to write anything about. Mostly it's a tough-guy exterior to try to hide the fact he's an awkward teen and over compensating. :C I AM DEBATING HIS RELATIONSHIP WITH HIS PARENTS O: Generally I think he's totally into the family biz, but I think his older sister is more interested in taking over where their dead parents left behind... Enzo is a bit more of a slacker and a thug. He THINKS he's good at calling shots, but really... he's kind of impractical about it a lot of the time. INSECT MINIONS TIDY MY HAIR. Rat Minions, shine my shoes! Oop they got ate by Bass, whatevs. ((hunts for fresh ones.))
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 12:18 pm
He's totally awesome!
The design on his bass is.. boss. XD
His profile is really well filled in except, of course, for the things you left blank. You mentioned wanting to play him in the event.. so I thought of things I would want to know of my character in order to play (cause thats how I think).
I am interested in knowing exactly what happened at his old school.. and if his FEAR was involved in it. Also interested in knowing about his family (mafia reapers? SO COOL!).
Also if you have decided a general idea for his FEAR it would be good to clarify it and put it in. I am totally in support of the rat swarm.. but BECAUSE it's hypnosis. You sort of already said this.. but it would be more complete to be IN the bio.
If you feel like you need more, maybe you could further elaborate on his personality traits.
Errr that's it!
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 12:37 pm
Yo bili! Since the last time I posted here it really wasn't a crit I shall leave questions for you! Who influences his musical style? What were his parents in the mafia exactly? What does he do when he gets angry/frustrated? The bass! I want to know more about it! How does it act? Can it sing? Are its strings its vocal chords? Does it have a fear of fire/axes. What's its name!? XD If you have time Check out Shun?
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Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 3:15 pm
Added a blurb about Enzo's family background! Still mulling over the crits they gave me great fodder! Thanks guys!!
I'll crit back asap 8D <33
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 5:05 pm
Did some general overhauling! Will be doing a bit more XD
Suggestions for what illicit activity the Valentinos were engaged in welcome!!!
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Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2011 9:03 am
I THINK. I have fallen in love with Enzo more than Norvie, he's become my main quest now. Just wanted to give him a boost for more comments/feedback/suggestions/questions. X)
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Posted: Thu Apr 14, 2011 3:10 pm
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Posted: Thu Apr 14, 2011 6:30 pm
I like this guy! But how does he deal with his classmates in general? I know you said he's snotty and enjoys when things go his way, but does he want to make friends? Or is he the type to shove people away with his attitude? Does he try to make "lesser" school mates his minions like he does the rats?
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Posted: Thu Apr 14, 2011 9:35 pm
He's a schmoozer, so definitely a social sort. wink He's happy to be everyone's buddy until someone rubs him the wrong way and then SHUNNED BRATITUDE.
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Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2011 7:03 am
HI BILL BD
I don't know if I could really crit your quest(because it is awesome), but I do have a few ideas that you might be able to use for him?
in terms of his subclass, I'm wondering if he could be better suited to being a warlock? I say this because of two things
- when it comes to weapons, warlocks are allowed to have familiars as their weapons. Because Enzo has a affinity with rats, perhaps him having a rat familiar may make sense for him? the rat could help him control other pests/bend them to his will. But then, because he tends to treat other rats besides his three main ones like s**t, he might be better suited to have a snake for his familiar? (snakes are naturally affiliated with hypnotizing/charm so they would be able to charm smaller animals), or maybe even a cat? (he is described as a 'tough cat' :'3)
- Since he is in the mafia, they usually have connections with other people, and in that case being a warlock would be really helpful because he could have connections with demons (eventually). Since demons are usualy rich or have a lot of authority and power, it would pay for a mafia member to be able to bend one to their will so they can have ties with people in authority and manipulate things behind the scenes. However theres only a few reamining members in enzo's family and his family didn't sound like a very big mafia so I DUNNO I'M RAMBLING
hope this helps!
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Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2011 5:20 pm
HURRRRR I like that idea but I want to keep his special Reaper item his upright bass :C <333 unless that counts as a familiar? XD IDK.
Also, pretty sure his meager mafia faction he came from was wiped out by demons :C
WILL PONDER IT! Thanks for the ponder points! O: <33
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Posted: Fri May 13, 2011 10:55 am
I AM USELESS IN GIVING CRIT DDDD8 but Enzo = awesome heart
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