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 Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 12:58 pm
[_~BLADE~_] Clan Name:Hayatakai (swift Death) Village Alignment:None specific, but their clan grounds are a little ways into the forest surrounding Konoha Available number of members:1/5 Clan Description and History:This clan had no particular alliance with any village, they were only known for their unique forging abilities. They were a clan of blacksmiths who made their living forging weapons and equipment to nearby villages. Their weapons were known for their strength and sleekness, not to mention they decorative forms. However, in the last great ninja war, many of the rival villages of Konoha saw they as a threat, seeing as how konoha seemed to have the advantage from the steady supply of weaponry from this tiny village. So a squad of Hunter-nin from the hidden mist village was sent to wipe them out. They came in the middle of the night, many of the men and women were wiped out but a few of them managed to reach the forges and defend themselves. That day, nearly the entire clan was wiped out. Clan Primary Elements: none necessarily Clan Techniques:They have no specific techniques per say, but they had the Unique ability to use their charka to alter the structure of the metal of their swords, allawing them to closely bind the moulecules making the weapons nigh near indestructable. or make them as brittle as they wanted Clan Stages:(no stages.) Sorry, but absolutely denied. Quite a few things in fact. First DETAIL. I need not say more. Second, a Clan is a clan and therefore has techniques. You realize this is like the Uchiha or the Hyuuga not having any techniques right? Third, the ability alone sounds a lot like thisYou need to use spell check, and just because you have a clan doesn't mean it has to be massacred. (Yes, we get it you want it to be the next Uchiha. ) But please for the sake of the sanity that I have very little left, be original! /rant off
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Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 4:20 pm
((just put it b/c it would make it more interesting. and it's not like dust release, dust release simply pulverizes everything. There is a huge difference))
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Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 9:16 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 11:57 pm
Name of Jutsu: Chakra Teiryuu Jutsu - I explained it a bit more. Sorry bout that. Name of Jutsu: Sadou Teiryuu Jutsu (Movement Stop Jutsu)- you said that if someone were to focus on something other than strength that they would easily fall for this jutsu... well its not my decision to tell people what to focus on. Who ever falls falls. Name of Jutsu: Dageki Bakuha Jutsu (Shock Blast Jutsu)- its too much to instantly paralyze someone?? http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Temporary_Paralysis_Technique <-- is a D-rank and is also instant. Name of Jutsu: Baburu Jutsu (Bubble Jutsu)- ok... I can see why this one. Name of Jutsu: Daiyamondo Suto-mu (Diamond Storm Jutsu)- explained it a bit more. but still... nothing to do with crystal release. >.> must have been drunk i guess Name of Jutsu: Gurasu Kuchibue Jutsu (Grass Whistle Jutsu)- so.... its perfectly ok for someone to use a genjutsu on someone but not this? Its the equivalent of a genjutsu. A genjutsu makes u see a false image while ur lying on the floor like an idiot.... so I'm guessing genjutsu users are going to be denied their jutsus aswell? Tenju blew on her leaf as the foe became instantly frozen in his tracks. He then proceeded towards the man and sliced his head of. Senju made a quick hand signs and then in an instant the enemy began to see petals flying all around him. While he saw his childhood pass before his very eyes. Mean while outside of the genjutsu Senju sprinted at the motionless victim and sliced his head of.See what i mean?? Anyhow. i Edited them all to better fit your rules. But the whistle one is still there... I don't see why it shouldn't be allowed. A person stupid enough to fall for a hellviewing genjutsu could be easily killed. hellviewing is a what.... E-rank?? this is a A-rank jutsu. I can't even use it yet. (my character is going to be a genin)
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 12:28 am
Clan Name: Hitoshirezu Clan Insignia: Village Alignment: Sunagakure Available number of members: 10 Clan Description and History: The Hitoshirezu Clan hasn't been seen or talked about in a long time, for they were once a powerful clan but forgotten through their absence. They were attacked by the other clans because of the fear they were to powerful, only two members lived and now the clan is being reborn. They are now trying to regain the power they once held with their unique ability. The clan has now perfected their unique ability again and is trying to regain the fear they once held amongst the other clans. Clan Primary Elements: none specifically, but wind or earth is their normal elements for they are from Sunagakure Clan Techniques: This clan has a very unique ability they are able to shift the pigment of their skin or things around them to match their surrounding making them invisible, also they are able to hide their chakra presence from sensory ninjas and the eyes of the Hyuuga that are of lower rank than themselves, they can supress their chakra to near nothing hidding it from Hyuugas and sensory only skilled members of each can sense them and even then its hard unless they are specifically looking for the Hitoshirezu clan member. Name of Jutsu: The Invisible Strike Classification: ninjutsu Rank: D Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: physical Description: this attack turns a projectile invisible so that it is unseen as it nears the opponent making a suprise attack Requirements: Clan Member Range: short-long Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: Now You See Me Classification: Ninjutsu Rank: C Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: physical Description: this attack allows the user to turn a limb invisible to attack for it is hard to block something you can't see Requirements: Clan Member Range: short-mid Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: Blend Classification: Ninjutsu Rank: C Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: physical Description: this technique is used on the battle field before a fight or when your opponent is disabled, setting traps and concealing them by turning them invisible the opponent will be unable to dodge a trap that is seemingly not there Requirements: Clan Member Range: Short Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: Invisible Torture Classification: Genjutsu Rank: B Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: Mental/Physical Description: this technique takse a bit of chakra but when performed just right can make an opponent crazy, as you turn any items invisible on him or even seemingly make things around the battlefield vanish Requirements: Clan Member Range: short-mid Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: The Unknown Classification: Genjutsu Rank: B Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: N/A Description: as this attack has been said to be one of the most useful moves combining their already known elemental jutsu with their chakra making the jutsu invisible and the jutsus presence cannot be seen this makes an already deadly jutsu even worse Requirements: Clan Member Range: short Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: Invisible Entrapment Classification: Genjutsu Rank: A Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: Mental/Physical Description: after striking the opponent while invisible they push their own chakra into them sending them into a genjutsu this genjutsu makes them see their loved ones vanish before their eyes one by one then they can only hear the screams for help from each one eating away at your opponent cause he is unable to help them he is sent into a deep depression leaving him open for an attack Requirements: Clan Member Range: Short Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: The Last Attack Classification: Ninjutsu Rank: A Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: Physical Description: The user pushes their chakra into their arms making them invisible and sends a burst or chakra that is invisible towards the opponent if the attack hits it has the potential to rip off a limb but if it just grazes the opponent it can create a deep gash that will hurt for the rest of the fight possibly rendering that limb useless for the time being Requirements: Clan Member Range: short-long Other: N/A Name of Jutsu: The Invisible Vortex Classification: Ninjutsu Rank: S Chakra Nature: N/A Effect: Physical Description: This is the most powerful attack known to the clan for they send their chakra in every which wat making everything in sight invisible including themselves making the opponent see only light or dark area depending if its night or day this will catch the opponent off gaurd possibly make him run into the surrounding and since the user is invisible they will be able to attack without being seen. Requirements: Clan Member Range: Long Other: N/A Clan Stages:There are only two stages Stage 1- Thi Stage is the unmastered stage they can turn invisible but they cannot hide there chakra presence they are also unable to use the higher level techniques. Stage 2- This is the mastered stage these shinobi are able to turn invisible and hide their chakra presence they can also use the high leveled techniques.
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:14 pm
[_~BLADE~_] ((just put it b/c it would make it more interesting. and it's not like dust release, dust release simply pulverizes everything. There is a huge difference)) Don't argue with me bud. And just because you've seen ONE Dust Release you assume that's it's only function. Jinton is Molecule based, the user could easily condense the molecules of their chakra to make a Sword with the same density as steel. Now you have two options. A, You can try and restructure it so that it isn't Dust Release and then add on things that a clan simply requires. or B, You can expand on Dust Release, add your own techniques for example. The user slightly coats the edge of a balde with molecular blades of chakra, that on contact will force apart anything it come in contact with and break down the Object on a molecular level. Though, one thing I have to make clear is that if you go with option B, Swords and other materials that are not part of your body cannot be influenced, unless your chakra is threaded through every molecule you wish to condense....OTher wise I'd have to say no.
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:17 pm
Shikairu Nara Clan Name: Hitoshirezu Clan Insignia:Village Alignment: Sunagakure Available number of members: 10 Clan Description and History: The Hitoshirezu Clan hasn't been seen or talked about in a long time, for they were once a powerful clan but forgotten through their absence. They are now trying to regain the power they once held with their unique ability. Clan Primary Elements: none specifically, but wind or earth is their normal elements for they are from Sunagakure Clan Techniques: This clan has a very unique ability they are able to shift the pigment of their skin to match their surrounding making them invisible, also they are able to hide their chakra presence from sensory ninjas and the eyes of the Hyuuga, the bad thing is they can only use this ability twice for three posts each fight. Clan Stages:There are only two stages basic and mastered basic- they can turn invisible for the same length but they cannot hide their chakra presence. mastered- they can turn invisible and their chakra presence is hidden from those around them. People! Stop, we need Detail one tiny ability that doesn't even have a Jutsu is not a Clan. This is an example of absolute denied. This is a Example of a great clan however, http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=19556033
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 2:55 pm
I fixed it if you could please go over it again I would greatly appreciate it thank you.
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 3:41 pm
Shikairu Nara Clan Name: Hitoshirezu Clan Insignia:Village Alignment: Sunagakure Available number of members: 10 Clan Description and History: The Hitoshirezu Clan hasn't been seen or talked about in a long time, for they were once a powerful clan but forgotten through their absence. They were attacked by the other clans because of the fear they were to powerful, only two members lived and now the clan is being reborn. They are now trying to regain the power they once held with their unique ability. The clan has now perfected their unique ability again and is trying to regain the fear they once held amongst the other clans. Clan Primary Elements: none specifically, but wind or earth is their normal elements for they are from Sunagakure Clan Techniques: This clan has a very unique ability they are able to shift the pigment of their skin or things around them to match their surrounding making them invisible, also they are able to hide their chakra presence from sensory ninjas and the eyes of the Hyuuga, the bad thing is they can only use this ability twice for three posts each fight. The invisible strike academy level this attack turns a projectile invisible so that it is unseen as it nears the opponent making a suprise attack Now you see me genin level this attack allows the user to turn a limb invisible to attack for it is hard to block something you can't see Blend genin level this technique is used on the battle field before a fight or when your opponent is disabled, setting traps and concealing them by turning them invisible the opponent will be unable to dodge a trap that is seemingly not there Invisible torture chunin level this technique takse a bit of chakra but when performed just right can make an opponent crazy, as you turn any items invisible on him or even seemingly make things around the battlefield vanish The Unkown Chunin level as this attack has been said to be one of the most useful moves combining their already known elemental jutsu with their chakra making the jutsu invisible and the jutsus presence cannot be seen this makes an already deadly jutsu even worse Invisible entrapment jounin level this is the only Genjutsu known to this clan after striking the opponent while invisible they push their own chakra into them sending them into a genjutsu this genjutsu makes them see their loved ones vanish before their eyes one by one then they can only hear the screams for help from each one eating away at your opponent cause he is unable to help them he is sent into a deep depression leaving him open for an attack The last attack jounin level The user pushes their chakra into their arms making them invisible and sends a burst or chakra that is invisible towards the opponent if the attack hits it has the potential to rip off a limb but if it just grazes the opponent it can create a deep gash that will hurt for the rest of the fight possibly rendering that limb useless for the time being The invisible vortex Sanin level This is the most powerful attack known to the clan for they send their chakra in every which wat making everything in sight invisible including themselves making the opponent see only light or dark area depending if its night or day this will catch the opponent off gaurd possibly make him run into the surrounding and since the user is invisible they will be able to attack without being seen. Clan Stages:There are only two stages basic and mastered basic- they can turn invisible for the same length but they cannot hide their chakra presence. mastered- they can turn invisible and their chakra presence is hidden from those around them. Again, you didn't use the correct format for Techniques, the Stages are not Stages, and in the Techniques you don't even explain how you are able to do such things. KEY WORD: DEATIL
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 4:18 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 4:29 pm
xXToorimaXx Shikairu Nara Clan Name: Hitoshirezu Clan Insignia:Village Alignment: Sunagakure Available number of members: 10 Clan Description and History: The Hitoshirezu Clan hasn't been seen or talked about in a long time, for they were once a powerful clan but forgotten through their absence. They are now trying to regain the power they once held with their unique ability. Clan Primary Elements: none specifically, but wind or earth is their normal elements for they are from Sunagakure Clan Techniques: This clan has a very unique ability they are able to shift the pigment of their skin to match their surrounding making them invisible, also they are able to hide their chakra presence from sensory ninjas and the eyes of the Hyuuga, the bad thing is they can only use this ability twice for three posts each fight. Clan Stages:There are only two stages basic and mastered basic- they can turn invisible for the same length but they cannot hide their chakra presence. mastered- they can turn invisible and their chakra presence is hidden from those around them. People! Stop, we need Detail one tiny ability that doesn't even have a Jutsu is not a Clan. This is an example of absolute denied. This is a Example of a great clan however, ]http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=19556033 Here is what I see wrong with it. How can you hide your chakra if you are using it from someone like a sensor type, hyuuga or Uchiha which all can see the chakra flow. Its not like your just making it not noticed but actually using it for techniques which would mean its being used.
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Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 7:49 pm
ok im slowly improving it how does it look now?
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 10:53 am
xZechsx [_~BLADE~_] Clan Name:Hayatakai (swift Death) Village Alignment:None specific, but their clan grounds are a little ways into the forest surrounding Konoha Available number of members:1/5 Clan Description and History:This clan had no particular alliance with any village, they were only known for their unique forging abilities. They were a clan of blacksmiths who made their living forging weapons and equipment to nearby villages. Their weapons were known for their strength and sleekness, not to mention they decorative forms. However, in the last great ninja war, many of the rival villages of Konoha saw they as a threat, seeing as how konoha seemed to have the advantage from the steady supply of weaponry from this tiny village. So a squad of Hunter-nin from the hidden mist village was sent to wipe them out. They came in the middle of the night, many of the men and women were wiped out but a few of them managed to reach the forges and defend themselves. That day, nearly the entire clan was wiped out. Clan Primary Elements: none necessarily Clan Techniques:They have no specific techniques per say, but they had the Unique ability to use their charka to alter the structure of the metal of their swords, allawing them to closely bind the moulecules making the weapons nigh near indestructable. or make them as brittle as they wanted Clan Stages:(no stages.) What you say about making their weapons stronger needs to be put in the jutsu form and such for that would be a technique they have. revised and edited
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 11:07 am
[_~BLADE~_] xZechsx [_~BLADE~_] Clan Name:Hayatakai (swift Death) Village Alignment:None specific, but their clan grounds are a little ways into the forest surrounding Konoha Available number of members:1/5 Clan Description and History:This clan had no particular alliance with any village, they were only known for their unique forging abilities. They were a clan of blacksmiths who made their living forging weapons and equipment to nearby villages. Their weapons were known for their strength and sleekness, not to mention they decorative forms. However, in the last great ninja war, many of the rival villages of Konoha saw they as a threat, seeing as how konoha seemed to have the advantage from the steady supply of weaponry from this tiny village. So a squad of Hunter-nin from the hidden mist village was sent to wipe them out. They came in the middle of the night, many of the men and women were wiped out but a few of them managed to reach the forges and defend themselves. That day, nearly the entire clan was wiped out. Clan Primary Elements: none necessarily Clan Techniques:They have no specific techniques per say, but they had the Unique ability to use their charka to alter the structure of the metal of their swords, allawing them to closely bind the moulecules making the weapons nigh near indestructable. or make them as brittle as they wanted Clan Stages:(no stages.) What you say about making their weapons stronger needs to be put in the jutsu form and such for that would be a technique they have. revised and edited Im still not understanding it much blade. You need techniques not just the stages in which you can do things but techniques. Not really seeing how you can make a rock combustible or nickel into gold its entirely different things. Making swords stronger yes I can see that by adding a chakra coating in the blade but to be able to use your chakra to make it into sand like its been aged I can see that either.
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