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 Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 3:19 pm
Bumping really won't help at all >_<;; It'd probably be good to ask in the thread, ask friends for crit, or go to the OOC forum "crit the person above you!" thread?
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2010 4:40 pm
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Posted: Thu May 07, 2015 1:13 pm
bump so I can find this and revise it.
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Posted: Wed May 20, 2015 4:25 pm
Hi Stari!
Her civilian form looks good! I see a good balance and the virtues/flaws flow very well together.
As for powered form though, it seems that she has three different attacks going on for her sphere.
Her eternal stage perhaps is a little overpowered as well. I don't think I can approve something that causes characters to share pain, especially as such an attack effects more then one character at a time. (as well as not really fitting in with her sphere)
Perhaps instead, we could focus on expanding the first attack as far as basic and super, and bumping her super attack to Eternal.
For example:
Basic: She forms a ivy vine that shoots directly in front of her, the range is five feet. It attaches to to the intended, and starts to root. It feels as if the body has a numbness to it, and the numbness last for 15 seconds. It is easily shaken off.
Super: The numbness now last 20 seconds, and the roots hurt a little. Almost a illusion of digging into skin.
Eternal: She can now summon two vines for 15 seconds each, that when attach to intended feel as if they are 'sapping' energy, making the victim feel tired or numb.
You aren't directly making paralysis and it isn't to overpowered. Look over your attacks again and then give me a holler darling!
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