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| OMG! Its sooo sucks! My dog writes better then you! Scrap it!>.< |
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 Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2004 5:58 pm
Draupnir2005 Okay, if I give you money... Will you do my original writing coursework for me? That is some serious classy writing... I LOVIES IT! A what for you?
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 3:10 am
A story. For English. for coursework. I dislike my writing skills, so I want you to write it for me. heart pleeeease?
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 3:27 am
Draupnir2005 A story. For English. for coursework. I dislike my writing skills, so I want you to write it for me. heart pleeeease? I'm sorry, but I don't do that kind of thing. It's wroung, and it wouldn't be your work, but mine.
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 5:13 am
wendy_moon I'm sorry, but I don't do that kind of thing. It's wroung, and it wouldn't be your work, but mine. I know. Besides... I never MEANT it. I was just trying to say, I lovied your writing, but in a different way... You know, I like it so much, Id make it my coursework? sweatdrop It sounds kinda dumb after... like most things I say. I mean them to be flattering, and they dont come out that way sweatdrop Still... your story whee its awesome
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 5:30 am
Draupnir2005 wendy_moon I'm sorry, but I don't do that kind of thing. It's wroung, and it wouldn't be your work, but mine. I know. Besides... I never MEANT it. I was just trying to say, I lovied your writing, but in a different way... You know, I like it so much, Id make it my coursework? sweatdrop It sounds kinda dumb after... like most things I say. I mean them to be flattering, and they dont come out that way sweatdrop Still... your story whee its awesome Ah... well I'm glad you like it. ^_^
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 7:05 am
eek wow! I love your style, most of
my stuff is mainly speech and no attenion
to detail. Yours also makes mine look pants!
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2004 1:51 pm
Finnbar eek wow! I love your style, most of my stuff is mainly speech and no attenion to detail. Yours also makes mine look pants! Thank you so much, I'm glad you've enjoyed it. ^_^
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Posted: Sat Sep 18, 2004 2:18 pm
Ooooooo. Love it a lot, I do. Bad at grammer, I am too, so worry, you should not. sweatdrop Happen to everyone, it does. smile Bad, my stories are. My Slash, even worse, they are. Getting down romance, i not good at. Teach me, will you? xd sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Sep 18, 2004 5:37 pm
Feiro Ooooooo. Love it a lot, I do. Bad at grammer, I am too, so worry, you should not. sweatdrop Happen to everyone, it does. smile Bad, my stories are. My Slash, even worse, they are. Getting down romance, i not good at. Teach me, will you? xd sweatdrop *Blinks and then giggles* Hey Yoda, nice to meet you. ^_^ I could try and teach you... but I don't know if it would work very well... sweatdrop I'm glad you like my story though.
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Posted: Fri Oct 08, 2004 6:40 pm
Will no one else comment on this any more? q.q
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Posted: Sun May 15, 2005 11:20 am
*deep breath*
First of all, thank you for putting story up. Gives me the courage to try at least one of my own. *smiles nervously*
Opinions:
The idea is interesting. The details on how they move, hear and the bit about the small fangs I like very very much.
As for the grammar, meh, that's easy to fix and shouldn't be stressed over during writing a piece anyway, so I've learned.
But the description style does need rewording. For example: "Last were their teeth… well their canines, or fangs, which ever you preferred."
It seems like you're trying too hard to make sure your ideas come across clearly; to make people comfortable with what you're writing. It's your story, people will either understand now, or later as story develops. It wastes your energy and takes away from story flow to repeat yourself in this way.
The story will speak for itself.
*blush* Have also gotten similar advice from my friends.
Thanks again, and please, continue writing this. Curious to see where the storyline goes.
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You put the lime in the coconut and drink them both together. (PM Dawn)
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Posted: Sun May 15, 2005 5:55 pm
Dana C Scott *deep breath* First of all, thank you for putting story up. Gives me the courage to try at least one of my own. *smiles nervously* Opinions: The idea is interesting. The details on how they move, hear and the bit about the small fangs I like very very much. As for the grammar, meh, that's easy to fix and shouldn't be stressed over during writing a piece anyway, so I've learned. But the description style does need rewording. For example: "Last were their teeth… well their canines, or fangs, which ever you preferred." It seems like you're trying too hard to make sure your ideas come across clearly; to make people comfortable with what you're writing. It's your story, people will either understand now, or later as story develops. It wastes your energy and takes away from story flow to repeat yourself in this way. The story will speak for itself. *blush* Have also gotten similar advice from my friends. Thanks again, and please, continue writing this. Curious to see where the storyline goes. --------------------------------------------------- You put the lime in the coconut and drink them both together. (PM Dawn) Thanks so much for your comment. ^^ I'll try my best in writing it... sweatdrop when I get around to it... I haven't written this story in ages, I've been writing bits and pieces of others.
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Posted: Thu Jun 14, 2007 11:26 pm
oh i like that a lot it really is good and has great descriptions to outline the importance of what you seem to be about to say blaugh
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