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Yeah, I'm leaning toward the AoE thing. XD It's definitely a power up, but continues in the 'defensive' theme.

SORRY! OK! I just have a lot of anger against someone at school and i have the bad habit of criting it out rudly. :3

Ah, ok! The only thing I'm a little concerned with is that truth also has the ability to be hurtful, but I guess that's something she could develop waaay later on.

Added a disambiguation of the civvie's name~

LOL! That's awesome! Thanks! biggrin

Yeah, I get what you mean. XD What I was going for with the tact flaw was that she didn't know when to shut up, like...If you asked her if she though a skirt made you look fat, she'd probably say, "Well, you're not fat but, um...It does make your thighs look kind of...big." Which...would probably piss off 70% of other girls her age 8D;

Love and Color are technically taken. Love is Cannon and color would step on Iris's toes~

So I'd stay away from those. Ravvie, I'll try to crit your quest a bit later. heart

Changed the uh. Senshi name/sphere, and therefore editing the civvie personality, but um. If you happen upon something crittable, by all means feel free to comment. |D

HI THERE. I TOLD YOU I WOULD CRIT RAVVY, AND NOW I AM 8D !

civi:
old money reference from the great gatsby ? 8D <3

i really really like how her hobbies tie into her nega weapon; i think that's something that's really important, and will help in your rp!
if i might suggest it, maybe add something that's not nega related? i love tying things in like that, but it's important to base the nega around the civi, not the other way around.
i think it's wonderful the way it is though, don't get me wrong. just a suggestion, feel free to ignore it.

does she play any club sports for soccer? you says she hates the team (they do suck ...), but theres always indoor soccer and clubs and what not right ? (i really wouldnt know, i dont do soccer. do they have clubs? i feel like they would > . >;;; )

for her retro hobby, does she wear the clothing out in public, or does she just hide it away? like is it part of her daily lifestyle and decorum, or is it just something she does on the side for shits and giggles o 3o

just as a note, i would be careful about adding "her peers appreciate this" because you don't necessarily know how people will react in rp. again, you can take this as a suggestion, because its incredibly nitpicky and isnt something that will make or break your character.

does her modesty/humility/cohesiveness sometimes conflict with her morals? lets say she really strongly believes that eating meat is bad, and she's a vegetarian (this is just example i swear!), and someone offers her meat. will she politely take it, or explain why she's a vegetarian and outright refuse. Basically, does her wall-flowerness conflict with her opinions and beliefs?

so with her aimlessness, why does she take chances? there's a bit of a conflict. you have her saying "why bother" in some situations, and "lets take a dangerous alley" in others. to be honest, why bother taking that dangerous alley?

also, why does she like angering her momma? as i was reading through i could see there was a lot of conflict between her mom and herself, but does why does she get a rise out of making her mom mad? like, this is coming from personal experience in that me and my dad fight all the freakin time. sometimes i get really happy when things hurt him, i wont lie. but a lot of the time i feel bad about it. does she ever feel bad about it? or is that part of her "becoming a monster" issue? things to think about is all~

that being said, i really love the monster inside sort of trait. i think with the rest of her attitude its a lot of humility and quietude, but i love the idea that she could grow to something truly evil. i think the idea that she's slowly turning bad, even in her civi form, is interesting.
just a few questions to think about though; does this trait lead to any bad hobbies, like smoking or something? and are there things that she simply wont do? like does she have a moral somewhere that says "absolutely not, i will never do that" sort of thing?

to be honest, i think its the "whats the point" that's bothering me so much. the way you write it off makes it seem like she thinks theres absolutely no point in doing anything. are there things that make her happy? things that make her think there is a point? or is that where the nega comes in? am just trying to sort this out myself, i dont think its a problem with your character xDD

NOW THAT THAT'S OUT OF THE WAAAY
i think you have a really awesome character in the works. as i was reading i could definitely see the character form in my head, and i think she's really easy to relate to. at least, me personally cause of the family issues xD
also teal hair = love.

nega:
are there any weaknesses to her weapon? cause right now you just have bladed heels. perhaps come up with some sort of weakness to them, like maybe she's bad at kicking very high

also, this is minor, but with the outfit, remember that it has to have some sort of trim. as the character grows, you might get a bit crazier (like serandite for example) but starting off it should have a trim. there are characters like rhodochrosite that have no trim, but to be on the safe side, i would add one. again, this is hella nitpicky, feel free to ignore it.