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Hey Marsh! <333 Bryn's profile looks really good to me; there's not really any major issues that I can see. The only thing is that Bigger, Better, Faster, Stronger doesn't really read like a flaw! The only thing that's actually negative in the description is that she's disappointed if she doesn't get fancy things for her birthday, and even that is only 'a bit' and she'll try to hide it. That doesn't really seem like something that people would dislike her for? You need to expound on what about this, exactly, would make someone dislike her / think less of her. Maybe you could try talking about how always looking for the next best thing negatively affects her life; maybe she's in debt from always buying new things, her habits are taken as showing off, she can't appreciate things that aren't the best of the best and it shows?

While I definitely think it sounds better, it still looks a bit weak to me! I would suggest that she doesn't try to hide her reaction to getting plain presents. I think that it could be a good foil to her Empathetic nature, making the flaw much greater than it is currently - as well as that, it could work well with her Melodramatic ways and her Impulsive tendencies, making it a believable reaction for her. <333

Looks great! <33 I think you're ready for a --