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Fixed up Sensitive (I think I finally got the wording down right I think) and edited Pride a bit more.

Next to do:
Add in another Virtue and Flaw.
Figure out which Parallel to try for.

Information for Cronus is now available!
Third virtue pending (i.e. having trouble with another that fits)
Description of third attack to come when I can think of what it should do. 8D;;;

Hey Bun!
Apologies for taking so long to give a crit. *shame!*

Here's a crit for yooouuuu:

Shiloh:

The first thing I noticed was her hobbies. Though you have some good ones, DDR seems to be the only she can share with others. That's not SO bad, but can limit RP options. Just something to think about.

Her flaws and virtues are solid (there's one thing I want to mention, but that's below), but they are flaws and virtues shared by MANY characters. How do they pertain to her and only her? You may also want to add in a fourth on both parts to add to her personality further.

In "Sensitive" you mainly gear it towards her hearing problem though you don't mention that somewhere else? (Unless I missed that?) You may want to steer away from it being mainly about her physical problems and more towards emotional issues.

Also, what is she studying to major? I'm curious. C:

Cronus:

I like her flaws and virtues. The possessive one is one I haven't seen too often and I think it adds a good depth. Like mentioned above, you should try to add another flaw to balance the personality out better. (Meaning you have four good aspects to three bad.)

The one thing I can say is that though there are no big contradictions, and I do rather like them, some of the virtues and flaws are shared with many other senshi. How are they uniquely Cronus's? Is there a deeper reason she's that way?

I love her attacks! I really want to see what the third one does. o w o

Overall:

There's a lot of good work here to build from. Flesh out a little and I'm sure she'll come out well rounded. C: You may also want to add even more such as a "Why would Shiloh make a good Cronus?" post. This can not only yourself, but show the people reading why you think she would be chosen. What sort of relationship would Shiloh have with Cronus? Dig deeper and show others how you would imagine them. <3

Shaz: Rofl. Oops, sorry about that! I'll change it <33

Never: lol, It's fine. I still need to leave crits for you ;; My brain has been killing me over trying to get Melody accepted. As soon as I have a moment to think (and shouldn't be working on artwork) I'll leave you some. Promise.

On Hobbies: Yea... I know. Though she can also do star gazing with friends, or even converse about science (if any one cares?). I might go back in at some point and add another, but at the moment I'm not sure.

Flaws/Virtues: Would you believe that I utterly suck at doing such things? I'm just so used to fleshing out a personality, not splitting it up like this. I wouldn't even know how they pertain to her and only her. ;;

Also, I'm having such a hard time writing out a description for sensitive. But I'll keep that in mind. <3

Her major is in biology/genetics.

The possessive trait comes from a bit of an idea I was playing with (and tried to flesh out differently then originally planned) based on the mythology of Cronus. If I remember correctly Cronus was father to Zeus, Hades and Poseidon (who over threw him in mythology) as well as the son of Uranus and Gaia. I wanted to play off of that idea. I had mother hen in there at one point, but it felt like it coincided with another of her flaws, though I might could add it back in and see how it works?

This also kind of ties in to how they are hers. It all relates to her friends/family and her Queen. I see her as almost, maybe, being afraid of losing those closest to her. And so she acts the way she does in order to make sure they won't ever leave her?

Thanks so much! I was quite proud of the attacks, but sadly am finding it hard to come up with a good third one ;; I'll figure it out eventually.

Also, I'll keep in mind about the Cronus/Shiloh thing! I saw others doing it, so I probably should have as well but I've been trying to focus on fleshing out the two parts before I did so.

Thanks so much for the crit, and I can only hope I'll leave you a good one too <3

The Sensitive flaw has been fleshed out a little more, hope that helps!

And I added a post for my thoughts on Sailor Cronus and interactions with Shiloh~ I'm sorry if it rambles and such, I know it's a wall of text, but I was getting my thoughts in line as I wrote it and it seemed like it all should be said.