ariana x3 xxx
I ask for a challenge maybe I should have been specific
my opponent's mentally challenged so he can't tell the difference
no talent, no money, no house not even on gaia
fake ty for buying comments, SO AMAZING HE'S A LIAR!
The only SEW you are is, with some threads and granny friends
sitting with only one thing in common, you all are almost dead
You aint missing teeth but YOU GIVE GRANNY HEAD
Had nothing to be said but a MOUTHFUL of p***y instead
he's a d**k sucking champion he's never lost his title
he catches heads for kicks, like he's Sean Michael S0_Amazing
kinda tired of rhymes where females can't make up their minds
tries so hard to ride her own d**k, but she cant so she's on mine
before i bid good ridance to you, b***h get out my business
we see her stripped on gaia cause in real life they werent tippin
i ain't trippin like this b***h who's faced and bound to fall
chances be on the rocks like straight shots of alcohol
but if she rocks it right, i might just let her rock my mic
we see that she can't spit, so she has to swallow, right?
right. rip it wit the last bar like shot from an 8th
word on the strip? she last call; takin shots to the face
Ari started strong, but fell after. Pretty basic verse, really. I understood what you were going for, but I felt certain things could have been executed a bit better.
S0 Amazing was pretty generic too for the most part, but one bar stood out. "We can see she can't spit, so she has to swallow, right?" Probably the best bar out of both verses. You put more effort into rhyming with multis than Ari did too. I don't normally put much into multis, but since both bars were pretty generic, I had to look for other shining points of them.
Amazing takes the first round.
Round 2:ariana x3 xxx
You're looking at my rhymes and you're shitting yourself
your punchlines always miss im like, "stop hitting yourself"
what you spitting aint shyt, im spittin lyrical wealth
so when you spittin at shyt, it sounds like its hearing itself
we aren't PEARS so you quit trying to BARE
kick sense into ur FRUIT LESS TREE u can't step on air (ariana)
you might shine brighter than me but its all accidental
you teeth are so yellow, so when i say floss i mean dental
you aren't a famous lyricist guy you just like instrumentals
and you're broke even on gaia, your most expensive item is a rental S0_Amazing
just remember you said it. i can tell you're root headed
a ruthless crude relic who seems to have a fruit fetish
the air i breath is toxic, so this breezy s**t? stop it
you fell like when the stocks hit wit that pic of polly pocket
knock it? never. my hustle ain't wood. i aim good
a jerk to this knuckle ******** who nutted up; she came good
im caine good. and you just take me to the brain, love.
promise you'll feel no pain while slang fills your veins up
then you overdose enterin into a state of chomatose
and the sad ending to this quote is this the closest you'll ever be to dope
Both verses were full of bars that had potential, but weren't executed all that great. Ari got a bit corny with her punches, but Amazing's were only slightly better due to the creativity being a tiny bit more evident.
Amazing takes this round.
Round 3:ariana x3 xxx
I'd normally put more effort but you already defeat yourself
and judgin by the porn you probably already beat yourself
your the biggest p***y around, so go eat yourself
your hard too watch like a slave beating himself
couldnt beat me at rhyming, why did you cheat yourself
youre b***h like your wifey, so you crying after u cheat yourself
youre wack and lonely so ***** go meet yourself
dont look at me, I'm proof read ho go read yourself
And if I got sexual problems then p***y go queef yourself
They should call you porky the pig the way you repeat yourself
you have no originality you cant even be yourself
but your just a boy and this is your plead for help
I could give a ******** about a p***y so go bleed to hell
and the only time your comfortable is on your knees in jail S0_Amazing
wit this flow that she has aughtta come wit knee pads
she croaks each bar wit brief gasps. okay now i see where my seeds at
worried bout what me has'll get you nowhere like flattery
has to be her luck with men; a tragedy. so she's mad at me
it's half assery like her sig pic. the b***h just cant spit
so to be number 1 she acts pissed all like "niggas aint s**t"
quit. you think that you the s**t but don't know what number 2 is
you second rate fake. wit sickly claims, but dont know what the flu is
stupid. she says a mouthfull with little room for recognition
dishin food for thought? stick to your role in the kitchen
Ari's first and last two bars were probably her best, but they still weren't all that great. I know I haven't been around in a while, but it seems like you were better in the past. I'm a bit rusty too, so the same applies to me. It just feels like you didn't take any real time on these though.
So Amazing's last verse is probably his worst, but so was Ari's... so I guess he takes this round as well.
All in all, S0 Amazing wins.
I feel like you both don't really understand that writing a verse for keystyling is a lot different from writing a verse for a song. If these were meant to be recorded, they'd probably be fun to listen to. But since we're reading these, you'll have to come a bit differently. Think outside of the box and work on those punchlines. Don't be afraid to take your time to think of something clever. Rather than trying to think of rhymes that may sound cool and fun, go for something damaging and hilarious. I think you both lacked this. A while back, Ari was on the path to this, but not sure what happened.
Anyway, keep it up you two. You can only improve from here.
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