Civilian~
I feel that while her hobbies are really well-written, I can't imagine how she could possibly have enough time in a day to do all of it. XD If you truly think that all of those hobbies are things that she will do often enough to be considered hobbies, I have nothing more to say about it! She has a great balance of things she can do by herself or with other people which is great!
I think the virtues are well done and I don't really have anything to day about them.
I do however, have a few questions/comments about some of her flaws!
Curiosity Killed the Cat: How does this affect her day to day life? Does this cause other people (her friends included) to see her in a negative light? Does she get in trouble with gossiping and snooping into things she doesn't belong in?
Talkative: How exactly is this a flaw? Does she talk to people to the point where they want nothing to do with her because she's just
that annoying? I need a little more info about how this negatively affects her life and the people around her.
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Powered Side~
You obviously have art already so I very happily don't have to crit that part!<3
I admittedly am not the best at Knight magic, but from what I can tell it all looks good! You've very clearly laid out the pros and cons of her attacks, along with durations.
Her powered side is trial stamped by me, I just need some clarification on her civilian side! Quote me if you have any questions or if you make any changes so I can take another look.<3
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