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Nicholas smirked.

Immediately, in about 4 different continents across the globe, thousands of innocent orphans, you know the traditionalist ones with the black lungs and the what not, holding innocent little puppies all spontaneously combusted at the sheer evilness (irony) of Nicholas' grin. As such, their arms and legs were destroyed in the blast and they were thus helpless when they fell into a conveniently placed lake nearby. Thus they drowned.

But that's not important. What was important was the fact that Evil had just made a mistake. A pretty common mistake, no doubt but a mistake nonetheless.

"Wind is one of the 4 Basic Elements for a reason..." He whispered. "Their power, their ease of use and above all else...control."

He swung his blade so that it was perpendicular to the ground before his face, a somewhat Evil (again, irony) look on his face as he concentrated his reiatsu. Responding as if controlled by some kind of benevolent force, the bullet of highly concentrated and highly heated air burst apart, splitting off into 10's of smaller tendrils of wind, all racing towards Evil's turned back.

"My shikai isn't just simple invisibility bullshit or some kind of heated attack. Its MASTERY. Not on the same scale as say Captain Michiko, but its enough."

His eyes narrowed, gaining a more steeled look to them.

"More than enough."

And then...IT...appeared.

Like the chest burst thing from Alien itself, only instead of popping out of Evil's chest and waving around to the world to exude its presence, it come from...God knows where she kept that thing tucked...and began waving, as though controlled by the wind itself.

Bollocks of course...but as his eyes shifted to the contrasting colours of black, red, blue and white, he felt something he hadn't felt in a long time.

Not since he first faced down his first Espada.

Fear. Dread. Horror.

"Oh ********." Suddenly, he could see why Evil was revered so much...whatever she was doing, it seemed to make her stand hundreds of feet, towering over him and his puny existence, like some God who was deciding his fate.

"Heaven or hell. Interesting"

Urgh, his thoughts were getting more clouded, a sort of veil of fear obscuring his judgement, but he wrestled control of his emotions, long enough, to finish his surprise blow to Evil.

"She'll sense it coming from a mile away...but it'll be enough to break her damned hold..."

He thrust his hand into his robes, retracting with his lighter in hand, the carved symbol of Squad Three on a background that flaunted Junichiro's scientific and engineering skills. Starting it up with a touch of reiatsu, he felt the burning sensation as the flames licked away at his left hand, pain overloading his fear and bringing clarity back to his mind.

"Booyah mother ******** far, the only injuries of the fight had occurred to him, and yet they were either self-inflicted or psychological. And it hadn't even been a minute yet.

"Well ******** me sideways she's scary...Evil...Clearly, the strongest opponent I will have the luck of facing in my entire existence."

He stored his lighter away and stuck his slightly smoldering hand into some snow, sighing at the cooling sensation, before uttering a quick healing kido.

"Right then, wasted enough time. Lets get this show on the road."

"Bakudo 8: Repulse."

A shimmering round shield appeared.

"Hado 31: Shot of Red Fire."

Ducking down around his shield, he fired off his kido, before rotating his body a full 180 and returning to the safety of his temporary shield.

"Urgh, this won't do me for much longer..."

((3/10))

((Strategy after strategy is falling apart. Interesting))

Evil chuckled. She swiveled her head around to see his attack returning, the wind once again slicing through the air. Interesting. It reminded her some of Michiko's attack, since she had trained her for Bankai and knew her basics at least. Evil stood up in one fluid motion.

"You want to play rough? let's play rough. Blaze, Hiokami!" She said, grinning. Her zanpakto that she was holding in her right hand exploded into Black Flames. Her sword transformed, becoming longer and thicker and more curved. The edges grew saw-like, all the better to dismember her enemies, my dear. With an almost earsplitting roar, her flames heaved upwards, splitting off into a multitude of shapes. They were Black fire Wolves. they were made entirely of her Flames, and were completely under her control. About fifteen Black Fire Wolves were formed, their eyes glowing frighteningly bright. Without even a glance in their direction, the wolves spread out. Two lunged at the oncoming wind tendrils, wrestling and fighting with them. Since they were also composed of darkness they couldn't be put out by water or wind.

Three wolves broke off from the main pack, bounding down towards Ike. They snarled, the sound like angry crackling flames. They lunged at him, one from above, one from the right, and one from the left. The other turned and moved together as one towards Nicholas, spreading out to surround him as well and attack. Even if he did keep up his shield, the sheer volume would eventually overwhelm him. Or so it would go if it went according to plan. The wolves all lunged at Nicholas simultaneously, jaws wide open to bite down.

Evil laughed, twirling her large zanpakto in her hands.

"Ill let you play for a little while with my Wolves. See how you do with them" She said with a wink. She crouched for a moment, then sprang forward, running towards Nicholas now.

[3/10]

~*Commander-General of the Sereitei, Captain of Squad 10*~

Much like that one scene in Final Fantasy VII, where Cloud was left fighting off those three effeminate Sephiroth bitches, who had conveniently summoned themselves an army of bitching shadow wolves who wouldn't die no matter how many times Cloud cut them and they had all pounced at him simultaneously to FINISH HIM in the most Mortal Combat-like manner possible.

Only this time, it wasn't Cloud Strife, sexy emo extraordinaire. Nor would Evil be likely to call off her wolves right before the attack landed successfully, the merciless evil...Evil...

Nicholas really needed to come up with better insults.

His shield would be enough to hold off maybe one Wolf for a few seconds, but the remaining...Grim knows how many would be free to attack him...He needed a plan...

And it came to him, a surprising flash of inspiration just mere seconds before what would probably have been his...rather slow and painful death at the hands of these creatures. Drawing his invisible sword up, he muttered a quick incantation under his breath as he counted in the back of his head...

Had his zanpaktou spirit, Wu Ming, possessed a throat at this point, he probably would have gulped...

"Wu Ming, Kaze Nenshou..."

He aimed down, sending forward a blast of heated air, albeit a rather restricted one. Keeping a clamped hold on his reiatsu, the attack did nothing more than cause the snow around him to blow upwards into the environment around Nicholas, obscuring his body from the vision from the wolves and Evil herself.

Despite his restrained attack, he could still feel the effects of the slightly evaporating ice and snow recondensating on his body, the scorching water leaving his arms covered in burns. Biting his lip to make sure he didn't scream out in pain, he concentrated reiatsu and poured it down into his legs, enhancing the strength of his legs and he kicked down upon the Earth, leaping upwards.

He broke free of the cloud of condensing snow, and looked down upon the battlefield. Far off, he could see the battle of Ike and Revil, as the Vice Captain left to join his wife and Captain in their duel...

"Well s**t, can't have that happen can I?"

He sure hoped this would work...Dual incantations were a pain in the a**, and only the better kido users seemed to be able to use them properly, however Nicholas hoped that with his recent training with Captain Tansen Tsurugi, a well practised kido user in his own right and the similarities between the kidos he was using, he'd be able to pull this off...

""Ye lord! Mask of flesh and bone, flutter of wings, ye who bears the name of Man! Truth and temperance, upon this sinless wall of dreams unleash but slightly the wrath of your claws! Inferno and pandemonium, the sea barrier surges, march on to the south!""

"HADO 31: SHOT OF RED FIRE"

Palm opened, a ball of burning red flame emerged and exploded downwards towards Evil, before Nicholas brought a second hand around, cupping his hands together as a second ball of reiatsu emerged.

"HADO 33: BLUE FIRE, CRASH DOWN" KAMEHAMEHA!

Boom.

A much larger, far more powerful blast of blue flame raged down upon the 10th Captain, its intent on severly damaging her. Nicholas' use of incantations had, under the law of Shinigaminism which suggested that saying the name of an attack increased its power, no doubt doubled or even tripled the force of his kidos. Toppled with his high position (gravity), the force he put behind his attack (highly concentrated reiatsu) and his skill with kidos (Training under Tansen), the attack would cause a s**t load of damage if it hit.

It was times like this where a witty, badass line was appropriately given by the character, in an attempt to raise the sheer epicness of the situation.

"YIPPIE KAI YAY MOTHER F@*$&!"

Nicholas hit the ground with a rather comforting crash. Staggering to his feet, he drove his blade into the ground to use as a sort of lever to push himself up.

"Sorry Wu Ming...you are above such treatment normally..."

((Last post by me. Its been a good fight guys))

KidMental

Creativity: 15%
Literary Appeal: 23%
Grammatical Proficiency: 12%
Post Length: 5%
Realism: 7%
Reader's Assessment: Kid, your posts bring a very large smile to my face everytime I read them. You have a querk to you that cannot be replicated or attempted by anyone else but you. Often at times these "querks" seem to side track the reader, in this case me, from the intention of the post and "in the moment" action. I'd say that you need to focus in a bit more on the main point of the post instead of beating around the bush. Comparisons are great but its distracting when you go off on tangents. It was a pleasure however to read your posts and see into your mind and you did a fantastic job. Keep in mind however that you get a little overly ambitious with your attacks. Sometimes simple is better. Don't overwhelm your opponent with a bunch of moves at once. Again, centralize your ideas. 24%

Final Grade: 86%


RevlisDaFox

Creativity: 12%
Literary Appeal: 20%
Grammatical Proficiency: 13%
Post Length: 5%
Realism: 9%
Reader's Assessment: Each to his own I'd say and with your post style I must say that I could have used a lot more creaivity from you. Aside from simple spelling mistakes here or there I'd like to say did you a fairly nice job. For me personally though I feel it got a tad repetitious. You used the same noun's and pronouns consecutively and it bored me a little. I think you focused too much on mapping out your attack as a whole rather than take a step back and broaden the pallet so to speak. I think you tend to go off on in depth tangents about a too narrow idea. I think for you the best thing to do is take a step back, reread your posts just once, correct the minor spelling errors (mostly fix the order or lettering) and see if you are getting too stuck on one idea. Overall I enjoyed reading your posts. 24%

Final Grade: 83%


Haseo Hitsome

Creativity: 10%
Literary Appeal: 20%
Grammatical Proficiency: 13%
Post Length: 4%
Realism: 10%
Reader's Assessment: Haseo! You've improved so much since the last time I've read your RP's! When I read your posts now I can't help but compare your character to someone I know in RL. There is something about your posts that seems to stay true to reality and the variety of people in it. Your character has so many traits to him that just spew "hardass". At times I think you get overly arrogant or far too cocky. Confidence is ALWAYS welcomed but I think you just need to take a step back, tone down your provocative tendencies. Like every human being on Earth you have room for improvement. Gramatically and Literary wise you could use some polishing. Your posts often become repetititve and mundane. Set a thesaurus down next to your keyboard and flip through it when you post. You tend to say the same thing over and over but just rephrased. Take a moment to seperate your ideas while posting and don't stay trapped on that one track, so to speak. Fluidity in your posts is not quite there yet. I think you need to just read things over to yourself because its often broken by a missplaced period or comma that creates a break where one isn't needed. You did AMAZINGLY well and I enjoyed seeing your growth. Keep learning and keep moving forward smile 21%

Final Grade: 78%


EvilWolf1

Creativity: 15%
Literary Appeal: 24%
Grammatical Proficiency: 14%
Post Length: 5%
Realism: 10%
Reader's Assessment: Evil its hard not to be baised here. I've always loved your posting and continue to. You have this air about your word use and style that seem to hit home with me. The best way I can compare and contrast it would be to say that your more of "Homestyle cooking" while the others here are more of the modern, futuristic, and inventive type of cooking. They seem to always be trying new things which results in success and failure. Its continuously moving and too common and conformative for my taste. Your "Homestyle cooking" is elegant and tastful. You could be an author without having to change a thing. I'm not saying you're perfect, no one is, perfection is boring, but your errors are few and far between. I think you often drop the ball by being too wordy and fluidity seems to lack just a tad. Brief sentences are well, brief. You could conjoin so many by using a comma. It seems that you seperate a continuous idea with a period where it is unnatural to pause or break. In one post you started a sentence with "And both". To me, from a broadcasting stand point rather than editorial the and could have been nixed making for a more cohesive series of lines. Again, those come few and far between but thats really the only place you lost some pointage with me. Keep doing what you're doing though, its great smile 24%

Final Grade: 92%


General Commentary: This was a very short but enjoyable series of posts from the lot of you. I loved comparing and contrasting the different styles and pulling some ideas to improve my own. You all have points to polish but overall I'd say you guys did WONDERFUL! I keep wanting to read more but unfortunately there was not much : As dissapointing as that was it was a light load for me to grade and a good enough sample to make what I feel are accurate suggestions and comments. Of course this is all from my opinion of which you may disagree and see as miss judged but please take all of what I said into consideration. No hard feelings. You all should walk away proud of yourself and with something to learn from. Again, keep it up, your guys did great.