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 Posted: Thu Aug 06, 2009 3:32 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 06, 2009 3:36 pm
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 12:10 am
FEEDBACK GREATLY APPRICIATED Onishitai
Demon Body
Clan Name:
Sansaro
Originating from an attempted curse seal, the Onishitai affects and changes the users body for a period of time. However as the Onishitai progresses through the stages the user begins lose their personality while activated. Once deactivated the user's body and mind state returns to normal, however as the user grows older they are slowly mentally consumed.
The user cannot activate nor know their path until they become a genin. Through a clan ritual, held by the head of the clan (whom is called Shingai), the graduated child has their path opened. The ritual is extremely painful and requires that child is tattooed with symbols. After the tattooing the child is exposed to a plethora of herbs causing them to pass out. While unconscious the child will experience a vision where someone or something reveals to them their path. One day later the child awakes.
In order to gain a new stage they must be the required rank and meditate for a period of time, 6 posts. Once the user has done so they unlock the next stage and are able to access it.
There is a way to overcome the loss of personality and control. It requires the user to access the stage they wish to conquer and meditate once more. Once the user has fallen into the coma like state they must battle themselves to take over the stage form. If the user loses their battle they can never access father than the stage they attempted. ( To determine if the user wins the roleplayer must roll a ten sided dice at the end of the 15 post battle. If a 1 - 7 is achieved the user wins. 8 - 9 and they lost. A 10 ends in draw the user is given 5 more posts and second chance. In that second chance a 1 - 6 wins and a 7 - 10 loses )
The Onishitai bloodline is divided into three paths and four stages. The user is genetically given a specified path, Speed, Strength, or Stamina. Their path determines how their bodies change through out the stages and which element they are strongest in. For speed there is lightning. Strength boasts in earth. And stamina reigns in water. The user can only master whatever element is specific to their path.
Strengths:
Speed, Strength, or Stamina higher than normal
Excels in one element
Weakness:
Loss of personality over time
Excels in one element
Elements: Lightning, Earth, Water
Overview:
-Changes users body in four stages, not permanent changes
-Three paths ( Speed, Strength, Stamina ) One path
-Can only master one element, but are able to learn one other(can be any element) up to a jounin level
-Forms can be held for certain period of time before user blackouts
-Stage 4 is universally the same and always ends in blackout
Stage 1- Hair and Nails
G- 15 posts
C- 20 posts
J- 30 posts
S+- 40 posts
Slightly more hectic than typical
Fast paced growth of hair and nails. Claws and able to manipulate hair
Takes one post to develop into this form.
Must be held for three posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 2- Skin
G- 15 posts
C- 20 posts
J- 30 posts
S+- 40 posts
Rash
Hardening of skin.
May turn to scales or grow thorns, or even underarm flaps and webbed fingers
Takes two posts to develop into this form.
Must be held for three posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 3- Teeth and Bones
G- unobtainable
C- 10 posts
J- 25 posts
S+- 30 posts
Angry and Chaotic
Fangs and change and bone structure to fit there path
Takes two to three posts to develop into this form.
Must be held for five posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 4- Eyes
G- unobtainable
C- unobtainable
J- 8 posts
S+- 13 posts
Total loss of personality
Change in color. Veins in eyes turn color. Hazy vision. Has trouble distinguishing friend from foe. All out rampage ends in blackout
Takes two posts to develop into this form.
When mastered, meaning that the user no longer risks losing their personality, they user is able to quickly pick up on movements.
Speed-
Boosts in speed
Meant for assignation
Stage 1
The hair is stiffened kept short with to longer groups of hair for quick attacks. Long skinny claws
Stage 2
Under wings granted, scaly smooth skin.
Stage 3
Gains fangs and Bones become lighter and align in a more cat like body. Under arm skin wings become retractable.
Stage 4
Green and Yellow colors. Cat eyes with jagged vein designs.
Strength-
Boost in body strength
All out destruction
Stage 1
Long massive spikey hair. Thick claws
Stage 2
Tough skin with throns
Stage 3
Canines extended and widened. Bones thicken, muscles expand
Stage 4
Orange and Red. Sideways slit eyes
Stamina-
Extra chakra
Withstand pain longer
Stage 1
Short spikey hair that can be manipulated in any manner. Broad claws
Stage 2
Webbed fingers and toes. Tough skin shoulder and elbow spikes
Stage 3
Extra joint in arms and legs for easier swimming
Stage 4
Blue and Purple. Diagonal slit eyes
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 5:59 am
I think it's creative. Before I can accept it though, I need to know, You intended this clan to only be accessible to those with water, earth or lightning elements right? Or do they gain a third element? Also this is in the wrong thread, it's supposed to be in the custom clan thread, but I'll let it slide. cool
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 9:19 am
Truly this is the bloodline not the clan. I just put the clan name up there so that I had that detail.
If ya want I'll also go put the clan up.
In fact I should probably do that. :'D
Anyway, the whole thing about the elements is that either water, earth or lightning must be their primary.
They can still learn two more elements, but are unable to fully master them.
Thanks much. :]
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 12:55 pm
Well I think that it is a very good idea for a clan, but I'm not sure about the user being able to have the other two elements as well. If that happens, then they could have 4 elements. I need to also know if you want this as a bloodline or clan. If it's a bloodline, you would either have to get rid of your current bloodline to get this one, or you can just not get this at all. If it were a clan, then you could learn it.
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 2:07 pm
I guess I didn't explain myself correctly. They only master one of the three. It's a disadvantage. They can learn two more elements just like any other shinobi, but can only learn up to jounin level. That totals to three.
I'm going to leave it as a bloodline and not attatch it to Kokoro. I was planning to let it sit until I can get another character. Through kokoro dying or you all allowing more characters per person.
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 2:40 pm
I'm sorry but I'm still a little confused. What I understand is:
1. You can only have this bloodline, if your primary element is one of the three. Correct?
2. When you get to jounin level, you acquire the other two elements. Thats three there.
3. If your secondary element was something like fire, or wind I guess, that would also stay, making you have 4 elements.
Thats what I thought you meant. As long as the user can't like get more elements, then it's ok. (Example, they are already earth and fire, and then they get water and lightning. And they can learn water and lightning jutsus as well as the other two original elements.)
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 4:38 pm
Haha.
Oh no no no.
They don't learn the other two when they reach jounin level.
What I meant by that is they can learn two more elements in their entire life. It can be any other of the elements. But they can only learn up to the jounin jutsus of those two elements.
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 5:45 pm
Hmmm... This is very hard to decide. You see knowing more than two elements make people very, very strong, because they will be abe to counter practically every element. I don't think we can accept that they learn the other elements, but I can talk about it with Zale and our other vice captain.
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 5:57 pm
I'll change it to two.
I was starting to think three was too much as well.
EDIT
Or could I say they can only learn up to the chunin level jutsus of the third element?
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 11:34 pm
Nuppins FEEDBACK GREATLY APPRICIATED Onishitai
Demon Body
Clan Name:
Sansaro
Originating from an attempted curse seal, the Onishitai affects and changes the users body for a period of time. However as the Onishitai progresses through the stages the user begins lose their personality while activated. Once deactivated the user's body and mind state returns to normal, however as the user grows older they are slowly mentally consumed.
The user cannot activate nor know their path until they become a genin. Through a clan ritual, held by the head of the clan (whom is called Shingai), the graduated child has their path opened. The ritual is extremely painful and requires that child is tattooed with symbols. After the tattooing the child is exposed to a plethora of herbs causing them to pass out. While unconscious the child will experience a vision where someone or something reveals to them their path. One day later the child awakes.
In order to gain a new stage they must be the required rank and meditate for a period of time, 6 posts. Once the user has done so they unlock the next stage and are able to access it.
There is a way to overcome the loss of personality and control. It requires the user to access the stage they wish to conquer and meditate once more. Once the user has fallen into the coma like state they must battle themselves to take over the stage form. If the user loses their battle they can never access father than the stage they attempted. ( To determine if the user wins the roleplayer must roll a ten sided dice at the end of the 15 post battle. If a 1 - 7 is achieved the user wins. 8 - 9 and they lost. A 10 ends in draw the user is given 5 more posts and second chance. In that second chance a 1 - 6 wins and a 7 - 10 loses )
The Onishitai bloodline is divided into three paths and four stages. The user is genetically given a specified path, Speed, Strength, or Stamina. Their path determines how their bodies change through out the stages and which element they are strongest in. For speed there is lightning. Strength boasts in earth. And stamina reigns in water. The user can only master whatever element is specific to their path.
Strengths:
Speed, Strength, or Stamina higher than normal
Excels in one element
Weakness:
Loss of personality over time
Excels in one element
Elements: Lightning, Earth, Water
Overview:
-Changes users body in four stages, not permanent changes
-Three paths ( Speed, Strength, Stamina ) One path
-Can only master one element, but are able to learn one other(can be any element) up to a jounin level
-Forms can be held for certain period of time before user blackouts
-Stage 4 is universally the same and always ends in blackout
Stage 1- Hair and Nails
G- 15 posts
C- 20 posts
J- 30 posts
S+- 40 posts
Slightly more hectic than typical
Fast paced growth of hair and nails. Claws and able to manipulate hair
Takes one post to develop into this form.
Must be held for three posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 2- Skin
G- 15 posts
C- 20 posts
J- 30 posts
S+- 40 posts
Rash
Hardening of skin.
May turn to scales or grow thorns, or even underarm flaps and webbed fingers
Takes two posts to develop into this form.
Must be held for three posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 3- Teeth and Bones
G- unobtainable
C- 10 posts
J- 25 posts
S+- 30 posts
Angry and Chaotic
Fangs and change and bone structure to fit there path
Takes two to three posts to develop into this form.
Must be held for five posts before transforming to the next stage.
Stage 4- Eyes
G- unobtainable
C- unobtainable
J- 8 posts
S+- 13 posts
Total loss of personality
Change in color. Veins in eyes turn color. Hazy vision. Has trouble distinguishing friend from foe. All out rampage ends in blackout
Takes two posts to develop into this form.
When mastered, meaning that the user no longer risks losing their personality, they user is able to quickly pick up on movements.
Speed-
Boosts in speed
Meant for assignation
Stage 1
The hair is stiffened kept short with to longer groups of hair for quick attacks. Long skinny claws
Stage 2
Under wings granted, scaly smooth skin.
Stage 3
Gains fangs and Bones become lighter and align in a more cat like body. Under arm skin wings become retractable.
Stage 4
Green and Yellow colors. Cat eyes with jagged vein designs.
Strength-
Boost in body strength
All out destruction
Stage 1
Long massive spikey hair. Thick claws
Stage 2
Tough skin with throns
Stage 3
Canines extended and widened. Bones thicken, muscles expand
Stage 4
Orange and Red. Sideways slit eyes
Stamina-
Extra chakra
Withstand pain longer
Stage 1
Short spikey hair that can be manipulated in any manner. Broad claws
Stage 2
Webbed fingers and toes. Tough skin shoulder and elbow spikes
Stage 3
Extra joint in arms and legs for easier swimming
Stage 4
Blue and Purple. Diagonal slit eyes Accepted
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Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2009 2:26 am
 Name Ultima Eye ウルティマ目(Ultima Eye) Ability: Can slow down time for only 1 minute and manipulate the water and fire used together in an ultimate combo and can tame a dragon but not completely until he gets stronger AC- 9 post Genin- 7 post Sp-Jonin- 5 post Jonin/Anbu-3 post Sannin/Kage- 1 post Stages: First Stage Ultima Genkai:the user will have an can slow down time for 10 minute can also Summon a small flame and a small ball of water and it will merge with you hand also summon a baby dragon to help himSecond Stage Ultima Youshimitsu : The user can slow down time for 1 hours also summon a bigger flame and water that saround his arms and his weapon his holding will get the fire or water element example you hold a kunai the kunai will become a fire kunai that can explode or a water kunai that can choke people or make it rain Also The user will summon an young dragon usable for battle or travelling
to get it you must be a chunnin with great abilities in fire or water elementThird stage Ultima Ryuha: the user can slow time for 2 hour
but he has to be in a really healthy condition Also the Flame and the Water can ve used to make an water or fire ball in any direction useful if using shadow clone justu also the user can summon and adult dragon to any use
to get it you must be trained by the leader of the clan Fourth stage Ultima Saigo no Ryuha : only the leader and a few lucky Shinobi gets to use this the user will burst with an angelic and demonic aura with an black angel wing and a white angel wing he can control time for 30 minutes and his arms of flame and water can make an huge ball of flame and water to destroy there enemy and summon an acient dragon behemoth they only can retain this form for 15 minutes
whe the user use this stage they have to sleep for 1 weekElement: Fire/Water Strengths: control time tame dragons and use an advance water and fire jutsu that is only for this bloodline Weakness: they have to rest 2 hours every time they use the second stage and 1 day if you use the third stage Your rank: Genin Note: My character is the leader couse hes is the only survivor for now
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Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2009 7:45 am
Nuppins: It seems like Zale has accepted it, but I think that the person should only be able to gain 1 element from this. They can learn up to Jounin level jutsus. can you please edit it when you have the time?
_shinke_hiragana_: Very creative idea, but I think that instead of stopping time, they should slow it down, also, the time part should be a genjutsu, so that it can be stopped if the target realizes it. Also please edit it and write down how many posts something lasts instead of how many minutes.
You may be the leader, but you are only allowed to go up to stage 2 because you are a genin. When you are chunnin you may go to stage three, and when you become jounin the fourth stage is open to you.
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Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2009 11:09 am
Ahhh...
He doesn't use proper grammar!
stare
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