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Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 10:26 am
Name: Jess MindShade Race: ShadeAge: 19 Sex: neither, shades have no true form and therefore, are neither male or female. Although shades have the option of creating a mold in any form they want to choose whether they will be Male or female, only Jess' sister Lis has actually done so, While Ras has choosen the voice of a man but not the form. Personality Traits: Jess is known as the Shade of Insanity for it's cruel ways. The mind it contains is pure evil and always filled with dark intentions. It veiws Ras, The Elder Shade, as god (as do all shades) and worships him as such. Whenever someone does somthing which displeases it, Jess will begin what it calls "punishment" and torture the person in the way it sees most fitting. Often it even punishes itself in brutal ways, because it can never truely die, such as impalement,decapitation, mutilation, and other things which would kill a mortal. Jess has a great dislike for other creatures and is very manipulative. It has been recently deemed the Puppeteer Shade. It will connect strings to the limbs of others and hide in their shadows taking control at random times. It will also phase into a body and wrap around the bones constricting movement or sneak into minds, driving people insane with it's constant blabbering. Physical Traits: Shades are mere phantoms and have the ability to change forms. They can become anyone or thing they feel, even if it is a fictional character. Once in that form they are permited to train and learn the techniques the person has, even if the person doesn't truely exist. History: The shades are formed in a cave that has remained several kilometers below the earth's crust. As the cave slowly seals itself the darkness and shadows condense, fusing with the bit of evil that flows from every creature into the ground, and forming Shades. Being the youngest of the Shades Jess does not have much experience. Jess has trained hard over the years to learn the techniques which it's siblings attempt to teach it. During the time it trains it has also been sent to school to learn the basic knowledge known to humans. It began school late and is currently starting high school in "Silver Rose Academy" Under the title of "Jess Ayame" and in the form of Hinata Hyuuga from Naruto. Where it has already come in contact with many people and accidentally formed a lesser shade. Most of the people it came in contact with were put through punishment based on the interactions they had.
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Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 10:33 pm
While I'm not to fond of evil beings, this IS a general class.
Your character seems well thought out, but I never liked the idea of something that inflicts pain on itself intentionally to atone for ANYthing. I do like the idea to learn abilities from a form one takes. Copy abilities are always my favorite things in RPG Video games (Blue Mages for the win, also MegaMan Battle Network for the win).
Would it's story be a redemption story, or is it just plain evil? Have you already figured how 'she' (since that's the form it took) would react if she were to go good? How did 'she' do in school. Did other kids like 'her'? Did 'she' get good grades too? All of these questions will help you be a better player for your character.
side-note: I noticed several typos in your post. Though some are to be expected in any typing environment, it never hurts to reread what you've typed. Even if there aren't any typos you can frequently find things you want to change anyways. As a matter of fact that's why my posts frequently change. This one was edited twice after the original submit button was pushed.
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Posted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 8:13 am
yea I guess I should explain her formation in history XD She could never go good >.> formed of pure evil... The shades are a race of my own design I made as "Evolving" characters... Silverrose is a rp I am currently in and it's only night of day 1 XD
Sry for any tyos and misspelled words sweatdrop I'm on vacation and don't have computer.... I'm on my friends laptop stressed sry...
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Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 2:47 am
I didn't say you had to apologize. It's just a little reminder to double-check stuff from time to time. Well, I can't say I look forward to seeing your story develop. But I can say I wish you well in your advancement of said story.
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Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 3:12 pm
Alright, I have question. I know little to nothing about certain nuances I guess you could call them in the RP world. Let me try to relate here, I know that it's a big pet peve of mine and others when fan fiction author inserts themselves in a story. What are some of those for RP characters? Something like, would using the same character in two different genre RP's be considered tacky?Or altering the race or history of a character from one RP to another so that they can better fit in to the that reality be faux pau?(not really sure how to spell that phrase) Also, here's a profile I made a while back that I really liked,but never put into use.(I know how people here tend to feel towards pics,but when I saw this it was exactly how I pictured him) Name:Sariel Heilige Age:17 gender:Male Race:Angel Personality:Always unsure and doubtful of himself, Sariel seems depressed most of the time. Believes in absolute freedom, indivuality and expression of all love forms above everything. He will risk his very existance for what and whom he holds dear. Bio: Having his greatest love die before his eyes by the hands of a demon, Sariel swore he would find a purpose to protect others. He still attempts to have compassion to all, even demons, believing that all beings are capable of great good and great evil. Was allowed to briefly train under the guidance of a seraphim to hone his archery. Appearence:
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Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 11:30 pm
It's a concept character I haven't quite heard of yet. It's quite an interesting idea too. I personally think he should have some short range abilities as well as his archery, but that's just me. Does he show compassion towards the demon that killed his love? Or does he have some hatred towards it?
If he has hatred, it could lead him down a path of destruction. Yet the other way around means he could be one of the purer angels in your story's universe. But as an interesting twist, by not showing hatred he would prove his own beliefs wrong; namely that all beings are capable of great good, and great evil. I look foreword to seeing how your character develops.
PS: if you find a picture that's exactly how you'd imagine him, then by all means display it. If it's something similar (but not exact) it may not be as beneficial.
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Posted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 9:10 am
I was already thinking of giving him "powers",but I have never done battle RP's. So I was unsure if I should even add that in.Examples; Resupply;Purifies and converts light into divine arrows. Switch;Converts and combines the surrounding light and the reaminder of his arrows into a temporary blade of divine judgement.
Thanks for your insight.
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Posted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 9:03 pm
The ability to make arrows out of basically nothing is actually quite beneficial for your type of story. The sword really shouldn't be temporary, but it's also beneficial to be able to abate it like that. You sounds like you have some pretty good ideas then.
No problem, it's what I'm here for.
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Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 10:18 am
i like the creating arrows out of nothing... reminds me of the quincies. very angelic
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Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 10:25 pm
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Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 10:25 pm
That power would have a difficult time working at night on Earth or in Hell, right?
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Posted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 11:58 pm
well, angels are made from light, so he could create the arrows from his essence. like chakra or sommin is in naruto, you can overexert yourself. but he can use light too, so he only has the chakra problem at night
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Posted: Mon Jun 08, 2009 11:19 pm
Interesting twist. Yes, having to use his own essence would make him less likely to overexert himself. But having the benefit of using light would still be effective in a hell. Because fire gives off PLENTY of light.
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Posted: Tue Jun 09, 2009 2:20 pm
Light and 'the magicallness of good' tend to be... interchanged. To the extent that night has bad in the air, and day has good in the air.
There is also a religion that thinks of Hell as cold, because it is farther from the warmth of god, compared to Earth and Heaven.
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Posted: Tue Jun 09, 2009 4:54 pm
uh, for the record im muslim, and our description of the hell fire is that it is a living, breathing thing. and when it inhales, it is cold as well, hell, and when it exhales, it is hotter than anything you can imagine. but the thing is, no matter whether it is hot of cold, the flames are black. here it is
Prophet Mohummed said " the hell fire was kindled for one thousand year until it became red, then it was kindled for another one thousand years till it became white, then it was kindled one more thousand years till it became black" [narrated in the book of Tirmidhi]
got that off the internet, so the translation was bad. i edited it, there is another line after that one about how it is the deepest shade of black, if i remember correctly. but i dont have the actual book in front of me, nor do i have the arabic text to translate accurately.
so i dont know if you would get any light arrows out of that.
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