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 Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 7:10 am
namimizu That's incredible!! Your voice is very clear, and you're definitely right, it has a good rhythm. There may be a place or two where you'd want to fix things, but it'd only be for perfection's sake. It's already so close! The second one you posted is also amazing-- are you considering this as a profession? writing is a second prfession for me. I write short stories and send them in for cash for omnibus readers. Some get published, some don't. But I have always been a poet. I believe it has something to do with my affinity for music. @Ramos, I would be interested to hear what you could do with that musically.
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 7:25 am
sweatdrop Meant to say thanks for all the nice comments...
Thank you.
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 1:37 pm
those are good seesees. Makes me want to go cry.
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 2:02 pm
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 2:08 pm
〖Time is of the essence.〗
||...-Stares at it for a while-
DANG GIRL. <3 ||
〖 Love is of the spirit. 〗
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 2:29 pm
Mo Etsuko
〖Time is of the essence.〗
||...-Stares at it for a while-
DANG GIRL. <3 ||
〖 Love is of the spirit. 〗thanks
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Posted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 4:14 pm
Wow! Both those pieces are just amazing.
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 12:41 am
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 7:19 am
The Old Ways are lost to youth
Tradition is compromised by misunderstanding
The Wise Ones no longer walk
Among the People.
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 10:44 pm
For Dr Ramos
My heart aches in sadness.
My soul is crying out in dispair.
My love has gone away today
She took the Celestial Stair.
Should we meet again
Let her be happy
If we meet again gladly
Let sorrow melt into joy.
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Posted: Sat Mar 21, 2009 5:15 pm
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Posted: Sun Mar 22, 2009 12:03 am
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Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 7:43 pm
I was wandering the road of life in my mind,
Looking for that piece I left behind.
Where could it be, that piece of me...
Where did I leave it?
Did anyone see?
I was looking back to all the places I have been
To find what I left behind.
That piece of me, that was revered as so dear.
Do you know what I saw?
Did you see it all?
I saw us both walking down that sacred road,
Your hand grasping mine
Our hearts beating as one...
I found it, my other half
That piece I thought I had left behind
It was with me all the time, loving me.
It was you... All along.
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Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 7:46 pm
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Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 7:52 pm
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