Welcome to Gaia! ::

Thank you, Shade :3
It is my favourite concept, but I think it's Loki.. she said it's a bit like Riv's. But that's because the original name was "Sky Piece". I think "mirror water" or "sky water" works better to describe it, anyway XD
Shobi's concept is getting a complete make over~ My last idea mixed with another raevan.. again XD Haha.

Yea. I changed Tiangou. :U Thanks for pointing it out :3

Lol XD
I don't have a Cobra-Soul-concept >w< "Cobra, Beaver, Swan" was me trying to be silly. It says "Cobra Beaver Swan, with these powers combines, I AM PLATYPUS". Not four different souls >w<

But thank you <3
And what do you mean, the idea you couldn't think of? What did i do differently than you? :3

I changed my idea |D My other two are size 1 white under Aralia's concept c:

For some reason, I could have made it the other way with a limitation, but I prefer a more childish, naive character for this.


I think I might write a RP sample, soon, too ;w;

Hey, thar!
Saw you changed stuff, I'll get right down to business > 3 >

I'll be quoting specific pieces from you, but this is just to keep my own thoughts organized/so I don't have to constantly keep scrolling back up to see what I'm writing about next. Going to be concentrating on the Raevan.

Lets start with your Essences!



Like I said in the thread, this could potentially work as an Essence, but to be honest I'm not very fond of it. Again, I can't really see a way for the Raevan to feed here; it'd either eat grass like a grazing animal or it'd... what... eat pointy things? And powers, I guess you could come up with some potentially neat stuff, but it just seems like an Essence that's grasping at straws?



Now THIS one I like!
While it can potentially nudge against the other two existing sky Essences, it's mostly water and, above all, it's reflective. I could see a lot of mimicry going into it, and to feed, it could probably just look in a mirror -shrugs- It's unique, as in I haven't seen it in a quest thread before, and it's genuinely pretty cool. Got its own flair going on.



Automatically, ANY sound Essence at all is stepping on Melisande's toes. Yes, hers is a song specifically, but that IS a sound. Yours isn't a specific sound, it's a bunch of sounds and, while the bubble thing makes it more unique than just a sound in a bottle, it still isn't very unique/inspiring. Plus, Kyou openly dislikes sound based Essences or things that can't be conventionally bottled like "wind" and such.



Now, I don't know much about jackalopes, but I know it's mainly a rabbit, and there's already a rabbit soul in use, so I'm automatically leery. Just as well, there's now a stag soul in use, which is basically a deer, and thus has horns, so both souls used to make a Jackalope are in use. Besides that, they don't really seem to have any traits to stand alone on that aren't just there for humorous stabs at people thinking they're real, so this seems like a poor soul idea to me.




I like insect souls. I like dragonflies. Really, this one seems solid. In all actuality, there isn't a single insect soul used yet--quested for, yes, but used? no--so there's some bonus points. I can't really think of much to say on it, though. They also don't have many specific traits, maybe some symbolism, but aside from that wing quirk, I can't think of anything interesting from the dragonfly to come into the Raevan.



I remember you saying in thread you were trying to think of souls/Essences that would make your guardian "bond" with the Raevan, but that makes it a purely face value thing. It's something I'm strongly against, in fact, for a person to come up with a concept just because it goes well with "my character", when in fact it should be the opposite; "what character can I use that would go well with this?" because in the grand scheme of things in shops that require guardians, your guardian is not all that important. They will be your Raevan's parent, but once your Raevan arrives, they are supporting cast, not main cast.

Beyond that, the flying fish could work I suppose, but like the Blades of Grass, I'm not very fond of it, though that's a personal preference minus what I stated above.



Just a note that he has an exceptionally feminine name.



I don't think any of the fish Raevans have been drawn with gills, but photosynthesis seems... almost TOO straight forward as a food source. It definitely works, it's just... kind of boring.



This seems like the exact opposite of his Essence, and that's kind of pointless in my mind. Fel Essences are automatically contradictions of nature but they should never contradict themselves. His Essence is plants (grass) that's sharp like blades, he should be able to manipulate that some how but I really don't think this power would function properly. Plus, if he's grass, how does he some how get control of OTHER plants? If he made them sprout a protective covering of grass, that'd be one thing (though still egh...), but I see him more like... being able to grow spines like a porcupine or something, that just makes a lot more sense to me for this Essence.



The word you're looking for is Telepathy. Telekinesis is the manipulation of plants, as in controlling them, where as Telepathy is the ability to read ones thoughts or speak through one's mind. ANYWAY, I guess plant telepathy works, but telepathy via the soul/Essence is getting kind of overused. Lulu can understand and speak to rabbits (her soul is a rabbit), Rivener can understand and speak to stars (his Essence is star based), etc. It's old hat.



To be honest, I like him only feeling the flowers better than being able to speak with them. Flowers and plants are alive, but they're not sentient.



Now I think you're stretching the fact that he's made from grass/a plant too far, so much so that you're treading on Neon's quested Essence territory. None of the other plant based Raevans feed/breathe Carbon Dioxide, but I assume you mean to say that he exhales Oxygen, which then continues on. While it's not a DIRECT rub against Neon's, since her plant breathes Oxygen like a person (and sounds like a person breathing), it does intrude on the fact that his breath is like a pseudo power because of it, so I'm going to flat out say I don't like that trait.

The fact he thinks everything is dangerous is kind of... Unnecessary. I see you say you think a naive, childish personality would be best suited, but lets be honest here, LAB IS FULL TO THE BRIM WITH CHILDISH CHARACTERS. 70% of the Raevans currently in existence are childish unless they're Sigel or close to it, so it's really uninspiring/boring and getting to the point where it's becoming annoying, as well. I'm not saying "make him an a*****e", but why does it have to be at only one end or the other of the spectrum? Explore new possibilities in personality, make sure no toes are stepped on. Every detail counts and it's getting especially hard in Lab to come up with a completely solid concept because there's so many Raevans now.

8D *raises hand* THAT'S ME, I'M THE STAG SOUL YES HELLO. <333

I just wanted to point out -- Iorek eats rocks, so eating grass could actually probably work for your Raevan! And I don't know that I'd be put off by boring feeding methods... you can always use it as an alternate feeding method, if nothing else! In any case, it definitely shouldn't put you off your concept.

Also... your 'sharp object' power could be hilarious if you switched 'em around to be like your essence. (Forgot a knife at your picnic? Take a leaf off of a nearby plant and cut an apple with it!)

And -- I do really like your water-mirror essence. I think it's clever and different! :3 You've got good stuff here, just work out the kinks and you'll be solid.

/rolls through/ I don't think I've actually been in this quest thread before. > O > I've tried to hit up each thread at least once to make sure I don't step on any toes. xD;; Anyways! Just going to post and comment on some things that caught my attention as I was reading. ^^ /mostly paid attention just to the Raevan area/

------------

With concept numero uno ::
Quiet/collected/protective are pretty common traits to have in an OC (I say this because it's been brought to my attention before in past things I have done) so while they're good to work with, and still have, it might help your chances with people being interested in your quested/future Raevan if you work on those traits and figure out something a little more. Or maybe a quirk that allows for a more interesting twist on those aforementioned traits. ^^

I like the interesting twist on the feeding source. Kudos to that particular trait. It's something that gives a more vivid impression to the reader. (y)

Where does these green spines come from? Are they already present on the Raevan and stand up at attention when frightened/angry? Do they spontaneously manifest? If so, how does this occur? Something that was brought to my attention a lot, while I've been questing here in LAB, is to really think things through. Make sure you can really justify a power or have a strong reason for it being there in connection with something that deals with the Raevan - not just because we really like the idea of it. I personally think the idea of the protective spines very interesting, I'd just like to know more about it. ^^

Why does he feel connections to plants? I can understand connection to grass, yes, but plants...not so much. Mostly because his soul would be a dragonfly and his essence is grass-related so it doesn't translate well in my mind? Idk. >>;;

Concept dos (I like this essence a lot, btw) ::
I enjoy the feeding source here as well - it really connects with the essence. (y) Does Shobi (I'm guessing that's the name you chose for C2?) have to see the image or does he draw from it subconsciously just by being around it? And does the reflection reappear once Shobi is gone/not paying attention? Something that might be interesting to utilize here would be him possibly having an affect on living creatures if he sees their reflections? Make sure to make it something broad and able to be left open to a person's interpretations so you don't get accused of god-modding if you do ponder that idea. :]

With projection, as previously mentioned, make sure to leave it more open-ended when it comes to it. Something that I thought might be really cool is maybe he could distort reflections that people see of themselves (again - up to interpretation), or he could impose a persons worst fear, greatest love, etc. through the reflections. Just some suggestions. ^^

------------

As a side note, I like the idea Atma had for the blade of grass essence. Not actually turning the piece of grass into a knife, but instead sharp-like qualities, and using it. You can make it a more active ability that he doesn't obtain until later in his growth, and thus a better control, so you don't run into the whole spontaneous field-of-grass-blades. Idk. Sticky essence that is.

XD Out of curiousity... what's god-mode-y about having weapons easily available to your character? Most other Raevans have weapons they can use in easy reach -- Vyn can use shadows, Laz can make fire, Riv can sting, Sev can erode things in his reach, etc etc. Just having your chara be able to make something /into/ weapons doesn't mean he has to constantly do it. Or that it'll be super powerful! For instance -- what if the blade of grass is only a blade while he's touching it? That way, if he throws 'em, they turn back into ... grass. XD And that way, a field doesn't actually become a field of grass spikes.

I don't think dangerous is a bad thing to have as a power, per se, you just have to be responsible bout using it. 8D

*Added some Detail to their powers. Added Knives to ____'s Powers and gave every detail I could think of. Haha. Probably missed something though.

Still need a name for the both of them. Farid is Temporary, but it means "Unique".


SOuL IDEAS

Moon Bear
Ring-Tail-Lemur
Fu Dog
Mantis
Dragonfly