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Do it. Now.

I'm sorry, I don't really know a nice way to say it - your guardian chara is still a dull pile of godmode. This stuff might be cool in Barton Town or wherever you RP at, but around this forum we prefer characters with room for development that would be interesting to interact with. And my character watching your character fly around being awesome at everything is not interesting.

Not only that, it's against the RP rules here to have someone that old / overpowered / inhuman. We want characters that are mostly human and mostly normal, and I honestly feel sorry for you if you can't come up with a character with those limitations in mind because you still have a lot to work with there.

I mean, a couple billion? Really? 8|; I can't take that seriously. Really old characters that look young are so cliche that yours is practically a self-parody-- if you want him to look 19 years old, just make him 19 years old. Trust me. Being around since there wasn't enough oxygen in the atmosphere to sustain life on land doesn't make your character cooler, and neither does piling a bunch of powers on him.

Give him a background. Give him a personality, for godsakes, instead of tossing a handful of overused Batman traits on him. I've eaten slices of bread with more personality than your character.


I'm not even going to go too into length about RP literacy here, but suffice to say that we like complete sentences in people's writing if you can manage it. Just read the existing journals and you'll get an idea about our expectations. >u>;

Also, I'd advise that you not steal art for your character images without at least giving credit to the artist. That is ART THEFT and reportable under the Gaia ToS. It can get you banned. Don't do it.

Actually, there is and please don't be rude. Click "Rules and Guidelines" then go straight down to 'Images'. It's number four on the list as 'Copyright Violation'.



The reason why you shouldn't have a demon character who is a couple billion years old/immortal is right in Mouse's second paragraph. "...it's against the RP rules here to have someone that old / overpowered / inhuman." Also, your character is considered perfect/a Gary-Stu because, looking at your Guardian's profile, his faults are not listed. >: All of his powers are there, as well as a very limited personality, back history, appearance, etc, but there's nothing there to make him seem not perfect. "Batman traits" is sarcasm on Mouse's part (Mouse if I am mistaken, I apologize in advance). Rather than having a real personality, you've given him all these powers, weapons, and traits that are supposed to make him "super cool" or whatever, but in reality he's about as interesting as a piece of wet cardboard. Personality makes the character and looking at your Guardian, he has very little to none. Like Mouse said as well, watching your character being awesome at everything is not interesting and your Guardian should not outshine the Raevan anyway. This is what the shop is about; the Raevans not the Guardians. That's also the reason why Mouse suggested you make a human character rather than use the one up now.

I suggest you take Nikiana's advice and run your character through the Litmus Test first, as well as take Mouse's advice about creating a character who is human and normal with no powers or gifts for a potential Guardian. It would also be wise if you work on grammar and punctuation as well as sentence structure because this is an RP shop that is looking for literate RPers and it is very hard to discern what you type. If you don't understand, take Mouse's advice and look through the journals; they'll show you what this shop wants.

What are they?

That is a bit improved though, I'll admit -- and by 'Batman traits' I meant the deal with making him dark, brooding and mysterious. It's overdone.

I don't see how him being bonded with a dragon would be relevant to this RP when the focus is on the development of the Raevan, though.

Well you're getting there, but it still feels like you're sort of slapping a character together in five minutes or less. Not saying you actually did, but just saying that's how it seems when you read it.

I don't see the necessity of him being like 300 something years old really. If you want him to look 19, make him 19 like everyone else says. You don't have to be ancient to be wise. My own character is fairly knowledgeable in a multitude of things, but only because her childhood was sacrificed in favor of learning. Even then she is not a master in any thing, this leaves room for growth because that's the name of the game when it comes to character creation. Watching them grow into different or better (perhaps worst depending on the case) people is what makes things interesting.

I think a good example of character growth in a guardian is Aphismet. I highly recommend combing through his journal if you have a chance. You'll see that even a regular guy like him can become very interesting depending on the other characters and the situations they are faced with.

Keep working at it hon, it's starting to take shape, but you're not going to get it immediately. Trust me. Took me forever to get Ebony's initial persona and history down. Once that's down pat, everything else comes from rp. Oh and I think you're getting somewhere with the Herbology thing. Make him an expert (doctor or such) or even a student in that. I find it very interesting.

Well, I really haven't thought of any more subsistence to go with into what I already have, on that note I guess I'll just go with what i have and pursue that fleeting dream *sigh*