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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:49 am


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Hehe, well you certainly have very strong writing skills, so I don't think that's the problem! You can do it. I think sometimes it's not only the enjoyment you need by the sheer determination not to get sidetracked by something else. With this trilogy I've experienced some of my most horrifying blocks, no joke. The first novel was easier than the second and took me two months to finish. Though, even then I had massive doubts about most of it (and still do) because I wanted it to work so much. I just forced myself to keep writing, a little something every day no matter how little, and eventually I made it to the end.

This second novel I'm working on now has been a lot harder. I started that in August and wrote on it solidly until October, when I stopped to take part in NaNoWriMo with a new novel. By mid-October I was ready to throw the novel away. At 80,000 words it was the most emotional thing I'd ever written, and just sitting down to write it was sapping my strength. In fact, I can say that after a four month break that's still the same, but I'm so determined to finish this trilogy that I will do anything to keep going, even if that means torture myself. XD I'm hoping that because it's taking so much effort to write, it will be apparent when it's read. ninja If not, I'll have wasted all of my creative energy for nothing. sweatdrop

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:57 am


I'm just obsessive, really. rofl If I don't finish something it plays on my mind guiltily until I finish it. The characters just seem to hover in my mind and it's very annoying. XD

Perhaps in the future I can try and help your focus? I find that sometimes when I have somebody to talk to about my plot, who knows as much as I do, that they can encourage me not to give up? I mean, I don't know how helpful I'd be, but I'd love to try. wink

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:04 am


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I'm just obsessive, really. rofl If I don't finish something it plays on my mind guiltily until I finish it. The characters just seem to hover in my mind and it's very annoying. XD

Perhaps in the future I can try and help your focus? I find that sometimes when I have somebody to talk to about my plot, who knows as much as I do, that they can encourage me not to give up? I mean, I don't know how helpful I'd be, but I'd love to try. wink
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Any help you can give would be greatly appreciated! And I know that I'm going to have a lot of road blocks with my current fic, for even with fanfics I can suffer the same problems that I've had with original stories. But, fanfics are good practice for seeing if you can tackle getting to the end of a story! (There's this one story that I wrote in middle school, never finished, then decided to rewrite it in my Senior year of HS, and, again, didn't finish it, not even reaching the point where I had stopped in the original writing. Someday, I want to finish that one.)

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:15 am


In which case I think I should be able to help, since I also have a knowledge of Tin Man. I think it'd be more difficult if I hadn't seen, or hadn't enjoyed, the show, but since I did I hope I'll be able to keep you writing. Especially since I want to see where you're going with it. It's one thing seeing plots and plans and stuff, but something else entirely to read the actual story. :3

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:25 am


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In which case I think I should be able to help, since I also have a knowledge of Tin Man. I think it'd be more difficult if I hadn't seen, or hadn't enjoyed, the show, but since I did I hope I'll be able to keep you writing. Especially since I want to see where you're going with it. It's one thing seeing plots and plans and stuff, but something else entirely to read the actual story. :3
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Yep! No doubt that the events I've told you about will still be shocking and a surprise when you read them. Besides, said events are supposed to be, and I will not shirk from that. I'll simply suck it up and plunge head-first into it with much gusto! If I don't, the horrifying events would be very disappointing, and if I don't get unnerved by what I'm writing, then who's to say that the reader would? It's always good to feel what you want your readers to feel, that's what I think. So, the events that are to come had better make me squirm and worry and feel such unparalleled hatred! xd (Being serious, BTW!)

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:31 am


Haha, yay! I think I'm somewhat lucky in that a lot of things don't bother me at all. I'm rather robust and incredibly morbid, which means that I can write almost anything without worrying. I've approached rape, suicide, murder, birth, drugs, everything really. I don't know if that hinders how I write it. I hope not, obviously - I think that perhaps my empathy and fascination shine through just as well as if I were genuinely feeling the emotions - but even then, sometimes I do feel a lot more than I know I should. It's all about the situation.

When I killed a character in my one novel where I was very attached to said character, I actually cried. It doesn't happen very often, but when it does it's pretty damn epic! xD

I think as long as you can write emotions, feelings, situations well, it doesn't really matter how you do it. P:

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 11:43 am


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Haha, yay! I think I'm somewhat lucky in that a lot of things don't bother me at all. I'm rather robust and incredibly morbid, which means that I can write almost anything without worrying. I've approached rape, suicide, murder, birth, drugs, everything really. I don't know if that hinders how I write it. I hope not, obviously - I think that perhaps my empathy and fascination shine through just as well as if I were genuinely feeling the emotions - but even then, sometimes I do feel a lot more than I know I should. It's all about the situation.

When I killed a character in my one novel where I was very attached to said character, I actually cried. It doesn't happen very often, but when it does it's pretty damn epic! xD

I think as long as you can write emotions, feelings, situations well, it doesn't really matter how you do it. P:
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Me, I haven't had very much experience writing about specific topics because, honestly, none of my stories have called for specific ones. The topics I've encountered in my own writing has been death, murder, and violence (with the Star Wars one, it was sort of "war-time" violence). And . . . that's pretty much it. "Into The Heart Of Darkness" will be the first time I've included torture and rape. It'll be . . . dare I say it? . . . fun. (Not in a twisted sort of way, though!)

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Haha, I have to admit I'm pretty twisted. D= I enjoy exploring all sorts of issues because I think it enables you to think about them without doing so in one of those morally-cleansed "mind-numbing" ways. If that makes sense... But doing it through your writing you can explore it in different ways and it makes you think.

Not that I enjoy topics like that, but I do enjoy challenging myself and challenging preconceptions, so I've written rather a lot of stuff over the years. Considering I've only been writing since I was fourteen (four years ish) I've covered a good few subject by now. xD

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Again only basic spellcheck, typed at stupid hours in the morning. General comments appreciated, and huge glaring mistakes. I haven't proofread since putting it on a guild after I wrote it in the summer, so expect stupid mistakes and you won't be disappointed. =] Sorry for the length again. Feel free to split it up when reading. XD


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The rest of the journey passed in a blur to Calina, who spent most of it gazing out of the window, arguing with Ellette about childish issues such as the amount of time since the last toilet stop... or how many other people they would be sharing a room with once they reached the campus, or simply staring at her reflection in the small compact mirror she carried in her purse. She wasn’t particularly vain, really, but once she reached the university she wanted to be able to give people a good first impression of herself, and to arrive looking travel weary was sure to be practical social suicide. If she was going to spend the next three years of her life at a university in the middle of the biggest city in Exos, miles and miles from home, then she was going to want to at least have some sort of life while she was there.

It was on the morning of the third day when Jolas stopped the cab and finally announced that they would be arriving in Central City by midday, and would the ladies like to stop somewhere on the outskirts to freshen up a little? Calina would have jumped at the chance, if only she had known, but she had recently fallen asleep and Ellette had not wanted to wake her. Jolas came around to the side of the cab and knocked on the door. Ellette drew back the curtains and lifted a finger to her lips.

“That’s fine,” she said to Jolas quietly as the small man peered through her window. “We’ll just go straight to the university. We can freshen up once we get there, and it’ll save us some time for unpacking our bags.”

“Are you sure Miss Ellette?” he asked her, raising his eyebrows as if he thought her choice was not a wise one. “Would Miss Calina not like to stop some place?”

Ellette glanced at her sister who had fallen asleep with her head pressed in the corner between the seat and the door. She was snoring lightly, peacefully, and to Ellette she looked perfectly fine- not a hair out of place, her skin was close to flawless and her lipstick was still not at all smeared, and even.

“She probably will want to stop,” Ellette agreed, “but she doesn’t need to. Does she look like she needs to freshen up to you?”

Jolas shook his head. “No.”

“Well then. We’ll just head into the city.”

They had only been back on the road for half an hour when Calina woke up. She opened her eyes and looked around blearily, confused. It took a moment for her to wake up fully, and during that period of time she managed to smear both her lipstick and any makeup she had been wearing around her eyes. She turned to Ellette with a lazy smile.

“Good morning.” Ellette bit back a grin as she took in her sister’s new, rather undesirable appearance. “What?” Calina asked. “What’s so funny?”

“Nothing,” Ellette assured her. “Well, something. You might want to get your mirror out.”

Calina shot her a look that was both annoyed and curious in one, and then fumbled around in her purse to pull out the mirror. She held it to her face and almost threw it back down again once she saw her reflection. This was a disaster! She couldn’t walk into one of Exos’ most prestigious universities looking like she had just stepped out of the country- no matter that this was exactly what she had done. To blend in she had to look the part, and as if being quite low down the social ladder wasn’t enough, to walk into the university looking like this? Ellette might find it funny at first, but she wouldn’t be laughing when they were put into a dormitory room that they had to share with fifteen other girls.

“You’d better stop laughing and help me,” Calina threatened through gritted teeth, her lips contorted into a pretty little snarl; it shouldn’t have been pretty, but years of perfecting it had given her something which was both becoming and threatening.

“How?” Ellette let out a short sharp giggle and then sobered herself up. “It’s not like I can just come over and redo your makeup for you.”

“No, I wouldn’t want you to do that,” Calina said. “You could ask Jolas when we’re going to stop though? I mean, we must be stopping before we get to the university, it looks like we’re almost there now.” Ellette didn’t answer, and Calina took that to mean that they wouldn’t be stopping. Rather than raising it as an issue she merely rolled her eyes; what was she to expect of Ellette, after all?

Instead Calina scooted closer to the window and looked out. From her side of the cab she could look out and see miles and miles of countryside trailed behind them, all rolling green fields and trees that marked the skyline with their boisterous spring buds having just blurted into action, but ahead of them the sight was much different. Careless of her makeup- for they were a good few miles away from anybody who might care to stare into the windows of passing cabs- she pressed her face out of the window. The cab was currently following what was left of the main thoroughfare through Exos, known to most as Capital Road, which was made of bricks and was largely uneven and bumpy in places. Capital Road as far as Calina could see, carried on for a good few miles ahead of them, but ahead of that the sight she saw amazed her.

Central City was the largest city in the entirety of Exos, built only recently from the combination of the two government cities of Itur and Ziranel East. It stood proudly in the centre of everything, tall and bold against the pale blue sky and silver clouds; Calina could make out dark turrets and roofs the colour of cobalt that reached up to spike the skyline like giant needles. She had never seen anything so huge, and the sight now of the city, all of a sudden upon them, was enough to rouse feelings of both excitement and trepidation at what was about to come.

“Have you seen this?” Calina mouthed at Ellette in wonder as she sat back inside the cab. “Have you seen it out there? Holy Exos, it looks amazing!” She couldn’t contain her excitement, even through the annoyance at her less than acceptable appearance. “It’s huge! Massive! I’ve never seen anything like it, have you? No, of course you haven’t. We’ve never even been outside of Ugas before!” Calina was almost squealing now.

Ellette looked up from the small row of prayer beads she had pulled out of her pocket. Her thin dark eyebrows raised in a little surprise at Calina’s sudden burst of excitement, and then she let out a peal of laughter.

“Oh Calina, I think you’re more wound up than I am about this.”

“Have you looked out of the window lately?” Calina asked her pertly.

“Well, no but-”

“Well no but whatever. Go on, look outside now. I’m sure you’ll like what you see.”

Ellette gave her a short exasperated sigh, slipped her prayer beads quickly back into her pocket and then obliged, hanging out of the window in a much more unladylike manner than Calina had done. Calina snickered a little at this, fighting the urge to make some rude or rather pointless comment; she needed to work being less snappish. She put it down to the stress of leaving home.

While Ellette was deciding whether she thought the three-day trip from home to be exciting enough an adventure to require some form of interest or not, Calina busied herself with wiping her smudged makeup from her face with a handkerchief and a little spittle. It wasn’t the most pleasant form of cleanser, but it would have to do, especially as they weren’t going to be stopping before the city, as Calina would have liked.

“It’s a bit of an eyesore,” Ellette said after sliding her head back in the cab, though Calina could see that her sister was just as impressed by the size of the city as she was. “Standing up like that, you’d think it was the centre of some great big explosion.”

“Why?” Calina frowned. “I think it’s definitely more interesting to look at than Ugas. Home is so flat.”

“I guess it’s those turrets coming from the middle; they look as though somebody just stuck them there to say ‘Hey look at us, we’ve got a bigger and obviously therefore better city than yours’. I’ll bet if you stood on a hill miles and miles away you’d still be able to see them, poking up like that.”

“I don’t think you’d need to stand on a hill,” said Calina by way of agreement, “but you have to admit that it’s interesting.”

“Interesting isn’t the word I’d use,” Ellette said dryly. “I don’t know why you think it’s so wonderful-”

“Oh stop it, Letty,” Calina reprimanded. “I know you’re just as excited as me now that you’ve seen it, so you can kick that ‘I’m so high and mighty’ act in right now. You’re just like the rest of us, no matter what your God says.”

“It’s just like you to bring religion into it,” Ellette said with a grin. “You’re so irritable lately.”

“I know, I’m sorry.” Calina apologised, but to Ellette she didn’t sound sorry; she didn’t even sound sorry when she said it in her mind, and that was more of a problem. She had just about finished cleaning up her makeup now, and she turned to Ellette slowly. “I’ve just been busy, that’s all.”

“You say that you’ve been busy, but you must have been busy for an awfully long time. I’ve noticed that this past year you’ve been getting snappier and snappier when you talk to me. I wish you wouldn’t.”

“I know, I’m sorry,” Calina said again, though this time she sounded more like she meant it.

“Yes, sure. Oh, and you missed a spot.” Ellette gestured to a smudge in her lipstick, which had been out of sight until now. Calina nodded her thanks. There was a long period of silence, then, between them as both girls were busy wrestling with their own confusing thoughts. Calina couldn’t help but wonder what the city would be like one they got inside, and what the university would look like. She was also rather nervous about the initiation once they arrived; would they be frowned upon for not having a chaperone? It was likely, and she didn’t want any more embarrassment than they would already encounter coming from Ugas of all places; a small city which was in reality only a glorified village, the nobility was almost as poor as the rest of the people, and yet they were still nobility. Where was the pride in that?

Ellette sat with her hands in her laps fiddling with her prayer beads again. Calina couldn’t tell if she was praying or not, but her head was bowed in that modest display of morality that usually accompanied her silent prayers. Her fingers rattled over the beads as she rested her head on her chest and let her eyelids flutter softly. Calina never could understand why one would go towards those Mif Unionist beliefs, not when they seemed so science based. Funny really, but she’d never trusted scientists.

Eventually, boredom set in again, and Calina hated being bored. She tried counting the number of trees that they passed on Capital Road, but there weren’t many now they were so close to the city, and she soon grew bored of that too. She clicked her fingers in a steady rhythm but that attracted a look from Ellette that said she wasn’t best pleased, so she had to stop that too. Finally she threw her hands up in the air in a dramatic suggestion of confinement.

“Oh, I’m so bored!” she breathed, and then sighed. “Come on Ellette, talk to me. Even our religious banter, or even that prattling about university is more fun than this. I can’t sit still for so long.” She groaned and clutched her head in her dainty hands, the ringlets of hair fall in cascades around her face.

Ellette looked up from her beads with a smirk on her face.

“I wondered how long you would last without talking to me,” she said with a small laugh. “Not long, as I thought. But it doesn’t matter now, anyway. Look, we’re practically there now.” Ellette waved her fingers out of the window, as if that should prove her statement true, and when Calina was still sat with her eyebrows raised and her mouth open, she waved them again. “Look!” Now Ellette was excited.

And it was true. It seemed that out of nowhere had come the city border, Central Wall, which stood around tall and unwelcoming. It was made of a dark purplish brick, or slate, that even after only a few years of existence had accumulated large patches of thick wet moss growing in between the cracks. Calina let out a sigh of awe as she craned her neck out of the window, looking to see how high the wall actually went- which was higher than she had expected. They were headed for one of the four main portals into the city, a gate named Evelon South; Calina had heard the gate was named for Saint Evelon of Itur who legend told had saved the world from a large scale war back in the fourteenth century. Evelon South was the one of the largest gates giving access to the city, second only to Evelon North, which was the first and finest to be built. The new ruler of Exos had built it to express the accessibility of his policies, and yet his iron-strong will and power.

“It looks like they’re trying to keep people in,” Calina commented, although she wasn’t talking to anybody in particular. Jolas looked around as they pulled to a stop outside of the gates and scoffed.

“In?” he laughed. “It looks more like they’re trying to keep people out to me. I bet they gots all sorts of secrets in there to hide.”

“Then why would they let us in there in the first place?” Calina cast him a quizzical look.

“I don’t know. Maybe they like the variety.”

If that was some dry or ironic reference to her heritage and nobility Calina didn’t know, but she gave him a scowl anyway, just to be sure that if he was trying to insult her the sentiment wasn’t appreciated. After all, she wasn’t a fool; she hadn’t been accepted into Itur University on her good looks alone. Both Calina and Ellette had taken extensive tests before even being considered for places that had tested them on both their written skills and their ability to communicate ideas across the board. Overall Ellette had scored lower than her on most of the exams, and Calina prided herself on this, until she considered the fact that he sister was almost five years younger than her, and one of the youngest girls to be accepted into Itur.

They had both written exceptionally well on the ‘Moral Issues’ paper, which was the latest to be introduced by the government; Ellette had written excessively about the lack of moral reform within religion in the last century, and Calina has written about the immorality of the sorcery rumours that had been spreading through Exos since the change in government leadership; the essay hadn’t been particularly well crafted, but whoever read it must have agreed with the content for they both were sent their acceptance letters within the month.

Calina slid back inside the cab as Jolas clicked the horses into motion once more. The queue of late morning traffic was just beginning to subside, and Calina knew that from the gates it would take a further half an hour, or thereabouts, to get to the university. Ellette was still sat with her head hanging out of the window like a dog, and this caused Calina to pat her sister’s arms quite violently.

“Ellette,” she hissed. “Get back inside now. Come on, people will see you. What kind of impression are you going to give?”

Ellette appeared a moment later with a sour look spread across her usually mild features. She frowned and then said, rather tartly, “Well, that depends of what kind of people are looking, doesn’t it? And what kind of impression I want to give?”

“Well. I don’t know what kind of impression you’d like to give, but whatever it is you can do it from inside the cab, I’m sure. I won’t have you bringing us both down.”

“Oh for Mif’s sake, I was only looking,” Ellette moaned. “What harm can looking do?”

“You might think it can’t do much, but trust me, it’ll turn people sour to us before we’re even settled. Curiosity killed the cat. I’d rather we stay very much alive and kicking thank you. And, before you make comment, I was speaking metaphorically about our social status,” she said. “Or lack thereof.”

Ellette rolled her eyes and settled back in her seat to watch, glad that at least it was light outside so she could observe their surroundings with a little curiosity without being berated.
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Still, I am liking this so far! Your writing and the details you choose to use really give the sense of a living, breathing world full of culture. Yes, there were a few goof-ups with the writing, but I tend to glaze over those things and enjoy the writing for what it is. I'm liking the two sisters' relationship, and how they have their differences. (I know, I think I've said that already! sweatdrop ) I'm looking forward to seeing what it'll be like once they get to the University, and what more I'll learn about Ellette and Calina.

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Thanks for reading again, and for the feedback.
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No prob! And I just recently started writing Chapter 4 of my story. Dunno when it'll get done, seeing as how this chapter requires A LOT of calculated thought. Heh, this story is almost (ALMOST!!) making me wish I remembered what the books were like that I had to read for Language Arts, such as "Night". Y'know, all that Holocaust stuff . . . The whole story was the main character and his family in a concentration camp, and yet there was a plot behind it. Didn't care too much for the book, but I now wish I could have remembered how the author went about writing it, since I have a similar situation.

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 04, 2009 1:21 pm


I know what you mean about the wishing you could remember more about other books. I do it all the time for the smallest things: scene transitions, character descriptions, especially when I'm working in newer areas for me. =O Usually things work out okay eventually, though. XD

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Yuh. Long one I know. This is chapter two, part one. It's a bit long, but, I'm sure it'll be fine. Anyway, uh, basic spellcheck again. Take your time? gonk XD

First Impressions

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Itur University was just over two miles from the palace, which sat directly in the centre of Central City. It was made up of four different Halls of Residence, Calina learned, that sat in a sort of circle at each of the four points on the compass, their wings stretching so each hall almost met but only for a small garden that marked the division. It was, Calina thought quite romantically, almost like their own little city, with teashops and restaurants and cute little water fountains, and almost immediately after stepping out of the cab with Ellette at her side she decided that she absolutely loved it.

Bellake Hall, said their acceptance letters, was the name of the hall in which they would be spending the next three years of their lives. It was the smallest of the four, but the one closest to the palace, and was built from chunky slabs of dusty silverish stone ingrained with small pieces of quartz crystal that seemed to shimmer in the afternoon light. When Jolas pulled up outside in the front courtyard, the girls climbed out slowly and in awe, both of them with their mouths open. Even Ellette, who up until that moment had been wondering how long it would be until she could go home, was amazed by the grandeur of the building, and that was just from the outside. Art and architecture- those were her modest indulgences- were to be found everywhere in abundance; from the great stone pillars and multitudes of status to the promise of paintings lining every wall, Ellette soon found herself smiling at the prospect of a little adventure.

Jolas helped them unload their luggage, which was then sent ahead to be kept somewhere just off the main hall, in waiting for their room allocations. Jolas seemed to know more than them about the whole system, despite the fact that he had never stepped foot in Central City before that day; Calina thought that it must have something to do with the small piece of paper he kept drawing from his pocket to look at quizzically. Maybe a letter from their father? There was a little comfort in that idea, at least, the fact that he might at least care for them in some respect, even if he didn’t particularly like either one of them.

“Are we just to wait here then?” Calina asked Jolas as he was unloading the last of their bags. He slid the small hatbox onto the floor, and it landed with a fwump. Calina had to stop herself from snapping at him, reminding herself that he was the only one who knew what she was supposed to be doing around about now, and she really didn’t want to make a fool of herself. “Well, are we?” she asked again when he didn’t reply. Ellette stood by the side of the cab, staring up at the side of the building as though that were the face of her God. What a fat lot of help she was.

“No,” Jolas said. It was obvious that he was trying to annoy her now, and Calina had no idea why. She pulled a pleading, helpless face and tried again.

“Well, where do we go then, if we don’t stay here?” She looked around for any sign of other students, but the courtyard was eerily empty: Either they were really early, or Jolas and Papa had messed up the calculations and they were late. Sweet Exos she hoped it was the former.

“Where do you-” he began to answer her question with another question but for some reason decided against it. Maybe it had something to do with the disapproving look Ellette cast in his direction, or maybe not. Calina didn’t know, but she didn’t mind. Maybe she would get somewhere with him now. “Uh, it says here that the new students should go to the main parlour,” he told them, pulling the slip of paper from his breast pocket. For a moment Calina wondered why their own acceptance letters hadn’t told them where they should meet, but the thought was soon lost as she decided that there were probably other more pressing matters to be worrying about now, like where that Main Parlour was.

“Do you think we should go now?” Ellette said, confirming her own thoughts. “I mean, I don’t want to stand around here any longer, I feel like such a fool. Please can we go in and try and find the parlour?” Ellette had paled considerably since they had climbed out of the cab, probably from nerves, and the unusual white of her skin contrasted greatly with the darkness of her hair. She wiped her fringe from her eyes, tucking a longer strand of hair behind her left ear, and then began to worry her teeth against her bottom lip.

“Yes. It feels odd standing out here with nobody around.” The courtyard was deserted but for a single young man who had just walked out of the entrance to Bellake Hall and was now headed in the opposite direction to them. The cobbles seemed to echo up every sound they made and amplify it to magnificent proportions, even a sound so little as the scraping of a suitcase across the ground, and these unnaturally loud noises were then thrown off what seemed to be each and every pillar that stood around the sides of the heavily ornamented yard. “Do you need us any longer?” Calina made sure she asked Jolas before they left. She didn’t want him making some fatal error that she could then be blamed for.

He was stood with all the bags around his feet looking relatively lost and unsure, but he shook his head anyway and gesture that they should leave him to his job. It was what he was getting paid for.

“No, that’s okay,” he assured them. “Miss Calina, Miss Ellette, it has been a pleasure to escort you this far. I hope to see you again at some point.” He took the small flat cap from his head and bent over in something of a regal, mocking bow. Calina didn’t bother to even give that an answer, and so she turned away from him before he could rise.

“Good bye Mister Jolas,” Ellette said politely. “And thank you.”

He nodded to her, and then went back to checking each of their bags in turn. Ellette wandered over to Calina and attempted to link her arm through her sisters. At first Calina resisted, but where was the use in that? She was sure to make enough enemies in this place as it was, she might as well accept her sister as an ally now, hadn’t she?

“You didn’t need to thank him,” she told her snidely. “That’s what he gets paid to do.” Well, there was no sense in being overly nice to her, was there? After all, she was the older sibling: Isn’t it a sister’s job to make life a pain? Calina thought so, and it amused her to no end when Ellette took her arm back and stormed off ahead by herself- at least until she reached the entrance to the hall, then she stopped. She turned around and gave Calina a ‘hurry up let’s get inside look’ and it was obvious that she definitely wasn’t about to go inside by herself, whether Calina had wanted her to or not.

The open foyer that adjoined the doorway was, like the courtyard, empty. It was a large room, from which two staircases linked onto at ninety-degree angles from one main set of stairs at the far end of the room, opposite the door. Inside it was cooler than it had been out in the warm, September air, and there was an unnaturally cool, yet not unpleasant breeze floating through from one of the five rooms that exited to the right side of the doorway.

For a moment Ellette and Calina stood together, side-by-side, just in front of the door as they let their eyes adjust to the dimmer lighting inside. Once the blinding white spots had dissipated from her vision, Calina found herself gazing around the room- if you could call it a room; surely it should have a name more grand? The walls were a pale mauve, bordered with thin swirling patterns halfway down, and along every wall there was a selection of antique paintings and statues sitting on small pedestals, which grew up from the shiny wooden floor like vines in a jungle.

“Which one of those do you suppose is the Main Parlour?” Calina asked quietly, afraid that if she spoke too loud she may be heard throughout the whole Hall.

Ellette shrugged.

“It’s bound to be one of the bigger ones, isn’t it?”

“How can we tell if they’re big or not just from looking at the outside?” Calina raised her eyebrows, unsure of her sister’s logic.

“Well, I guess we’ll just have to go and have a look, won’t we? We’ll probably be able to hear people if it’s a busy room.”

“Fair point.”

Together they headed for the right side of the foyer, walking past each of the five doors in turn, and then walking back again, until they found one that sounded promising. Ellette put her ear to the door, while Calina stood around nervously, swinging her purse back and forth and trying to look as natural as possible. It was the third door from the entrance that Ellette had chosen, and she opened it a little to peer inside.

“Hello? Is anybody there?”

Calina was stood on the wrong side of the door, but the voice from within was difficult not to hear. Ellette glanced back at Calina, who shrugged, and then she opened the door. Together the two sisters poked their heads around the door, Ellette more forward as Calina hung back, afraid of appearing in a compromising position. All she could make out around the thick wooden door was a mostly empty room, and on a small chaise longue, reclining comfortably, was a middle-aged woman with owlish glasses and a book resting on her chest. Calina didn’t know where the noises had been coming from before: Presumably she was reading to herself, for it didn’t seem as though there was anybody else in the room.

“Can I help you?” the woman asked, her nose wrinkling as her glasses slipped down.

Ellette went to step forward a little. “Uh, we’re-”

“Oh, you’re new,” the woman said by way of dismissal. Ellette tossed Calina a confused look. Calina shrugged her shoulders again and pulled a face. They stood in the doorway for a moment, unsure of what to do. The woman had almost immediately started reading her novel again, but she soon put it back down. “I’m sorry, did you want something?”

“Yes, uh, would you please be kind enough to direct us to the Main Parlour? I’m afraid we’re a little lost.”

“Oh, no chaperone. Of course.” The woman gave them a small smile. “You see the big staircase out there?” Calina checked just to make sure, and nodded. “Well, there’s a door underneath the left side that’s a bit hidden. You should go there.”

“Is that the Main Parlour?” asked Calina, not trusting this woman’s unspecified credentials.

“It’s where you need to go.”

“Thank you,” Ellette gave a small bob of a curtsey and then left the room, closing the door behind her.

Once they had taken a number of steps away, Calina grabbed Ellette’s arm and said stiffly, “You’re not supposed to bow. We’re nobility.”

Ellette sniffed.

“I’ll bow if I want to. It felt necessary, and rude not to.”

Calina threw her hands up in the air in frustration at her sister’s lack of social nous and then began to lead her over to the staircase which the woman had suggested.

“Oh there’s no hope for you,” she said lightly. “You would have been better born a poor girl, or a Seture.”

“Religion is something to occupy the empty time, not to fill the whole day. I wouldn’t want to spend my life in some Mif Unionist Setury, that would be a waste.”

“A waste of good looks,” Calina muttered.

“A waste of time. I can do so much more for people out here.”

“Whatever,” Calina brushed her off with a roll of her eyes. “I wish you’d stop talking about it.”

“Then you should stop bringing it up.”

“I should.”

They crossed to the staircase and, as the woman had advised, there by the side, just before the stairs they saw a door which was partially hidden in shadow. It was just as large as all of the others, but still Calina was sceptical. How could there by a room through this door, unless the staircase went nowhere? She glanced up, and the staircase did appear to go somewhere. This must be some kind of joke.

“It looks like a broom closet,” she commented laconically.

“Oh hush.” Ellette glared at her and headed for it, careless of her sister’s current cynicism and pessimistic acceptance of the world.

The room that they found themselves in shortly after was much more than Calina had hoped for from the little door. It was round, and quite large with a dome shaped ceiling that reached its pinnacle with a round window of glistening glass, showing nothing but the careless blue of the skies above. The floor was carpeted with a fussy reddish colour, and was soft under their worn travelling shoes. Calina didn’t quite understand how it was possible that this room could be here, but she wasn’t going to complain; on first glance the room looked like exactly the place they were looking for.

Inside the room there were many people milling about, young women of around their own ages. Many of them were dressed in their finest dresses, it seemed, but their finery was no match for Calina’s ideals. She gave the room a cursory scan and sniffed delicately to express her disinterest.

“Well, they don’t look very society,” she said with a shake of her head. “We must be in the wrong room.”

“Oh la,” Ellette murmured softly. “I don’t think so. Look at her.” She gestured towards the podium at the far side of the room, upon which stood an imposing middle-aged woman. Her clothes, unlike those of the girls around her, were fine and carefully embroidered; her wig- for it was surely not real hair- was tall and white, and her face powdered almost to the point of obsession. Calina and Ellette glanced at each other curiously.

“She looks as frumpy as an old cow,” Calina muttered as her features shifted into a frown. “I still think we’re in the wrong room. These girls are all- well- they’re not who we should be mingling with.”

“Why? Because they’re not societ-ee?” Ellette questioned, annoyance apparent in her demeanour.

“Exactly.”

“Sometimes I really wonder about you Calina, I do. You’re so caught up in your own little world that you fail to see the-” Ellette’s voice was drowned out as the woman at the back of the room began to speak. Her voice was strong and commanding, and her pronunciation- if not her appearance in Calina’s book- betrayed a good education and upper class upbringing. Ellette stopped speaking and the two sisters turned to listen.

“Good afternoon,” the woman addressed the room loudly. Her voice was almost basso, trembling with power, and she stood tall and proud. Her earrings were like Aevemass decorations, hanging low and heavy- they were possibly the most fashionable accessories on her person, though her dress was possibility as late as last season’s colours. “I am Madame Delehan, and as you may well know, your Head Mistress here at Itur. I think a spot of tea, and then we will be arranging rooms.” She smiled at the congregation of girls, many of who smiled back nervously, and then she climbed down from the podium and sent off for the tea girls, who wheeled great trays into the parlour from another room off to the side. Calina, not wanting to appear rude, took a cup of tea when she was offered, but it was too sweet and so she hardly drank any of it. Ellette refused, and instead took to staring rather impolitely at the Head.

“She seems very fashionable,” Ellette commented, gazing across at Madame Delehan’s ruffled sheeyma-material dress. “Her dress is sheeyma, look, like yours.”

“Fashion, ha,” Calina snorted. “Frumpy.”

“How would you know?”

“Because I’m soc-”

“If you say society I’ll stop speaking to you.”

“Well it’s true!” Calina exclaimed. “I don’t know what you’ve got against it.”

“Against what? Your warped sense of importance? You think that because you’re beautiful you’re important, and because you’re important you’re always right! Why don’t you stop being so foolish?” Ellette shot back. Instantly she regretted it, and Calina could see this by the way she blushed furiously and began to fumble at her prayer beads. In truth the statements hadn’t hurt her pride in the slightest. Ellette was simple-minded: What did she know of society, or the people in it? “I’m sorry,” Ellette mumbled dolefully.

“Oh that’s alright, Letty,” Calina said and patted her on the shoulder. “You’ll understand when you get a little older.”

Calina took the time, perched on a small straight-backed chair with her tea in her hands, to look around at the other girls in the room. It appeared as though there were a majority of girls from Kalippe West, like Ellette and herself, and a number of Northern Aephianese girls with their caramel coloured skin. It didn’t look as though there were many from the tribes in Eula, but Calina thought that was to be expected, after all they were so uncivilised, and they had their own schooling system still, didn’t they? None of the girls, though, looked like nobility, or even as though they had much money to their names at all. In fact, some of the younger ones looked like they had been accepted on charity alone- and this was a fact that worried Calina immensely. Wasn’t this supposed to be one of Exos’ most honoured universities? Hadn’t it been officially opened by their ruler when he came to power? Where were all the rich girls?

Only one way to find out.

As Madame Delehan was making her rounds of the room, greeting each of the girls individually, Calina caught her with a small wave of her hand, daintily and with a practiced grace. Madame Delehan crossed the room quickly, her feet barely rustling the sheeyma gown around them as she moved, giving the illusion that she was in fact floating.

“Madame Delehan,” Calina pronounced in her most sophisticated voice. “How nice to meet you. I’m Miss Calina Roe, Ugas Nobility, the House of Ikala, and this is my sister, Miss Ellette.” She was considering offering the Head her hand, but she eventually decided against it. Madame Delehan didn’t look like much of a hand-shaker.

“Ah, yes, the Roe girls,” Madame Delehan murmured softly, eyeing both of them in turn. “I’ve heard a lot about you two.”

“You have?” Calina couldn’t help it; her curiosity always got the better of her. “All of it good, I hope.”

“Oh my, of course,” Madame Delehan affirmed, though how serious she was being Calina couldn’t tell. She raised her eyebrows when she spoke, and her head nodded backwards and forwards continuously, making it confusing to read what she was really trying to say. Calina wondered if she nodded her head like that even when she was disagreeing with somebody. “Did you want something in particular?” Madame Delehan asked, then, pursing her rouged lips as she waited for an answer. “Only, I’m a very busy woman, as you can imagine, and I have a lot of business to attend to. First I have to get you girls accommodated.”

“It was about that, actually,” Calina said, relieved that she didn’t have to bring the subject up by herself. “It was only, I was wondering with whom we would be sharing a room. I’m sure it would be highly inappropriate for us to share with-” she gestured around the room, unable to find the correct words. “Well, to share with anybody here.”

Madame Delehan raised her eyebrows even higher- if that was possible- and let out a vibrational laugh that echoed around the room. Calina looked around nervously, hoping that nobody else was paying attention; not that it mattered, they didn’t matter, but it was hard to control a flushing face once the red started to spread. She’d learnt that from experience.

“There is something wrong with your fellow students?” Madame Delehan asked with a thin-lipped smile.

“Well, yes, actually.” Calina was trying not to be rude, but it appeared she was failing miserably. Ellette turned away and pretended she wasn’t listening, just so she wouldn’t have to face the embarrassment of being related to her sister. “Madame, we- my sister and I- are not of the dormitory class. We are Ugas Nobility, and we’ve come here to-”

“How very sorry for you, my dear. What a shame.” Madame Delehan brushed her off with a dismissive tone. “Now, if you don’t mind I’m sure we can resume this conversation after I’ve sorted out your roomies.” She waited for no reply, turned straight on heel and walked away back around the room to greet the rest of the girls.

“She didn’t even listen,” Ellette said softly, waiting for Calina’s reaction. “Don’t bother getting upset about it. She wasn’t even listening.”

Roomies?” blurted Calina as if Ellette had said nothing, aghast at the horrific turn of events. “Roomies? I thought if we were early we wouldn’t have to have them!”

“Well, obviously not.” Ellette said, finally turning to face her sister. “Look, it won’t be the end of the world, will it? If we have to share a room with a few people? Just because we come from the nobility it doesn’t give us the right to request whatever rooms at will, Lina. These people have just as many rights as we do.”

“They don’t,” said Calina sourly. “That’s why we’re nobility and they’re not.” She pouted and tried to calm herself by readjusting the small silver butterfly clip in her hair.

“But Calina we’re not even proper nobility!” Ellette exclaimed in frustration. “We’re not even-”

“Hush!” Calina cried. “Oh at least if you’re going to berate me, do it softly! Just because we’re not First Generation, or Newly Proclaimed, that doesn’t mean that our titles don’t mean anything.”

“They don’t mean anything. Fourth Generation means we haven’t been proper nobility for three generations now. Seriously, Calina, you need to get your priorities straight. We’re here to learn.”

“But these people are common!” Calina hissed. “Letty, we may not be that rich, but we definitely don’t belong here.”

“Yes we do. Sometimes I think all you care about are materials possessions.”

“You can’t get through life on faith alone.”

“Ah, you’re wrong again.” Ellette was now tired of arguing. She shook her head and her black fringe bounced across her forehead. Why could Calina never just listen? She was tired, but she wasn’t going to give in that easily. “People have lived their whole lives on nothing more than blind faith. It may not be what I intend to do, but it didn’t do them any harm, did it? Maybe it would do you some good to think about going to church-”

Don’t.” Calina held up her hand before Ellette could even get past the word church. ‘Church’ wasn’t in her vocabulary, and it was never going to be, so Ellette could stop that talk right now. Why did everything always turn to religion with her? “Don’t even bother saying it. You won’t get anywhere.”

“I know. I never do.”

“Then why do you keep trying?” Calina could feel a migraine coming on.

“Because you’ve got to give in eventually.” Ellette looked over Calina’s shoulder, at the podium, and changed track. “Oh, look. She’s getting ready to speak again.”

“Oh, fantastic. Can’t you see how ecstatic I am?” Calina rolled her eyes, but turned her attention to the Head anyway. After all, she would be a powerful enemy, and not one to make on the first day.

“Marvellous girls,” Madame Delehan was saying. “Now, as you girls are lacking chaperones- of course this isn’t a problem, it just means we need to invest a little more time in your safety- I will be putting most of you into dormitories, though there are a number of girls who I will want to speak to later.” At this point she made eye contact with a number of girls, mostly closer to the podium, but a few were further back, possibly out of embarrassment, Calina and Ellette included. She then turned her attention back to the rest of the girls. “So, if we just remain patient I’m sure we can settle this relatively quickly. Good? Good.”

After this Madame Delehan and the tea girls set about ordering the new students into groups of twelve. Twelve to each dormitory, they were assigned by name, family and age. The tea girls- or rather, women- who had taken care that all of the crockery had been removed from the room, split themselves into teams, each woman taking charge of one group.

The whole process took a little over half an hour, in which time Calina and Ellette sat together at the back of the room, awaiting their own designation. When their names were not called out, Calina breathed a sigh of relief and relaxed a little. At least things couldn’t possibly get that humiliating; it was like being herded like cattle, grouped and then prodded into place one by one. No, at least their family name had saved them that small dishonour.

“She does look like a cow, doesn’t she?” Calina said quietly after a while. Ellette thought about it for a moment, and then smirked.

“I supposed she does really. It’s all in the hips, and that wig.”

“She looks like a cow in a lady’s hairpiece.” They laughed at that, tittering together both out of the small humour and their own nervousness at what was about to come. For saying this was their first trip away from home, Calina thought, it hadn’t been a particularly enjoyable one yet. Hopefully that would soon change.

Once the rest of the girls had been sorted into their respective dorms, they left with the tea women, who turned out to actually be chaperones for each dormitory. In their dowdy grey uniforms and white aprons they looked almost like nursemaids. Another humiliation Calina was extremely glad they seemed to have avoided. They trailed out together, in groups, one by one until soon the room was almost empty. There were perhaps, ten or fifteen girls left now, enough for a full dormitory. Calina felt her heart sink; what if Madame Delehan put them all together, because they were the richest?

She looked at them- the other girls- and decided that they didn’t look rich. Not that rich. On the whole. Although there were three girls huddled together by one of the windows, with flaxen blonde hair and perfect skin, and jewels around their necks. They were richer than Calina and Ellette, and more fashionable, but they were obviously in the same situation. Perhaps it wasn’t a matter of money at all, or titles, perhaps it was all to do with the chaperones. Calina couldn’t fathom why girls such as those should have no chaperone, but then she didn’t quite understand why her own father had sent her to Itur without one.

“Right then, girls,” Madame Delehan addressed the remaining girls with a smile. She climbed down from the podium and gestured that they should all gather around. Calina climbed reluctantly to her feet along with Ellette, and a number of other girls who were hanging back around the far side of the room. “I know this is perhaps not what you would like to hear, at least for some of you.” She looked specifically at the blonde girls, and then at Calina. “But I’m afraid that to keep you all safe the university has had devise a special programme for girls such as yourselves. Without chaperones, or nannies, or nurses. Some of you are here because your parents saw fit to ensure your safety- both physically and socially,” here she looked at the blonde girls again, “and some of you are just lucky. I have decided that you girls should have the luxury of sharing a room with only a small number of other girls, close to your own status, and there you will stay.

“There will no room swapping, no arguments, no rule breaking. You have privilege, but you are not immune. If I find that any of you ladies have reneged on your promises to the board- and I will find out- you will have your rooms taken from you. It will be dormitories for you like all of the others. Is that understood?”

The girls gave a collective nod of affirmation.

“Good. Now then, for the chaperones.” Calina felt her heart sink, again. Privilege was one thing, but if their chaperones were anything like the others, than she might as well just give up any dreams of having a good life now. She could see the other girls, the blonde ones, look the same way. One of them rolled her eyes, and the tallest began to pout in a way which actually wasn’t unbecoming.

Madame Delehan motioned to somebody, unseen, in the doorway through which the girls had entered first, and only a moment later four fantastical pieces of technology wheeled through. They were humanoid in shape, but robotic in build, with clockwork gears and mechanical limbs. Each had two eyes, almost like camera lenses, which were a deep purple in colour with emerald green rings around them. They were almost hypnotising. Apparently made of brass, each one of them gleamed with the afternoon light that fell through the roof window.

“These wonderful pieces of technology, for those of you who have not had the opportunity to see them before-” Calina could tell that there were only one or two girls who had seen them before, “are called Nurses. They are each programmed to look after their charges, whom I shall assign in just a moment, and from then they will act as your guardians. They will not allow you around the campus by yourselves, especially not at an inappropriately late time, and they are set to record any information which may be damaging to the Hall’s reputation. I would advise that you treat them as you would any chaperone or nanny. With respect.”

The things glided forwards in a way which made them seem almost as if they were walking, and the majority of the girls stepped back skittishly, Calina and Ellette included. They came into the circle of girls to showcase themselves and then went over to Madame Delehan’s side.

“Don’t be afraid of them,” the Head said with a wolfish smile. She was enjoying this. “They’re perfectly harmless, and, well, treat them as humans. They will be important to you, and so you must take care of them. If you don’t take care of them, they won’t take care of you. It’s that simple. And no, ladies, that isn’t a request for you to vandalise school property, for if I catch you there will be hell to pay.” With that she smiled again. “Now then, roomies.”

She looked at each of the girls in turn, as though judging them by their posture and the clothes they were wearing. Calina, when Madame Delehan looked in her direction, made sure to make eye contact and flash her sweetest smile. Hopefully, if they were being arranged by wealth, Ellette and her should be put into a room with the three blonde girls. That was definitely the most she could hope for, but surely it was the least Madame Delehan could do?

She started with the youngest girls, and began to pair them with older ones. There were generally four girls to a room, or two rooms that were adjoined by a small bathroom. As she worked her way up the list of girls, which she had drawn from an unseen pocket in the bosom of her dress, Calina noticed that it was becoming more and more likely that she should get paired with the blonde girls, and she began to grow excited. Finally something was going right!

“Now, Miss Calina and Miss Ellette,” Madame Delehan said to them. There were only a small number of girls left unpaired now, and Calina was anxious to get to her room. “I was considering putting you with the Jensin girls,” she said gesturing to the blondes, “but after our little chat earlier on I felt it would perhaps be more necessary to room you with girls a little less fortunate than yourselves. I’m sure you understand, but it would definitely be beneficial.” She waited for Calina’s reaction, which was to pale in embarrassment and purse her lips, and then she smiled. “Such a clever idea of yours, I must say, wanting to give something back to the world.”

“Oh, but, there must be some mistake,” Calina began to protest. Madame Delehan had twisted their own conversation to use to her advantage. That wasn’t fair! “You see I didn’t mean-”

“There has been no mistake Miss Calina,” Madame Delehan said forcefully. “Now, if I could pair you with Miss Medina Thurr, and her sister Miss Azaliah, then I can get you all off to your rooms to unpack.” Ellette glanced at her sister, who was shocked into submission, and silence.

“It will be okay,” she whispered softly. “It’s only a room.”

“Yes,” Calina said with resignation, her head lowered in shame. “I suppose you’re right.”

Madame Delehan waved her fingers at two of the only girls left, one of whom had taken a seat on one of the chairs, and who was watching the whole process with disinterest. The other girl was younger, and seemed much more enthusiastic. She walked towards Calina and her sister almost immediately and extended her hand.

“Miss Azaliah Thurr,” she said with a grin, her brownish blonde hair bouncing on her shoulders. “But you can call me Az. Everybody else does.” She seemed about the same age as Ellette, Calina thought, but the other girl she couldn’t decide on. She was taller, and much thinner, and if she hadn’t been told that the two girls were related she wouldn’t have guessed as much. The other girl had thick, dark hair that was scraped back into a lax bun and held down by a small bandana-type headband which clashed awfully with her outfit.

“Miss Ellette,” Ellette introduced herself. “It’s very nice to meet you.”

Calina rolled her eyes. Could things get any worse? She supposed their was one plus side, though, at least she wouldn’t have to spent all of her time with these girls, not if she could get around those stupid ticktock Nurse things. They couldn’t be that intelligent, surely?

“Good, well, if that is settle then,” Madame Delehan said brightly. “I think it’s time to show you to your rooms. Follow your designated Nurse, they will show you the way and answer any of your questions.” With that she turned on her heel and headed for the door, not waiting for any questions that her students may have wished to ask her. She was obviously a very busy woman.

The two remaining Nurses which had been waiting patiently for the last girls to be paired headed over to their new charges; one came in Calina’s direction, and the other wheeled silently towards the blonde girls who greeted it with little interest.

“Good afternoon,” said their Nurse. “I am Nurse Annoa. You may call me Nurse, or Annoa, or Nurse Annoa.” The Nurse thing nodded it’s head. Calina couldn’t tell if the sound was coming from the small moving jaw mechanism on the thing’s face, or not, but it sure as hell creeped her out.

“Uh, hello,” Ellette said with a weak smile. The Nurse turned to her and nodded it’s head again, acknowledging her.

“Miss Calina, Miss Medina, Miss Ellette, Miss Az, you shall please follow me. I shall take you to your rooms.” It’s voice was robotic, and tinny, but sounded amazingly female. Ellette glanced at Azaliah, who was staring at the thing in awe, and they smiled at each other.

“Yes, you lead we’ll follow,” said Medina dryly. It was the first thing she had said, and Calina looked at her curiously. She hadn’t noticed before, for the lack of light where Medina had been sitting, but the girl most definitely wasn’t normal. Her skin was tinted a light purple, lilac maybe, as if she suffered from serious circulation problems, although she seemed perfectly healthy, and she was awfully thin. Calina had to refrain from letting her jaw drop. Oh could this get any worse! Not only had they been paired with two girls who looked like they didn’t have a penny to their names, but one of them was purple? This most definitely wasn’t good.

“Yes, we’ll follow,” Calina repeated weakly, beginning to feel faint. She had to say something, or the lump in her throat may have stopped her from breathing altogether.

The Nurse thing moved away slowly, giving them time to get themselves together and follow, and then it- she?- sped up. Azaliah and Ellette went on ahead, chatting amiably, as young girls are prone to do, about everything and anything. Medina didn’t move, as though waiting for Calina to leave before her. Calina hung back, also, gazing at the girl with a mixture of disgust and awe.

“You’re Miss Calina,” Medina said after a moment, attempting to be civil although she was well aware of Calina’s reaction to her. “How nice to meet you.” Was that sarcasm?

“You’re-” Calina was going to greet her; at least try to be polite, but she couldn’t help herself. “You’re purple?” she blurted. Medina snorted.

“Oh, you noticed? I thought the powder might hide it.” Again, sarcasm? Calina couldn’t tell. “Is there something wrong with that?”

“No but, you’re purple,” Calina said again, tripping over her words.

“Yes, and you’re blonde, but I’m not complaining,” Medina retorted in a light tone, all the while keeping a straight face. Her mouth hardly even moved.

Calina was shocked, but not all that perturbed by Medina’s insult. Instead she smiled her best smile, teeth and all. Maybe Medina would be a challenge to overcome, rather than an unsolvable problem. Maybe the purple girl wouldn’t be too damaging, really. Maybe Ellette was right. Or maybe she was wrong, maybe this would be the worst three years of her life. Either way, Calina knew that she was going to be in for a bumpy ride, and one thing was for sure: She didn’t like Medina Thurr. At all.

“Touché. Well played. Let’s follow them, shall we?”

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 4:13 pm


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Long chapter, but it was entertaining! Man, I'm starting to really dislike Calina! xd What a pompous b*#@!, lol. But, that was obviously your intention, so you did a good job! I've never had to write about such a stuck-up character before, but I could see it as being a challenge. And, heh, "Az"? "Central City"? Love the little references you got there! wink And a purple girl? I'm curious to see what her story is!

I think there were a few spelling errors, like you added an "s" or or forgot an "ed" at the end, but other than that it was all written well. Next chapter, please! 3nodding

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