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 Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 3:30 pm
Keep up the good pace and keep pushing yourself. The story and the storytelling is really very good, but I can see lots of ways you can improve it. Keep it up and you might even become a great writer!
Oh, and I laughed when Kracker appeared. I had thought of suggesting you add Pocket and then the other popular Cult friends in there somewhere, but decided against it.
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Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 5:31 pm
Wow, I was going to ask who Echo was, then as I was scrolling down I saw his name on Fish's fan list. Lol, great chapter.
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Posted: Wed Oct 18, 2006 4:39 am
@Masamune - Thanks.
@Fish - Thanks. Curious what improvements do you think would be good?
I was going to add pocket but Trenn was never on so I just haven't asked him yet.
@FMB - Echo is a good friend of mine who I got to jion the Cult about two weeks ago. Glad you enjoyed the chapter!
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Posted: Wed Oct 18, 2006 4:06 pm
Wow! I sound cool! Keep up the good work Seaphron.
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Posted: Wed Oct 18, 2006 9:30 pm
whee wow I was squeeing over that whole little scene. I was SO not expecting it. ... well, maybe a little bit, but not so soon. whee heart much awesomeness in that scene though.
Cool part with Echo in there too. and Eliwoods message.
I noticed a slight discrepancy though. First, it was said that Rubina died because of a hoard of bob-ombs, but later, when Fish first announced it, he said that it was koopas. maybe I just read it wrong, but I'm pretty sure that's what I saw.
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 4:36 am
@Echo - Thanks!
@Koosei - Yep, you are right. My fault... I'll fix it later cause I am headed for school. Glad that you enjoyed the rest though.
Sorry gus but I have had a pretty tough school week and the next chapter will most likely not be out until saturday if i am unlucky.
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 9:08 am
That's alright, Seaphron. School takes main priority after all. Good luck with the busy week.
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Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2006 9:56 am
Good! Alright I will hopefully have it up by midnight to one tonight.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 8:50 pm
Chapter 17 Added and Part of 16 that was cut on accident has also been added!
Sorry it took so long!
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 8:59 pm
Nice chapter. Bern is the capital of Switzerland! Must defend Bern!
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 9:15 pm
whee going to Pherae! awesome!! I LOVE Fire Emblem! It's so much fun! This is gonna be an awesome part!
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 9:22 pm
Ahhhhh. I was wondering what member Eliwood was. xP Great update as usual. You're becoming a better writer, and I love reading it. This is the only Cult story I've really gotten into, and it's definitely a good one.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 9:29 pm
Great chapter (besides a few grammatical errors every once in a while, at least not as bad as Zen's ship one lol ). To war!!!
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 9:55 pm
That's right, kids. Leader of the armada. cool THANKS SEAPHRON. =D
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Posted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 8:35 am
@Masamune - Huzzah!
@Koosei - I agree FE is an awesome game!
@Fish - Thank you!
@FMB - Yeah, I noticed them to, I'll fix them in a minute.
@Betman - No problem!
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