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 Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 10:57 pm
Ants In Your Underpants Qyp Ants In Your Underpants Jump into the sky hello everyone new narutard here smile
alot of work has been put into this rp guild huh and pierce the darkness of space. Explosive amounts of work. Jump into the sky
i heard the word explosive smile can i light the bomb
and pierce the darkness of space. No.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 10:58 pm
I need your thoughts on my OC I didnt want to make him a marry-sue or godly I think i did a good job balancing everything Quote: Characters~*~ Character Name: Ginta Age: 18 Gender: Male Bloodline: None(Opt Uzumaki) Ninja Skill Levels:
---> Ninjutsu :**
--->Taijutsu :****
--->Genjutsu :*
--->Kinjutsu :*Unknown Ability:Spirit Call=This power lets him draw out the spirit of a object,Once the spirit is drawn out of the object it can no longer be returned the object is destroyed and the spirit becomes a power Thunder/Earth/Fire/Wind/Water. Ginta named this ability Spirit Call. Weapons: None Ninja Weapons: None Jutsu: Substitution Jutsu Village: Konoha/Leaf village Element: Wind Rank: Gen.E Jump into the sky
The reason i made him have that ability is because its not uber powerful it has a nice balance to it should i have put more info on draw backs and stuff.
and as you can see he is so not perfect . his only other defense is taijutsu he doesn't use any moves like lotus or anything its mainly speed and strength .
Next up is your thoughts on my fan fiction its kinda dark and a little off-key XD.
they maybe errors XD
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In a cave surrounded by a deep forest...
It happened the one known as Maradra has finally gotten the nine-tails.as he falls to death he remembers all his promises ,all the ones he never made come true .
he remembers Sasuke ,Sakura and his friends he had won over.
he sheds a tear remembering how he wasn't able to save Sasuke. as he draws his last breath whispering"Sasuke....".It starts to rain....
a few minutes later Team Kakashi and Hinata make it to Naruto but it was to late. Sakura screams in the rain"NARUTO!!!!!!!!!!"
In the Abyss...
Naruto falls down a dark abyss, remembering how big of a failer he was,all of a sudden he sees a shadow in the abyss Calling him"I can bring you back" the shadow says.
"go away.."Naruto says with a depression in his eyes unlike before.
"become one with me and your promises can be fulfilled" .
Naruto thinks about his promises"can you really..."
The Shadow says"Yes take my hand"
Naruto takes the shadows hand as he laughs evilly as he fuses with Naruto.
back in the real world...
Narutos eyes shoot open.
~Fade out~
i want to know if i should contenue this or let it stay in my head surprised ...
there sorry sad
and pierce the darkness of space.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:04 pm
Well, considering in this place, it is like 600 years after Naruto dies of old age... So you will have to change your character. Go use the profile skeleton here...You should read the story... All techniques, clans, etc need to be approved. Here.EDIT: The fan fiction is hard to read, You need to edit it so the literacy and grammar is, readable. But other than that, go for it.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:11 pm
Jump into the sky Ginta is just my fav oc i never planed on using him here
do you think you can help me with literacy i never finished school so i never really learned alot and i really want to get into fan fiction.
But i have gotten better with spelling and everything since the internet came along . and pierce the darkness of space.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:12 pm
Er, how old are you and when did you leave school? Where you from?
Do not have to finish school to be "smart" or what ever... I sucked at school, I found working for an education pointless. You don't need a piece of paper telling you are smart. Learn what you want to learn, not what you have to learn. ********, School is the most idiotic invention of all time. Greeks were smart with how they had a small group with a tutor, and they just debated constantly, making their minds work hardcore. But 10 years old, they were smarter than Einstein. Comparing Homer to Tolkien is like comparing a tiger to an ant.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:22 pm
Jump into the sky well iv had a learning disability all the way to 8th grade .
i got bad sick and couldn't go back to normal school . even know i cant be around a but load of people.
iv been working hard on my spelling and stuff so i can get into some awesome roll plays but most of the time they are rude to me for not being lit enough .
they call me a retard so i stopped role playing for a while, to work on my stuff
but so far this is the best iv got.
and pierce the darkness of space.
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:49 pm
Psssh, elitist fags those are. They the real retards. You are not one, alright? You have fine writing skills, barely anything actually needs work.
Okay, as a start, as a tip, just capitalize "i" when you say "I am blah blah." All the time. The letter "i" as in, yourself, is always capitalized okay? ^^ And capitalize the letters are the start of sentences...
Also, no need to put spaces between the full stop and comer.
But other than that, your fine.
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 12:36 am
Qyp Psssh, elitist fags those are. They the real retards. You are not one, alright? You have fine writing skills, barely anything actually needs work. Okay, as a start, as a tip, just capitalize "i" when you say "I am blah blah." All the time. The letter "i" as in, yourself, is always capitalized okay? ^^ And capitalize the letters are the start of sentences... Also, no need to put spaces between the full stop and comer. But other than that, your fine. Jump into the sky
OK thanks
read my post in academy form
and pierce the darkness of space.
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 2:16 am
Hey welcome fellow Narutard! Your post in the RP Academy is very good, just the capitalization errors that Qyp pointed out.
I got to agree, school is a bunch of bullshit, a lot of the stuff you learn isn't even applied in daily situations. However that piece of paper does give you better odds at landing a decent job sweatdrop Damn society.
Ugh, it's 5:34am right now, gotta go to practice, just wanted to check the guild before anything.
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 2:41 am
Yeah, "we need evidence that can be easily faked by those that have the guts and brains that you are educated." "Okay, let me get my resume with about 100 years worth of work that I have done in the last year."
Screw education, it's not needed to be a lot of things. Retail needs simple math, same with Hospitality. That's about it... Customer service comes naturally to those who are good with people...
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 4:30 am
eh school............ speaking of which i gotta get my little sister for lunch XP
welcome to the guild ants! I wont complain about your grammar if you don't about mine ;P
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 4:59 am
A variety of people is what makes a good community ;D
School also teaches individualism and yet, the tests are the same for everyone... the government and psychologists probably think parents are the main cause for screwed up kids. Pssh, yeah, school has more mixed up messages than some religion that says God is the yin yang symbol upside down in the toilet eating cheerios.
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 5:11 am
hey my moms a psychologist ( sort a XP more of a therapist )
Every thing has an influence on how people act. Parents, school, culture, friends, religions....even the very person influences his or hers out come ( at least in my opinion) now some things have more of an impact then others but parents are sometimes the cause of some screwed up kids. Its a cry for attention mostly ( dont get me wrong I'm not saying they are the only cause cuz thats not true but they are a important factor according to studies and cases my mom as seen )
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 8:11 am
this is the internet. everyone has problems XD
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Posted: Mon Jan 11, 2010 8:57 am
ha ha
such words of wisdom onix ;P
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